Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

I love how you get to the heart of life itself in such a short span of time. I have a butterfly bush in my back yard and saw a dozen or so come to life. The metaphor is perfect for your piece. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from painchri589

Good

I loved your poem it really made me think and understand the caterpillar. You should work on not rhyming haiku should not rhyme. I loved the sensitive caterpillar poem.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013

It is not meant to be a haiku..just the syllable rule holds good.thank you for the review

Comment from Hareem.S

Excellent

This is a nice short poem. We all have to get out of our cosy cocoon one day. And when we are troubled we miss those childhood days when we were protected. I understand. A well written poem for the contest. Goodluck.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013

Neighbours always support.nice to meet you

Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran

Excellent

good write with imagery I enjoyed reading your poem. I feel there is no needs for changes in the poem. The display and presentation was excellent. Mary

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from Brocha1

Excellent

you have portrayed in just a few words a very deep and profound message. Your image of a butterfly really brings this image home. Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from cvcopac

Excellent

A wonderful sentiment expressed is in these few brief words. We always view early childhood, should we be fortunate, as beautiful, but we lived under the protection of the shelter: the cocoon. Good luck in the contest. Kenny

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013

thanks for excellent rating and wishes:)

Comment from Norbanus

Excellent

The butterfly impresses with its color
We all know it came from something duller.
Though we may just ignore the bland cocoon
We leap to see its reflection at high noon

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013

nice quatrain form review..thanks for excellent rating:)

Comment from Jean Lutz

Excellent

It is the struggle to come out of the cocoon that develops the beauty of the butterfly. Could it be the same in life? Beautifully written and I wish you well with the entry.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013

thanks for excellent review and good wishes.it means a lot:)

Comment from mumsyone

Excellent

Not only would some of us like to return to that cocoon-
life, but we, as parents, sometimes wish we could keep our children/grandchildren in that stage so that they wouldn't have to face the world and what it has become.

Good 5-7-5; good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013

thaks for excellent review:)

Comment from ruhama

Excellent

Excellent haiku. Wow, you packed a powerful message into just a few words. The alliteration silver/sweet was wonderful and I loved the artwork. Well done.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013

thanks for excellent review:)