Toxic Transference
A bit of free verse on negativity and wasted time106 total reviews
Comment from palsuresh
This is a very nice free verse poem with a message. The funny thing is that a poet asking others to replace words by action. Just joking.
Suresh.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
This is a very nice free verse poem with a message. The funny thing is that a poet asking others to replace words by action. Just joking.
Suresh.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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a quandry for sure LOL have a great day
Comment from WRITER1
I couldn't agree with you more. Stop the complaining and get out there and make someone feel like they are important for a change. Make someone smile, anything.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
I couldn't agree with you more. Stop the complaining and get out there and make someone feel like they are important for a change. Make someone smile, anything.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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thanks so much my friend blessings to you and yours
Comment from Alexander E Poet
I agree with you , This is has a most excellent flow throughout and easily carries you through the piece. The imagery and the spirit inspire ohers.I really loved the realism and truth No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see.Alexander QQ...
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
I agree with you , This is has a most excellent flow throughout and easily carries you through the piece. The imagery and the spirit inspire ohers.I really loved the realism and truth No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see.Alexander QQ...
Comment Written 17-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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thanks so much my friend blessings to you and yours
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a flowing well written poem. It is true of the political situatations and arguements today. No one wants to see if any of the change is helping or not. They only talk about what they think is wrong.
Alomst everyone complalins now and again. But, they continual reptitiion is grating. Blessings always need to be counted.
The last line makes you think you are drowing in it and want someone to save you.
Very good. Keep writing.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
This is a flowing well written poem. It is true of the political situatations and arguements today. No one wants to see if any of the change is helping or not. They only talk about what they think is wrong.
Alomst everyone complalins now and again. But, they continual reptitiion is grating. Blessings always need to be counted.
The last line makes you think you are drowing in it and want someone to save you.
Very good. Keep writing.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 17-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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thanks so much my friend blessings to you and yours
Comment from joan marie
Nothing worse than listening to any problem, big or small, personal or worldwide, and never hearing anything but the complaining. No solutions no suggestions on how to improve individually. Great poem. joan marie
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
Nothing worse than listening to any problem, big or small, personal or worldwide, and never hearing anything but the complaining. No solutions no suggestions on how to improve individually. Great poem. joan marie
Comment Written 17-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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thanks so much my friend blessings to you and yours
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You welcome. You addressed a subject I live with daily. jm
Comment from raw form
Earthwriter I do so dig your vibe on this there is always a spark when we see something unjust or out of whack then we react but if we don't think about what it takes to make things change then they don't. there are very few willing to go the extra mile and those of us who do go that mile do it selflessly, its better than saying woulda, coulda, shoulda.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
Earthwriter I do so dig your vibe on this there is always a spark when we see something unjust or out of whack then we react but if we don't think about what it takes to make things change then they don't. there are very few willing to go the extra mile and those of us who do go that mile do it selflessly, its better than saying woulda, coulda, shoulda.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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thanks so much my friend blessings to you and yours
Comment from Lady & Louis
Fine free verse, Monte. It applies (as I'm sure it's meant to!) on a personal and a global scale, as the phrasing in the first and third verses in particular make clear. Well done and thank you for posting!
Cheers,
Louise
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
Fine free verse, Monte. It applies (as I'm sure it's meant to!) on a personal and a global scale, as the phrasing in the first and third verses in particular make clear. Well done and thank you for posting!
Cheers,
Louise
Comment Written 17-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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thanks so much my friend blessings to you and yours good to hear from you hope your having a great summer
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LOL don't wish summer on us, Monte, it's still winter down here, and after our last summer, I'm in no hurry for the next! :D
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Australia! :))
Comment from Steve Pantazis
You certainly know what "economy of words" means. You make your point well with this poem; and for those who don't get it, the last line will make them get it.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
You certainly know what "economy of words" means. You make your point well with this poem; and for those who don't get it, the last line will make them get it.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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thanks so much my friend blessings to you and yours
Comment from laurelp
very good philosophy, but rarely ever taken. Most people prefer to complain. It is easier. I find your writing to be unique and well inspired. Very good job.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
very good philosophy, but rarely ever taken. Most people prefer to complain. It is easier. I find your writing to be unique and well inspired. Very good job.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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thanks so much my friend blessings to you and yours
Comment from Marathonwriter
Hi Earthwriter,
I completely agree with you. Helping someone else raises you above the negativity in your own life.
refocus energy
action without words
These were my favorite lines.
Chris
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
Hi Earthwriter,
I completely agree with you. Helping someone else raises you above the negativity in your own life.
refocus energy
action without words
These were my favorite lines.
Chris
Comment Written 17-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2009
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thanks so much my friend blessings to you and yours