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One Thousand Cranes
: Hail on the Rooftop by Gypsy Blue Rose
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hail on the rooftop
roars beating plastic and straw
of homeless man'
s hut

clink, clank, clunk, plink, plunk
drum to the beat of his heart
rap, rattle, stutter

prays the roof holds other night
tap tip-top hail laughs haha,
man hopes the sun comes out fast


 

Author Notes
I used Onomatopoeia as a poetic device. Onomatopoeia is the formation of a word by imitation of a sound.

The concept of hail sound and destitute man is a type of zen writing which is part of Japanese poetry history

KOJIKI is the oldest poetic form that dates back to 712. It's a compilation of poetic history and mythology passed on by mouth from generation to generation in the 8th century before written Japanese existed. Modern Kojiki can use any theme. The Kojiki is divided into three parts: upper 5/7/5 - middle 5/7/5 - lower 7/7/7 syllables count. it uses a kigo (seasonal reference) ; click here to see list of seasons ; wikipedia

Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem.

Gypsy

pictures from google public domain

     

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