Ode to Child's Pose
Discovering Yoga95 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Amada, you have incorporated the required contest words smoothly into your free-verse poem. You also use alliteration and descriptive detail well as you capture the feeling of serenity and healing yoga provides for the speaker. Brooke
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Amada, you have incorporated the required contest words smoothly into your free-verse poem. You also use alliteration and descriptive detail well as you capture the feeling of serenity and healing yoga provides for the speaker. Brooke
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you Brooke for telling me I was able to project that feeling of peace and serenity into this piece.
Comment from patmedium
ff emotion
Amada... this is wonderful... it leads your reader gently, yet firmly forward into your words, rather like adopting the pose in the image. Thankyou for an interesting read. Pat.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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ff emotion
Amada... this is wonderful... it leads your reader gently, yet firmly forward into your words, rather like adopting the pose in the image. Thankyou for an interesting read. Pat.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you Pat. You are my first reviewer! Always such an emotion.
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I know, I always post with that tremor of hesitation. Pat. xx
Comment from Kingsland
I liked this this piece of poetic art. It seemed to flow quite easily as I read through it. I liked your choice of formatting and the color you choose for your font. This was just an excellent work of poetry that was my pleasure to have written a review for... John
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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I liked this this piece of poetic art. It seemed to flow quite easily as I read through it. I liked your choice of formatting and the color you choose for your font. This was just an excellent work of poetry that was my pleasure to have written a review for... John
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you so much John!
Comment from georgigirl
You did a great job, the only thing I see is the 2nd verse from the last ( Inner twinge (ff ) emotions I think you meant of?
Nice piece a contest winner.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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You did a great job, the only thing I see is the 2nd verse from the last ( Inner twinge (ff ) emotions I think you meant of?
Nice piece a contest winner.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Ohhh! Sorry. I corrected those errors. Thank you for reading my work!
Comment from Fleedleflump
This is very well written, with some great word choices and excellent visual metaphors. I noticed one tiny typo:
"Inner twinge
ff emotion"
Mike
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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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This is very well written, with some great word choices and excellent visual metaphors. I noticed one tiny typo:
"Inner twinge
ff emotion"
Mike
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Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you Mike! I corrected those bugs!