Comment from rhonny

Excellent

It's very good. It keeps within the format of 5-7-5 and yet it brings a great message to us. And it's so true. You did well.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from Isaac Kavik

Excellent

The naivity of youth is very well contructed here in so few words. Haiku is difficult to master. I think this one shows great promise of you becoming a master of it.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from wanderlost

Excellent

Heart imagines life
beneath silver-sweet full moon
not out of cocoon

great work creating a well developed image in such a succinct way.

Wanderlost

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from words

Excellent

I like your bittersweet write on the bliss of innocence.

I especially like these images:

Heart imagines life
beneath silver-sweet full moon

Well done.

d

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Nice idea, the imagination versus reality and the cocoon image is striking.

If I had one concern, it would be that the last line, at first reding, seems to be connected to the silver sweet moon line that precedes it. I wonder if something like 'then the cocoon opens' would work better here...

Steve

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from Auroraboreal800

Excellent

This is a well written poem, with a powerful and deep message. You pulled it off masterfully in this. A very good piece indeed.
Nicely done piece Anupam!

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

You and I were some of the lucky children with two good parents who took care of us so that we felt as if we were in a safe cocoon. Your Haiku captures that feeling. So sad that we adults get so selfish the world completely changes, when we emerge from the chrysalis. Giddy.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from JRaeVaughn

Excellent

After reading your notes I am reminded of the expression "you can't go home again" but it is a comfort to know at least one real life hero, someone that will help protest us against a harsh world. A very good, thought provoking write that observes the simplistic nature of the form. Well done, JR

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

reply by JRaeVaughn on 02-Jul-2013

You're most welcome Anupam. Best wishes, JR

Comment from poeticpatchwork

Excellent

I can relate to wanting to go back into the cocoon of childhood before adult responsibility intruded! I enjoyed your poem! It always amazes me how much can be said in so few words! Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from Caressa_08

Excellent

Was just thinking about the little white butterfly so enjoying my backyard this morning...So glad, I came across this wonderful poem &, too, your author notes, that too tell a lot that yes, life isn't all that comforting.

relieve, I think you meant to type..

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)