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Comment from Christof McTarnahan
Nice job. I see you out a lot of thought into these few words.A well rounded poem. You embraced the confines of the 5-7-5.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Nice job. I see you out a lot of thought into these few words.A well rounded poem. You embraced the confines of the 5-7-5.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Fish
Wow! You must really want to win this contest!
This god damn poems been on top for a week or
more! LOL
Here's my poem for it:
life imagines heart
beneath gold and dead old moon
the bank's not open
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Wow! You must really want to win this contest!
This god damn poems been on top for a week or
more! LOL
Here's my poem for it:
life imagines heart
beneath gold and dead old moon
the bank's not open
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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That's so nice of you.but the contest is already over..that is a good edit.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from JM daSilva
Yeah, the cocoon was the best time of our lives I guess because we had no conscience, the old idea of the ostrich burying its head in the sand. It was good, but even there, an act of violence against our mothers could harm us. Great poem.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Yeah, the cocoon was the best time of our lives I guess because we had no conscience, the old idea of the ostrich burying its head in the sand. It was good, but even there, an act of violence against our mothers could harm us. Great poem.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
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Welcome.
Comment from Winslow
Dear Anupam,
The critical moment when the butterfly emerges from his cocoon. You have captured this moment well in your poem. An excellent picture to highlight your poem. Which came first, the picture or your poem.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Dear Anupam,
The critical moment when the butterfly emerges from his cocoon. You have captured this moment well in your poem. An excellent picture to highlight your poem. Which came first, the picture or your poem.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Hi
the poem came first.it is an extract of my poem of quatrains.if you go to my page,i have shared it,not posted.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from watergirl
Ah, the latent possibilities and the wonder of expectation.
Endless ways to be and to experience the world. If only we knew this, not born to conform. A feeling of disappointment or regret that we are so confined? Maybe we are not confined. Maybe. I liked your poem, the notes expanded on that very concisely put idea.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Ah, the latent possibilities and the wonder of expectation.
Endless ways to be and to experience the world. If only we knew this, not born to conform. A feeling of disappointment or regret that we are so confined? Maybe we are not confined. Maybe. I liked your poem, the notes expanded on that very concisely put idea.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Eternal Muse
A very interesting poem, and what an adorable pictue! Yes, we often picture life as a fairy tale when we are growing up - alas, often those dreams are destroys by harsh reality. But I love to dream!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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A very interesting poem, and what an adorable pictue! Yes, we often picture life as a fairy tale when we are growing up - alas, often those dreams are destroys by harsh reality. But I love to dream!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)t
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there Anupam
The innocence of youth. Too bad we are not aware at the time that it is the best days of our lives. Nicely done in 5-7-5. Good luck in the contest.
Bear
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Hey there Anupam
The innocence of youth. Too bad we are not aware at the time that it is the best days of our lives. Nicely done in 5-7-5. Good luck in the contest.
Bear
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Capricorn61
I liked your poem as it showed what a dream like cocoon you lived in. It sounds wonderful. I didn't live in that kind of cocoon and I suspect there are many like me, wishing that our childhood was the same as yours. Looking back I realise that I never had the chance to be a child.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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I liked your poem as it showed what a dream like cocoon you lived in. It sounds wonderful. I didn't live in that kind of cocoon and I suspect there are many like me, wishing that our childhood was the same as yours. Looking back I realise that I never had the chance to be a child.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Yes, i know there are many who didn't have a great,healthy childhood.but i wrote it in general.i appreciate your review and sharing of thoughts.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from trevorletang
Anupam, your poem provides a beautiful symbolic back-up to your author note and introduction. I like the content of your poem and the subject matter as clarified in your notes. keep the bright side up long into adulthood, as well.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Anupam, your poem provides a beautiful symbolic back-up to your author note and introduction. I like the content of your poem and the subject matter as clarified in your notes. keep the bright side up long into adulthood, as well.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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I appreciate your thoughts.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from MelissaBickel
Mmm this is lovely. A great metaphoric write, not only for a literal butterfly to be once out of a cocoon, but for life in general.. I can remember being young and the sort of metamorphis I went through as I made those steps away from my home...Lovely poem
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Mmm this is lovely. A great metaphoric write, not only for a literal butterfly to be once out of a cocoon, but for life in general.. I can remember being young and the sort of metamorphis I went through as I made those steps away from my home...Lovely poem
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)