No Man's Land
Forever is endless37 total reviews
Comment from MAMONIA
OMG. This is magnificent. You surely
have me sold. I haven't read anything
of this fine quality lately and I realize
that I am just finding you for the first
time.
How creative this is and what a story to
share! You did a wonderful job of giving
us the complete lowdown on this person
by showing us and not telling us the
outcome. Now that is what I call "Talent"
Bless your gifts.
Marie
with a capital T.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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OMG. This is magnificent. You surely
have me sold. I haven't read anything
of this fine quality lately and I realize
that I am just finding you for the first
time.
How creative this is and what a story to
share! You did a wonderful job of giving
us the complete lowdown on this person
by showing us and not telling us the
outcome. Now that is what I call "Talent"
Bless your gifts.
Marie
with a capital T.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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Hi Marie! Wow! What a neat review. I love that you enjoyed this! I couldn't ask for a nicer note...I just couldn't. Thank you so much!! Wish I could frame this one! HUG! Susan
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, susan, you did a great job writing this story about the man who was picked up every month for a sperm deposit. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest. congrats on your recognized writer win.
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this is very well written, susan, you did a great job writing this story about the man who was picked up every month for a sperm deposit. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest. congrats on your recognized writer win.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
Comment from Tomoso
Susan,
Great story although a bit strange,but I liked that. Very well written,a tale of sexual abuse with a difference. The perpetrators were from another world and Thomas would have to endure a lifetime of abuse.
A strong entry for contest,good luck
Tom
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Susan,
Great story although a bit strange,but I liked that. Very well written,a tale of sexual abuse with a difference. The perpetrators were from another world and Thomas would have to endure a lifetime of abuse.
A strong entry for contest,good luck
Tom
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Hi Tom! Just a wonderfully humbling note from you!! I am so grateful that you like this...tho it is odd. That's what the contest wanted tho!~ LOL! Hugs for this kind sixer too!! Susan
Comment from peggles
I liked this very much
I was most impressed with your direct easy style cutting straight to the point
you delivered the plot at a fast pace
There's lots of hooks in there and it's nice and pacey
best wishes in the contest
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I liked this very much
I was most impressed with your direct easy style cutting straight to the point
you delivered the plot at a fast pace
There's lots of hooks in there and it's nice and pacey
best wishes in the contest
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
Comment from Sherry Asbury
I really enjoyed this short story. You wrote well and I love the suspense of wondering if the grays would come back again.
Your form and structure were spot on and I saw no flaws in this story. Congrats on your medals, they are well deserved!
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I really enjoyed this short story. You wrote well and I love the suspense of wondering if the grays would come back again.
Your form and structure were spot on and I saw no flaws in this story. Congrats on your medals, they are well deserved!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Definitely a creative and interesting read. Your short story was well presented and as usual it proved you are the best on the site in short stories.
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Definitely a creative and interesting read. Your short story was well presented and as usual it proved you are the best on the site in short stories.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
Comment from reconciled
Here it is Sunday and I can't give you a six...why? you know I didn't think I would like this, because I'm not much for sci-fi, but you changed my mind. Exstreamly well written, and the way you wrap it up is perfect. you got this girl-Michael.
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Here it is Sunday and I can't give you a six...why? you know I didn't think I would like this, because I'm not much for sci-fi, but you changed my mind. Exstreamly well written, and the way you wrap it up is perfect. you got this girl-Michael.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
Comment from JW
This is quite an unusual story. And, no doubt, very well written. After reading the first line or two I know I would have to finished it.
This tale reminds me of a documentary I watched several months ago about alien abduction.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
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This is quite an unusual story. And, no doubt, very well written. After reading the first line or two I know I would have to finished it.
This tale reminds me of a documentary I watched several months ago about alien abduction.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
Comment from Sally Carter
Crikey! How weird and scary a story is this!!! I rarely get to the prose pages, so I had no idea you wrote creepy stuff.
You had me hooked from the outset, with those horrible images of the cattle, and our poor victim waking with a bull standing over him. That really is my personal nightmare. Quite terrifying.
The sudden introduction of the stars came so out of the blue (no pun intended!) that again I was captivated.
The mention of his private parts was again so peculiar and so unsettling that this reader just had to keep going and find out what had happened.
And then that time shift forward, and our hero trying to reduce the chance of producing usable sperm.
So many thoughts and questions... Was this real, or was he suffering delusions? The picture of some other species using humankind for experiments, artificial insemination, as we do animals. And who was the sperm intended for??? Did they have other humans held captive somewhere? Were they cross breeding a new species??
Fantastic writing, which I am SO glad I found. Isn't it so often worth reciprocating reviews and stumbling across unexpected treasures?
My best wishes to you
Sally
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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Crikey! How weird and scary a story is this!!! I rarely get to the prose pages, so I had no idea you wrote creepy stuff.
You had me hooked from the outset, with those horrible images of the cattle, and our poor victim waking with a bull standing over him. That really is my personal nightmare. Quite terrifying.
The sudden introduction of the stars came so out of the blue (no pun intended!) that again I was captivated.
The mention of his private parts was again so peculiar and so unsettling that this reader just had to keep going and find out what had happened.
And then that time shift forward, and our hero trying to reduce the chance of producing usable sperm.
So many thoughts and questions... Was this real, or was he suffering delusions? The picture of some other species using humankind for experiments, artificial insemination, as we do animals. And who was the sperm intended for??? Did they have other humans held captive somewhere? Were they cross breeding a new species??
Fantastic writing, which I am SO glad I found. Isn't it so often worth reciprocating reviews and stumbling across unexpected treasures?
My best wishes to you
Sally
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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Wow, Sally! Thank you so much! I'm just thrilled with this note...I also appreciate that you found it intriguing as written. Some expect to have all the answers there for them. I like leaving some things to the readers imagination! ?? I'm glad you like that. Thank you a thousand times Sally...this is another review I really wish I could somehow frame!! HUG! Sincerely. Susan
Comment from Spiritual Echo
You do have a rich and tireless imagination. I half expected that the boy had been transformed into a steer, but you fooled me.
I'd suggest changing spacemen to alieans. Space men seen pretty ancient and is not a familiar/comfortable word for the under forties.
Otherwise, you've turned out another brilliant story in the wee hours.
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You do have a rich and tireless imagination. I half expected that the boy had been transformed into a steer, but you fooled me.
I'd suggest changing spacemen to alieans. Space men seen pretty ancient and is not a familiar/comfortable word for the under forties.
Otherwise, you've turned out another brilliant story in the wee hours.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2012