An Eye for Vengeance
a boy stalks his father's murderer49 total reviews
Comment from Stalking Wolf
A riveting story. Holds ones interest from start to finish. The writer gives very detailed account of the actions as they are happening. Great description to show the reader the story. Enjoyed very much.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2012
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A riveting story. Holds ones interest from start to finish. The writer gives very detailed account of the actions as they are happening. Great description to show the reader the story. Enjoyed very much.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2012
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Thank you, Stalking Wolf. I really appreciate your supportive insights and generous review. Warm regards, Bev
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I am American Indian, so I can relate to the story, we have legends too.
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I wondered with your name. That's awesome - maybe you'll write about some of your legends? Take care, Bev
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Actually, the poem, "What the Red Man said to the White" is in a book I have had published, might put it on FS later. Will probably put "The Wishing Stick" as well. Thanks SW
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Oh, I look forward to reading that. There's lots of interest on the site for Native American themes, I think. Take care ... Bev
Comment from judiverse
I'm always interested in stories dealing with shapeshifters. The characters are very well described. Kitch is brave to confront the Witch, and Hassun is evil incarnate plus the ability to shape-shift. You had a vivid image of the insects working to heal Hassun's wound. The ending was exciting with the voice of his father telling Alsoomse he had to go for the Witch's head and needed to go to rescue the child. In a great touch, the child turns out to be his sister. Excellent and six-star rating. judi
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2012
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I'm always interested in stories dealing with shapeshifters. The characters are very well described. Kitch is brave to confront the Witch, and Hassun is evil incarnate plus the ability to shape-shift. You had a vivid image of the insects working to heal Hassun's wound. The ending was exciting with the voice of his father telling Alsoomse he had to go for the Witch's head and needed to go to rescue the child. In a great touch, the child turns out to be his sister. Excellent and six-star rating. judi
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much, judi. I really appreciate your generous and very thorough review. Shapeshifters, like doppelgangers have always interested me, too. I think I'll do something further on that theme another time. You are always so kind and supportive, my friend and I really appreciate it. Xxx Bev
Comment from IndianaIrish
Amazing story this is, Bev ... sure kept my interest wanting to see how Alsoomse would overcome the evil witch. Best wishes to you in the contest!
One thing to look at...
observe the proof (of) your vile acts,
Smiles,
Karyn :>)
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Amazing story this is, Bev ... sure kept my interest wanting to see how Alsoomse would overcome the evil witch. Best wishes to you in the contest!
One thing to look at...
observe the proof (of) your vile acts,
Smiles,
Karyn :>)
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thanks much, Karyn. I really appreciate your great review and good luck wishes. Someone else mentioned my SPAG, so I'll go back and make sure the correction sticks this time. Take care ... Bev
Comment from LJ-HBIC
WOW - this was really mesmerizing, and a great read! It captured me from the very beginning. The descriptions and visuals portrayed were very vivid and I found it very easy to envision the action of the story. REALLY GREAT!
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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WOW - this was really mesmerizing, and a great read! It captured me from the very beginning. The descriptions and visuals portrayed were very vivid and I found it very easy to envision the action of the story. REALLY GREAT!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you so very much, LJ. I sure appreciate your supportive and generous review. Take care! Bev
Comment from Gungalo
What a wonderful story you related to us. The characters were wonderfully developed and it was with a wise word the time was right. Gosh girl, I could barely breathe as I read. It was so deep in descriptions.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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What a wonderful story you related to us. The characters were wonderfully developed and it was with a wise word the time was right. Gosh girl, I could barely breathe as I read. It was so deep in descriptions.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much, Gungalo, for your wonderfully generous review. I sure appreciate your support - the six stars really warms my heart. Kindest regards, Bev
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Oh phooey, you know you are good girl.
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Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Writingfundimension:
This is quite a good story. Several times you caught me
a bit off guard. The first time was with the death of
Kitch - somehow I thought he would find a way to get
around the curse from Hassun. The last time was that the
girl on the travois was Chepi, Alsoomse's sister.
thanks for sharing
good luck in the contest
love,
jan
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Writingfundimension:
This is quite a good story. Several times you caught me
a bit off guard. The first time was with the death of
Kitch - somehow I thought he would find a way to get
around the curse from Hassun. The last time was that the
girl on the travois was Chepi, Alsoomse's sister.
thanks for sharing
good luck in the contest
love,
jan
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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I really appreciate your generous review and good luck wishes, Jan. Thanks much for stopping by. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from AprilShower
Hi, Bev. You have written quite a horror story. Too bad the boy's father had to die, though. This was written well. I noticed only one small word which you left out below:
observe the proof (of) your vile acts,
I enjoyed the story. :o)
April
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Hi, Bev. You have written quite a horror story. Too bad the boy's father had to die, though. This was written well. I noticed only one small word which you left out below:
observe the proof (of) your vile acts,
I enjoyed the story. :o)
April
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you very kindly for your generous and supportive review, April. I'm glad you caught the SPAG. Take care ... Bev
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You're welcome, Bev. You take care, too. :o) April
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Comment from TammyGail
You have such an amazing imagination
this story was great
you kept me on the edge throughout
vivid descriptions in this brought it to life
great entry for the contest thanks for sharing
and best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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You have such an amazing imagination
this story was great
you kept me on the edge throughout
vivid descriptions in this brought it to life
great entry for the contest thanks for sharing
and best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you so very much, Tammy. I am honored by your generous wishes and words of support. Kindest regards, Bev
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
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Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you, charlie. I appreciate the support and good wishes. Bev
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You're welcome, Bev. Charlie