Ode to Child's Pose
Discovering Yoga95 total reviews
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
You make such smooth use of the supplied words in this poem that I didn't realize at first that it was that kind of contest. It's a lovely poem, and I enjoyed reading it; I know so little about yoga that it was also informative. I particularly like this line: "I bend down as I pray with my body." Best wishes to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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You make such smooth use of the supplied words in this poem that I didn't realize at first that it was that kind of contest. It's a lovely poem, and I enjoyed reading it; I know so little about yoga that it was also informative. I particularly like this line: "I bend down as I pray with my body." Best wishes to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 10-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you,Jeanie for quoting the phrase you like the best.
Comment from Aletheia
I really like your poem and the step by step description of what sounds like such a relaxing pose. I really liked the last stanza the most. It's really beautiful. Good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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I really like your poem and the step by step description of what sounds like such a relaxing pose. I really liked the last stanza the most. It's really beautiful. Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you begonia for reading my work!
Comment from Rama Rao
An excellent poem which moved freely and made good reading.
Yes, Yoga has many positive benefits.
You rightly said in your last stanza, it integrates mind, body and soul and refreshes a person.
I liked the expression fresh healed vase.
It's very popular in my country.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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An excellent poem which moved freely and made good reading.
Yes, Yoga has many positive benefits.
You rightly said in your last stanza, it integrates mind, body and soul and refreshes a person.
I liked the expression fresh healed vase.
It's very popular in my country.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Ah, you come from the land where yoga was initiated. Lovely to meet you dear writer.
Comment from tati
Thank you for sharing this great contest entry. You have managed to fit in the required words into your free-verse poem. I'm amazed with the superb imagery, amada; these lines are my favorite:
My hands open
flower-like
and from my finger tips
crawl away the daunting drugs
that fuel my darkness.
Good luck in the contest. Warmest wishes,
tati, April 10, 2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you for sharing this great contest entry. You have managed to fit in the required words into your free-verse poem. I'm amazed with the superb imagery, amada; these lines are my favorite:
My hands open
flower-like
and from my finger tips
crawl away the daunting drugs
that fuel my darkness.
Good luck in the contest. Warmest wishes,
tati, April 10, 2010
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you tati for reading and commenting in this work. Warmest wishes back to you.
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You're welcome, amada. Have a nice weekend.
tati
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
Sure wish I could make my body go into that pose! LOL- Your poem is wonderful, using specific word too ! Enjoyed reading this, and learning about the 'Balasana Pose'. Betty
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Sure wish I could make my body go into that pose! LOL- Your poem is wonderful, using specific word too ! Enjoyed reading this, and learning about the 'Balasana Pose'. Betty
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you Betty. Here is another yoga word: "Namaste< It means the sacred on me recognizes the sacred on you.
Comment from Healing
Great poem. I like how you crafted the yoga theme into this wonderful poem and incorporated life and living. Very well written.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Great poem. I like how you crafted the yoga theme into this wonderful poem and incorporated life and living. Very well written.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you Healing!
Comment from LavenderRiverWriter
OK! I am now going to join the Yoga classes that I have been putting off for years. I remember from years ago, I did a little of it and it was very life changing to say the least! You describe it in a "delicious" way. Makes me want to go do it NOW!Great free verse as well as usage of the required words. Love Lavender
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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OK! I am now going to join the Yoga classes that I have been putting off for years. I remember from years ago, I did a little of it and it was very life changing to say the least! You describe it in a "delicious" way. Makes me want to go do it NOW!Great free verse as well as usage of the required words. Love Lavender
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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This is very touching, Lavender. That my words inspire you to go NOW to a yoga class. Let me know how it works!
Comment from JudithMarie
Your words are very expressive. There are many images that are uplifting. My favorite is, "as mind body and soul emerges into a magnificent fresh healed vase." Relaxing and stretching has this effect but I never thought of my being a "fresh healed vase"...beautiful thought. Your words also have a nice flow. An easy read through lots of images and emotions. Good work. JudithMarie
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Your words are very expressive. There are many images that are uplifting. My favorite is, "as mind body and soul emerges into a magnificent fresh healed vase." Relaxing and stretching has this effect but I never thought of my being a "fresh healed vase"...beautiful thought. Your words also have a nice flow. An easy read through lots of images and emotions. Good work. JudithMarie
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you JuditMarie!
Comment from douglasgclarke
Very nice. It was a tough list of words to use.
I especially like the way you used "race"
I breathe out
my internal race.
It speaks so strongly to the need to detach from the race that we make for ourselves. I like the image of just expelling it with the used up air.
I know you didn't use any punctuation, but I really think it needs a comma in
"as mind, body and soul"
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Very nice. It was a tough list of words to use.
I especially like the way you used "race"
I breathe out
my internal race.
It speaks so strongly to the need to detach from the race that we make for ourselves. I like the image of just expelling it with the used up air.
I know you didn't use any punctuation, but I really think it needs a comma in
"as mind, body and soul"
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you Douglas for the commas needed. Done!
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Glad to help
Comment from jclark
Excellent contest entry! Not only did you use the required words, you painted a beautiful picture that brought a feeling of calm over me as I read it. I have been to Yoga and what you describe is spot on. Perfect picture choice. Best of luck in the contest. You set the bar!
Judy
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Excellent contest entry! Not only did you use the required words, you painted a beautiful picture that brought a feeling of calm over me as I read it. I have been to Yoga and what you describe is spot on. Perfect picture choice. Best of luck in the contest. You set the bar!
Judy
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Hi Judy. I thank you for this great review. With much humility i want to say that the teachings of yoga had inspired to focus better in what I am doing. Thank you so much for your comments, and stars!