Ode to Child's Pose
Discovering Yoga95 total reviews
Comment from Patricia Crandall
I thought this poem flowed well and you used the list of words wisely and creatively. The structure makes sense and nothing was forced. It incorporated Yoga into the strong mental images and I felt I was there. Good luck in the contest. Pat Crandall
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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I thought this poem flowed well and you used the list of words wisely and creatively. The structure makes sense and nothing was forced. It incorporated Yoga into the strong mental images and I felt I was there. Good luck in the contest. Pat Crandall
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you Pat for a very insightful review.
Comment from Ann Smith
I can imagine this pose and hear the breath as well. There is nothing like relaxing and slowing the body down. I like the creative way that you used the words in the contest, because this was a positive use of some of the negative words. Good luck with the contest. ann
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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I can imagine this pose and hear the breath as well. There is nothing like relaxing and slowing the body down. I like the creative way that you used the words in the contest, because this was a positive use of some of the negative words. Good luck with the contest. ann
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you so much for the very positive review to this work in yoga!
Comment from Mileko
You know, I have never understood yoga, at all. I think after reading this wonderfully crafted poem, you both satisfied me with good writing, as well as gave me insight as to what the big "yoga hype" was about.
Great job.
Thomas
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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You know, I have never understood yoga, at all. I think after reading this wonderfully crafted poem, you both satisfied me with good writing, as well as gave me insight as to what the big "yoga hype" was about.
Great job.
Thomas
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Hi Thomas. This is the best comment of all, that because of my writing you got an insight to what "yoga hype" is about. writing this review based only in my words.
Comment from fictionwriter
Well, I've tried the yoga thing, and it wan't my thing, so I'm impressed with anyone who can do those move. As for the praying, I usually just do that on my knees. Great little poem, sound relaxing. Great job.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Well, I've tried the yoga thing, and it wan't my thing, so I'm impressed with anyone who can do those move. As for the praying, I usually just do that on my knees. Great little poem, sound relaxing. Great job.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you fictionwriter for your honest reply. We are all different, God listens to all of us.
Comment from fionageorge
A very interesting and different topic you have used here. A well structured and free flowing poem, in free verse format, it is interesting AND informative. You met all the conditions of the contest, and I wish you luck.
Warmest regards, Marijke
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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A very interesting and different topic you have used here. A well structured and free flowing poem, in free verse format, it is interesting AND informative. You met all the conditions of the contest, and I wish you luck.
Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you Marijke for reading my work and for the best wishes.
Comment from ArtGal
Hi amada, I enjoyed reading your Author Notes, but even more, this wonderful poem. It flowed so smoothly right down the page which made for easy reading. I enjoyed your descrptions and your feelings while doing yoga. I tried, but afraid I'm not flexible enough. Well written and I enjoyed. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Hi amada, I enjoyed reading your Author Notes, but even more, this wonderful poem. It flowed so smoothly right down the page which made for easy reading. I enjoyed your descrptions and your feelings while doing yoga. I tried, but afraid I'm not flexible enough. Well written and I enjoyed. . .Sharon
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you Sharon for telling me how much you liked this poem on yoga.
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I enjoyed very much, but would like to take off a few years. I could have done it then, lol!
Comment from kintesiegel
This poem has a lovely feel to it and is a delight to experience. I really enjoyed it as well as the pose (because it is so comforting). The metaphor at the end kind of bothered me. All the flowing seemed to stop. I wondered if you might consider "a freshly crafted vase" or something rather than a container. But in fact as i write i realize that "vase" is just fine.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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This poem has a lovely feel to it and is a delight to experience. I really enjoyed it as well as the pose (because it is so comforting). The metaphor at the end kind of bothered me. All the flowing seemed to stop. I wondered if you might consider "a freshly crafted vase" or something rather than a container. But in fact as i write i realize that "vase" is just fine.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you for a very close read. I appreciate your attention to detail. I am truly honored.
Comment from Sandy P.
amada, the overwhelming feelings I take away from me with your beautiful poem is serenity and peacefulness. Your exceptional description of this yoga pose is done just beautifully. Enjoyed very much.
Sandy
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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amada, the overwhelming feelings I take away from me with your beautiful poem is serenity and peacefulness. Your exceptional description of this yoga pose is done just beautifully. Enjoyed very much.
Sandy
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Hi Sandy, that was entirely my wish, to express serenity through this work. Thank you!
Comment from lola29
Your poem is quite beautiful, and your delivery is very unique. I like your analogy with yoga, because both your presentations are total surrender to peace.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010
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Your poem is quite beautiful, and your delivery is very unique. I like your analogy with yoga, because both your presentations are total surrender to peace.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2010
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Thank you for reading this piece dear lola.
Comment from Katiesherrill
This is very beautiful. It had a flow as I read it, like a yoga instructor could be saying these words to help the participant experience the full umpact of the stretch. I like the feeling of surrendering to the
"daunting drugs
that fuel my darkness."
Nicely done.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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This is very beautiful. It had a flow as I read it, like a yoga instructor could be saying these words to help the participant experience the full umpact of the stretch. I like the feeling of surrendering to the
"daunting drugs
that fuel my darkness."
Nicely done.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2010
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Thank you Katiesherill for your great appreciation of those words.