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Kake Kotoba Suite- 31 syllables or less in 5 lines
One Thousand Cranes
: Left All Alone by Gypsy Blue Rose
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last pain-stricken bird
sings the saddest song
with the haunting sound
of yearning for his mate 
lost to dismal death

      death
              death
                      death


perched on a burned bough
over sizzling amber waves
inviting the inevitable end
‘cause she's gone
to cavernous halls

      halls
            halls
                   halls


it’s more pain
his little heart can take
standing alone
draped with raging cries 
amidst cinders of lost love

      lost love
                    lost love
                                 lost love

 

Left All Alone




 

Author Notes
Picture of the Maui Parrotbill bird

amber waves = volcano lava

The Maui parrotbill bird, is critically endangered, with less than 150 individuals left. Five of the seven rare bird species were killed in an epidemic of avian malaria brought by mosquitoes. A male bird was seen singing by itself on the slopes of the windward slopes of Haleakala volcano.

KAKE KOTOBA is a Japanese poetic form that uses poetic devices (personification, alliteration, metaphor, imagery, juxtaposition, etc ). FORM 31 SYLLABLES OR LESS IN FIVE LINES. The poetic devices are like hanging words building a bridge between two images. Better translated as: Pun, word play, words with a double meaning, very much like haiku or senryu but in five lines.kake kotoba wikipedia

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Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason." - Novalis

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