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Comment from Aussie
Good luck with your contest entry; well presented and in three short lines you have told a story of life before birth - imagination is a wonderful part of being cocooned and wondering what life would be like outside the protection of the cocoon. Well done poet.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Good luck with your contest entry; well presented and in three short lines you have told a story of life before birth - imagination is a wonderful part of being cocooned and wondering what life would be like outside the protection of the cocoon. Well done poet.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from writer530
I really like cocoon-life. Your explanation of how we all may wish to return to those days when life was more carefree, as if living in a cocoon, protected from harsh reality, really puts this 5-7-5 into perspective. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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I really like cocoon-life. Your explanation of how we all may wish to return to those days when life was more carefree, as if living in a cocoon, protected from harsh reality, really puts this 5-7-5 into perspective. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
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You're very welcome!
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
I really like the analogy: the heart of a child inside a cocoon which eventually turns into a beautiful butterfly in a not so beautiful world. The desire to return to the cocoon and its safety understandable. Good artwork choice. Very good 5-7-5 true to form.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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I really like the analogy: the heart of a child inside a cocoon which eventually turns into a beautiful butterfly in a not so beautiful world. The desire to return to the cocoon and its safety understandable. Good artwork choice. Very good 5-7-5 true to form.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
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You are very welcome. MN :)
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Anupam:
I love the analogy of the innocence of childhood being
like living in a cocoon, then the hard cruel world tends
to barge in. Unfortunately, in too many cases, the chrysallis
is forced open before the right time which forever wounds
the child.
good luck in the contest
love,
jan
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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Anupam:
I love the analogy of the innocence of childhood being
like living in a cocoon, then the hard cruel world tends
to barge in. Unfortunately, in too many cases, the chrysallis
is forced open before the right time which forever wounds
the child.
good luck in the contest
love,
jan
Comment Written 03-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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I appreciate your praise and encouraging words.Thanks for your kind words and exceptional review:-)
Comment from poetic1988
this is a beautiful poem
to me this poem is about life
the beginning or rather birth
not out of cocoon
and also I know this is a 5-7-5 poem
but to me full moon
it didn't flow right in the middle of line
to me I would've liked full moon to be on a line of it's own
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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this is a beautiful poem
to me this poem is about life
the beginning or rather birth
not out of cocoon
and also I know this is a 5-7-5 poem
but to me full moon
it didn't flow right in the middle of line
to me I would've liked full moon to be on a line of it's own
Comment Written 03-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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Thanks for the review
Comment from angelmagnet
your 575 haiku is well done -it mentions season and the images catch a moment in time with your wonderful descriptions. The poem is as good as the wisdom it presents
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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your 575 haiku is well done -it mentions season and the images catch a moment in time with your wonderful descriptions. The poem is as good as the wisdom it presents
Comment Written 03-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from tedanytime
Your verse reflects your confrontation with the realities of life.
The cocoon protects the transformation taking place that changes lowly worm into a form that can fly.
The cocoon was temporary and not designed as a permanent abode. The worm grew from an egg to a form that enabled the insect to feed and grow and be strong enough to spin a cocoon.
The real life of the insect begins when the transformation is complete and it can fly to flowers and buds, collecting nectar for energy and pollen to fertilize the seeds of plants or flowers. It is a real purpose.
In the same way, humans have a purpose that transforms them if they will but find that purpose and fulfill it. But many choose to resist or complain.
...end of sermon...
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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Your verse reflects your confrontation with the realities of life.
The cocoon protects the transformation taking place that changes lowly worm into a form that can fly.
The cocoon was temporary and not designed as a permanent abode. The worm grew from an egg to a form that enabled the insect to feed and grow and be strong enough to spin a cocoon.
The real life of the insect begins when the transformation is complete and it can fly to flowers and buds, collecting nectar for energy and pollen to fertilize the seeds of plants or flowers. It is a real purpose.
In the same way, humans have a purpose that transforms them if they will but find that purpose and fulfill it. But many choose to resist or complain.
...end of sermon...
Comment Written 03-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from marion
Hi there
I love these 5/7/5 - especially without constraints. Nature is an amazing thing ... and I relate to the fact that we were cocooned in our early years as you say, from a harsh world. I live in the remote Marlborough Sounds New Zealand and it is here, as a older person, that I now cocoon myself! and write amongst nature. I appreciated this one. Marion.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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Hi there
I love these 5/7/5 - especially without constraints. Nature is an amazing thing ... and I relate to the fact that we were cocooned in our early years as you say, from a harsh world. I live in the remote Marlborough Sounds New Zealand and it is here, as a older person, that I now cocoon myself! and write amongst nature. I appreciated this one. Marion.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Anupum,
This was a very nice 5/7/5 describing that dreamy innocence of that cacoon of youth. Excellent flow of ideas and a beautiful subject to dream about; that silver moon in the sky, so present, yet so distant. great job--Ted
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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Dear Anupum,
This was a very nice 5/7/5 describing that dreamy innocence of that cacoon of youth. Excellent flow of ideas and a beautiful subject to dream about; that silver moon in the sky, so present, yet so distant. great job--Ted
Comment Written 03-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)
Comment from Leineco
This is a lovely 5-7-5 poem evoking hope and promise
of new life yet at the same time acknowledging the comfort
and security of the world we know.
It made me think of new graduates, marching up to
the podium...collecting their diplomas...dreaming of
the new life they were embarking on - unaware of the
challenges to come or the value of the cloistered world
they had experienced so far.
Poignant poem :-)
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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This is a lovely 5-7-5 poem evoking hope and promise
of new life yet at the same time acknowledging the comfort
and security of the world we know.
It made me think of new graduates, marching up to
the podium...collecting their diplomas...dreaming of
the new life they were embarking on - unaware of the
challenges to come or the value of the cloistered world
they had experienced so far.
Poignant poem :-)
Comment Written 03-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)