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Comment from alexgeorge
Heart always imagines a better world. You are absolutely right. Then, when we get out of our cocoon, and sample the world, take a few knocks, we need to sit back, stiffen our resolve and go with the friends and people who genuinely love us.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Heart always imagines a better world. You are absolutely right. Then, when we get out of our cocoon, and sample the world, take a few knocks, we need to sit back, stiffen our resolve and go with the friends and people who genuinely love us.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Thanks for the review and kind rating:-)
Comment from Alexander E Poet
I thought this was a little cryptic. However profound imagery Nice flow I thought this very good thoughtful words No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. Alexander Q*Q
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I thought this was a little cryptic. However profound imagery Nice flow I thought this very good thoughtful words No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. Alexander Q*Q
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your thougtful review:-)
Comment from marre5
Just a few simple words but you convey the image beautifully. The longing for freedom; the fear/ignorance of the unknown. Very nice job.
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Just a few simple words but you convey the image beautifully. The longing for freedom; the fear/ignorance of the unknown. Very nice job.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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I appreciate your wonderful review and kind rating.it means a lot to me.a hearty thanks to you:-)
Comment from MelReyn
I can relate to this. This captures the feeling of being a child perfectly. I'm lucky and blessed to have had a childhood such as you describe, and I wish that more children had the same.
Amazing what you accomplish here with only 12 words! :)
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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I can relate to this. This captures the feeling of being a child perfectly. I'm lucky and blessed to have had a childhood such as you describe, and I wish that more children had the same.
Amazing what you accomplish here with only 12 words! :)
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
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That is really a sweet review.thanks for your words and kind rating:-)
Comment from jaliscomel
This follows the 5-7-5 format. I like the images created - Heart imagines life and silver-sweet full moon. However I was put off by two things: the rhyme - moon and cocoon; and the capital M.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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This follows the 5-7-5 format. I like the images created - Heart imagines life and silver-sweet full moon. However I was put off by two things: the rhyme - moon and cocoon; and the capital M.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your thoughts and rating:-)
Comment from judiverse
This is beautifully put together. I hardly ever give six stars to three-line poems, but this is so well worded. I like the "silver-sweet full moon," and the rhyme of moon and cocoon. You're right that we sometimes wish we were not out of that cocoon but sheltered from the dark things that we often see in life. judi
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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This is beautifully put together. I hardly ever give six stars to three-line poems, but this is so well worded. I like the "silver-sweet full moon," and the rhyme of moon and cocoon. You're right that we sometimes wish we were not out of that cocoon but sheltered from the dark things that we often see in life. judi
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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I adore your praise and six star rating.it is a very encouraging review.hearty thanks to you for the generous rating:-)
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You're so welcome. Hope you do well in the contest. judi
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Thanks for the good wishes:-)
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You're so welcome. judi
Comment from dragonpoet
Yes, childhood is a protected world as is should be. We learn as we grow up that all is not good and try to change it to the world it was then.
I like how the cocoon looks, somewhat, like a heart
Perfect syllable count. Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Yes, childhood is a protected world as is should be. We learn as we grow up that all is not good and try to change it to the world it was then.
I like how the cocoon looks, somewhat, like a heart
Perfect syllable count. Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
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Thanks for reading it and for kind review
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No problem.
dragonpoet
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Anupam Sharma,
Well wished and nicely written!
You have actually expressed every human heart's wish in your beautiful words. It's a nice piece of poetry fulfilling the required parameters of structure. Its language is simple with lively imagery.
Marvelous! Good Luck!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Hello Anupam Sharma,
Well wished and nicely written!
You have actually expressed every human heart's wish in your beautiful words. It's a nice piece of poetry fulfilling the required parameters of structure. Its language is simple with lively imagery.
Marvelous! Good Luck!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
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I praise your thoughtful and kind review.thanks for your generous rating.
Comment from amarherig14
When we have to face the reality of this world ,we wish we were back in our younger days when life was so easy. This happens when we had a happy life. For many they do not want to remember the days of their youth which was living in fear,abuse and unloved. Their life became for some much better as an adult when the memories of their past ,although not forgotten, became less painful.You poem was well written and has good imagery, wording, and the picture used is a good choice for your write.Congratulations in winning "All Time Best.'
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When we have to face the reality of this world ,we wish we were back in our younger days when life was so easy. This happens when we had a happy life. For many they do not want to remember the days of their youth which was living in fear,abuse and unloved. Their life became for some much better as an adult when the memories of their past ,although not forgotten, became less painful.You poem was well written and has good imagery, wording, and the picture used is a good choice for your write.Congratulations in winning "All Time Best.'
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Thanks for sharing your thoughts and excellent rating.
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You are welcome,Anupam Sharma. Warm regards,Margie(amarherig14)
Comment from Uniqusatya
Hey ,
i feel the poem carried so much depth within the few syllables that it goes without the author notes.
So true.
Nice work.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Hey ,
i feel the poem carried so much depth within the few syllables that it goes without the author notes.
So true.
Nice work.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind review