Leaving Hell Behind
Flash fiction--260 words28 total reviews
Comment from delphinus
this is a hell you didnt ask for. Its unfair. Most addictions and problems are self afflicted, but cancer no one would ask for that. A hell on earth
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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this is a hell you didnt ask for. Its unfair. Most addictions and problems are self afflicted, but cancer no one would ask for that. A hell on earth
Comment Written 05-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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Thank you very much, Delphinus, for your kind review and comments for this story. Thanks!
Indy :>)
Comment from Deejharrington
I wish I had a "6" left to give you, but if there are fair judges, your reward will be winning the contest. Because this is excellent! Powerful and moving! I'm glad it was written as a fiction for you, but for others it is their biography. You told it with humor, irony, and truth. It doesn't get much better than this!
DJ
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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I wish I had a "6" left to give you, but if there are fair judges, your reward will be winning the contest. Because this is excellent! Powerful and moving! I'm glad it was written as a fiction for you, but for others it is their biography. You told it with humor, irony, and truth. It doesn't get much better than this!
DJ
Comment Written 05-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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Thank you so very much, DJ, for this incredible review. Your comments are appreciated more than you know! I'm delighted you had the chance to read this and for taking the time to write this wonderful review. Thank you so much!
Indy :>)
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You're welcome and very deserving.
deb
Comment from rama devi
Is this fictional or do you really have cancer/ If so, my prayers are there for you...to embrace the both gift of being present, now, in life and of transitioning to new life in another way, whenever that time arrives.
This is well written, though if this is a true story, it is not fiction!
No nits or spag. Great tone and pace. Strong theme in response to the topic.
Best of luck in the contest.
(( HUGS ))
Warm Regards,
rama devi
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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Is this fictional or do you really have cancer/ If so, my prayers are there for you...to embrace the both gift of being present, now, in life and of transitioning to new life in another way, whenever that time arrives.
This is well written, though if this is a true story, it is not fiction!
No nits or spag. Great tone and pace. Strong theme in response to the topic.
Best of luck in the contest.
(( HUGS ))
Warm Regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 05-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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Hello rama devi! Thank you for taking the time to read and review this fiction story. Your commemnts are appeciated and treasured as always. This is fiction for me personally, but I've been touched by this hell much too often.
Thank you for reviewing!
Indy :>)
Comment from Lokman
Ouch!
This reads like it's really happening. It isn't, is it? Please say no!
Fantastic flash fiction, Indy! So creepy, so frightening, and so very real.
Shea
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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Ouch!
This reads like it's really happening. It isn't, is it? Please say no!
Fantastic flash fiction, Indy! So creepy, so frightening, and so very real.
Shea
Comment Written 05-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2009
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Hi Shea! I've been very fortunate not to have this disease personally, but I sure have been touched by this horrible hell too many times. As always, thanks for reading and for your comments.
Smiles,
Indy :>)
Comment from Domino
Morning, Kar
I sure pray this is 'Fiction' as you state.
Very ell written and hard-hiting hell mataphor/s
When your para started about the 'cell' I thought you were going to progress it to being born and hell starting - there's another theme for us more morose types! ;-)
Very creative, and let me know it's fiction, please.
Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2009
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Morning, Kar
I sure pray this is 'Fiction' as you state.
Very ell written and hard-hiting hell mataphor/s
When your para started about the 'cell' I thought you were going to progress it to being born and hell starting - there's another theme for us more morose types! ;-)
Very creative, and let me know it's fiction, please.
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 05-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2009
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Hi RayMan! Thank you, my friend, for your review on this flash fiction...and yes, it's a fiction. We all know someone who has gone through this hell on Earth, though. Thanks as always for your kind comments.
Smiles,
Indy :>)
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Thank goodness. xx
Comment from Marjorie D.
That's truly a hell. Thirty-six years ago my mother died of cancer. It wasn't ovarian, but as brave as she was, this piece of prose reflects they way she felt near the end. You've captured it very well in a very concise, meaningful way, Indy. Good luck!
XO
Marjorie
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2009
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That's truly a hell. Thirty-six years ago my mother died of cancer. It wasn't ovarian, but as brave as she was, this piece of prose reflects they way she felt near the end. You've captured it very well in a very concise, meaningful way, Indy. Good luck!
XO
Marjorie
Comment Written 05-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2009
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Thank you, M, for your kind comments regarding this story. Cancer is such a hell and I'm sorry your Mom had to live through that horrible experience. Thanks for your best wishes.
Indy :>)
Comment from Tricia
It didn't take you many words to write a very meaningful story. I have a hard time writing anything under 1000 words and actually saying anything. Great job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2009
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It didn't take you many words to write a very meaningful story. I have a hard time writing anything under 1000 words and actually saying anything. Great job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2009
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read this story and for your kind comments, Tricia. I appreciate your review and good luck!
Indy :>)
Comment from RapturedHeart
Well, you couldn't have chosen a more terrifying subject. I sure hope it's just fiction. Like that you left us in suspense - which isn't easy with flash fiction. She sure sounds ready to leave the suffering behind. Again, hope it's just a write - and all the best in the contest,
Heather
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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2009
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Well, you couldn't have chosen a more terrifying subject. I sure hope it's just fiction. Like that you left us in suspense - which isn't easy with flash fiction. She sure sounds ready to leave the suffering behind. Again, hope it's just a write - and all the best in the contest,
Heather
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Comment Written 04-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2009
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Thank you Raptured Heart for your great review for this story. Yes, this is fiction. The contest has all the entries listed as poetry, so I'm waiting for Tom to change it from poetry to prose so I can note that it's a fictional story.
Thanks!
Indy :>)