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The Trijan Refrain, consists of three 9-line stanzas.
Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
: Mountain sights by JLR

The deep blue stream I gaze upon
a wind, unkind, blows hard.
Westerlies help dark clouds roll on.
Creeks ripped by snowmelt scarred.
Firs felled, sodden, are decaying,
safer now the creek conveying,
Firs felled, sodden,
Firs felled, sodden.
In frothy waters, limbs swaying.

The horizon I gaze upon
an old tune sets the pace
while walking east, feeling led on,
humming some great old bass,
a folksy tune sing-along song.
round more or less hither and yon.
a folksy tune,
a folksy tune!
Plodding forward, traveling on.

The waterfall I gaze upon
flows so fast, descending,
crashing, splashing as logs hang-on
to the creek's banks bending,
rumbling downward, the mist whirling
rainbows dance in sunlight swirling
rumbling downward,
rumbling downward,
Snowmelt carried to sea twirling.

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Author Notes
Potlatch poetry club submission: Trijan Refrain
*The Trijan Refrain, consists of three 9-line stanzas.
*Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different.

*The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the
double-refrain for lines 7 and 8.
*The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows: Rhyme scheme: ababccddc
Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4/4/8

     

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