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4/6/3 senryu
One Thousand Cranes
: The Wishing Fountain by Gypsy Blue Rose



wishing fountain 
by the cancer center —
full of coins





 

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Senryu is an unrhymed Japanese poem that uses imagistic language to convey the essence of a human nature. It uses a juxtaposition of two concrete images in a way that prompts the reader to make an insightful connection between the two.

The best senryu avoid the poet's views, the poet is the OBSERVER.

FORM Japanese senryu is written in 17 syllables and three lines ( 5/7/5) BUT in English is 17 syllables OR LESS in any combination (3/5/3 - 2/7/6 - 5/6/5 - etc). AVOID punctuation, alliteration, metaphor, personification, and capital letters (proper names are okay). To pause before the satori you can use a dash, sometimes a comma is okay, but we keep punctuation to a minimum.

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason." - Novalis

     

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