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haiku (in the far pasture) by kiwisteveh
Haiku Poetry Contest contest entry


across spring pasture

two wild horses gallop free

my heart leaps

 

Author Notes
I have edited this following some excellent suggestions from several reviewers.

Yep, I know this is 5-7-3 - the rules state that it is not compulsory to follow the more traditional 5-7-5 format and it is clear, at least to me, that the shortened satori line is much stronger.

     

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