Comment from amada

Excellent

This is a very well written 5-7-5 poem. Insightful as well because we all fear rejection and pain so we stay in this wonderful soft cocoon. But outside, life is beautiful, still.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)t

Comment from fdgsr

Excellent

The message comes through a technically perfect form. The insect form coming out of the cocoon illustrates this perfectly. I wonder if you loaded the illustration and then wrote this gem, or did you write the verse and find the scene to fit? There is not much to criticize in a 5-7-5 with the rhythm, rhyme and reason of this.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from loibeth

Excellent

Yes, the real world out there is harsh and full of concern and challenges. Sometimes, I wish I could just go back into my cocoon - my carefree days and let everyone else makes the difficult decisions for me. :-)

Great 5/7/5 form and content!

Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from Supe

Excellent

Wow. Compelling. A very nice well done 5-7-5. Perfect in every way. Thank you for sharing. You said so much in a few short lines. I am glad you were recognized. Congratulations!

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from D.I.S.M

Excellent

I read your poem, checked the count, nothing to say on the count side, all ok. Your poem was incredibly moving. I see exactly where you are coming from and I read your authors notes and found the poem even more moving.
CONGRATULATIONS you have a great talent.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013

Your encouraging words mean a lot.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from Bryana

Exceptional

Perfect 5-7-5 poem, well written, this is what I like the most about your poem...the content. In those three lines your wrote something very true. In childhood we think the world is not so complicated and what a surprise when we grow up!
I wish you luck in all your writings.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013

Your encouragin words mean a lot to me.i appreciate your sweet,generous gesture.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from Garry Souders

Excellent

I love this poem, and what a great picture to go with it. The not out of cocoon line, is fascinating I can not tell if you were or were not out of the cocoon. I read it one way one time and the other way another time. The neatest thing about such short poetry is how many ways it can be interpreted. Thanks for writing it and keep up the good work.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013

I praise your encouraging words.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from Alan K Pease

Excellent

Great hope for your poem in the 5-7-5 (seventeen syllable) contest defining our nature in terms of a moth or butterfly emerging from a cocoon's comfort on a sweet starry night.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

It is a somber message that life is tougher than it's advertised as a child. This is an apt image of a protected and expectant soul experiencing the difference between what we want and what we have.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)

Comment from hari anand

Excellent

Wow, how beautiful is this your imagination of child's life under the cocooned world created by parents. Yes it can never be same again.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013

Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:-)