Blankets
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Comment from Joan E.
I liked your concept about describing the comforts in a "ball of yarn". You reinforced the sensations with your picture choice and the echoing "un" sounds and other alliterations. Hugs- Joan
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
I liked your concept about describing the comforts in a "ball of yarn". You reinforced the sensations with your picture choice and the echoing "un" sounds and other alliterations. Hugs- Joan
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much Joan!
Comment from adewpearl
I love the listing of babies know, cats know, I know...
good alliteration in mundane and meaningful
and the pairing of undulating unbound
good alliteration in soaring steamy
love the mood yo create as the wool wraps peace
great use of verbs to bring this scene to life as the wool bends and dances and threads
It pause me - pauses
I am laughing out loud at the conclusion - this is so worth a six but I have none :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
I love the listing of babies know, cats know, I know...
good alliteration in mundane and meaningful
and the pairing of undulating unbound
good alliteration in soaring steamy
love the mood yo create as the wool wraps peace
great use of verbs to bring this scene to life as the wool bends and dances and threads
It pause me - pauses
I am laughing out loud at the conclusion - this is so worth a six but I have none :-) Brooke
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Brooke, I am glad that you liked the conclusion. I almost took it away!
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
You have done really very well in this poem bringing yarn to life yes so many would say I is just a ball of yarn they do not really look at it like you have well done on this write regards Jill
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
You have done really very well in this poem bringing yarn to life yes so many would say I is just a ball of yarn they do not really look at it like you have well done on this write regards Jill
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Thank you Jill for so graciously commenting in my work.
Comment from robina1978
Catching title and picture you chose for this poem. The way you wrote this free verse it appealed to all my senses. And I loved it to be about cats. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
Catching title and picture you chose for this poem. The way you wrote this free verse it appealed to all my senses. And I loved it to be about cats. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Thank you Ile for reading this work and for the best wishes.
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very welcome
Comment from Curt Mongold
To be able to take such a mundane thing as yarn and write a lovely little verse about it is a mark of an imaginative poet. You are such a poet my friend.
Curt
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
To be able to take such a mundane thing as yarn and write a lovely little verse about it is a mark of an imaginative poet. You are such a poet my friend.
Curt
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Thank you Curt for this very supporting review.
Comment from EMB
LOL Spoken like a true kitten. :) I must admit that all of the ways you celebrate a ball of yarn makes me want to rethink the next time I bring a gift to a baby shower. Ha! Wouldn't that be a hoot, getting stares and glares from all of the women? But this wonderful poem proves your point: it's NOT just a piece of yarn. :)
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
LOL Spoken like a true kitten. :) I must admit that all of the ways you celebrate a ball of yarn makes me want to rethink the next time I bring a gift to a baby shower. Ha! Wouldn't that be a hoot, getting stares and glares from all of the women? But this wonderful poem proves your point: it's NOT just a piece of yarn. :)
Comment Written 04-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Ha! lots of us can get in trouble just with a ball of yarn as well!
Thank you for saying "...this wonderful poem."
Comment from Joannforsberg
Life does heighten our senses when we start thinking about something. Around here these past few days talking about yarn as been a regular conversation. As some are needed for a grandchild in a school project. Well written and blessings, Jo
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2013
Life does heighten our senses when we start thinking about something. Around here these past few days talking about yarn as been a regular conversation. As some are needed for a grandchild in a school project. Well written and blessings, Jo
Comment Written 04-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2013
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Thank you Jo. I would say yarn brings joy, before and after a project. Best wishes.
Comment from Bryana
My dear friend, one thing I know for sure that
the simple things are sometimes the best. I love
my wool blankets that my mother or grandmother
knitted for me.
I love your poem dear amada, it brought back
sweet memories of my wool blankets.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2013
My dear friend, one thing I know for sure that
the simple things are sometimes the best. I love
my wool blankets that my mother or grandmother
knitted for me.
I love your poem dear amada, it brought back
sweet memories of my wool blankets.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2013
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Thank you, querida amiguita! Blessings as well.
Comment from Pili Pubul
Warm and cozy feeling created by the great description
of the comfortable wool blanket knitted with soft yarn.
Excellent poem, simple subject with great imagery. Love it.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
Warm and cozy feeling created by the great description
of the comfortable wool blanket knitted with soft yarn.
Excellent poem, simple subject with great imagery. Love it.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thank you Pili!
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You are so welcome.
Comment from reconciled
Hello you -smile- how are you Amanda? ya know, i feel the same way about paint -smile- you can take two different colors of blue..a little white...and make a wall...look like the sea... stepping back there is a contentment...a satisfaction taken away. Wonderful write love you Michael
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2013
Hello you -smile- how are you Amanda? ya know, i feel the same way about paint -smile- you can take two different colors of blue..a little white...and make a wall...look like the sea... stepping back there is a contentment...a satisfaction taken away. Wonderful write love you Michael
Comment Written 04-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2013
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Hi dear friend! Thank you for reading my work and talking about colors; a blue and white on a wall and we have a sea...great image.
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10-4 -smile-