When Two Become One
Free Verse23 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written love poem. The planets GI crrazy when two people become one. There is noone else present in the universe but the two of you.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
A very well-written love poem. The planets GI crrazy when two people become one. There is noone else present in the universe but the two of you.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much for the review!
Comment from royowen
I rather like this "passionate love in black and white" poetry contest entry. Yes, this is a great descriptive, image generating work, there's a lot poured into this very expressive, really good verbal projections of the subject matter. Well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
I rather like this "passionate love in black and white" poetry contest entry. Yes, this is a great descriptive, image generating work, there's a lot poured into this very expressive, really good verbal projections of the subject matter. Well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 18-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Thank you for such a nice review!
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Most welcome
Comment from Dustybones
Good job at the prompt. You've kept it clean enough so you don't need to put any warnings on your poem. I would hope everyone wouldn't need a warning.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
Good job at the prompt. You've kept it clean enough so you don't need to put any warnings on your poem. I would hope everyone wouldn't need a warning.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much for the review!
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. This is a lovely and well-written poem. You have captured the essence of the writing prompt in a perfect manner. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
Excellent. This is a lovely and well-written poem. You have captured the essence of the writing prompt in a perfect manner. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much for the review!
Comment from Dean Kuch
Yeah, it's a wonderful, once-in-a-lifetime feeling when it's for real, isn't it, Allison? It's like nothing else exists in the entire universe other than you and your beloved.
It is a feeling that comes along rarely in life, and one which should be cherished when it does.
Well composed romantic fare you've penned here.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2016
Yeah, it's a wonderful, once-in-a-lifetime feeling when it's for real, isn't it, Allison? It's like nothing else exists in the entire universe other than you and your beloved.
It is a feeling that comes along rarely in life, and one which should be cherished when it does.
Well composed romantic fare you've penned here.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2016
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Thank you so much!
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You are more than welcome, Allison.
Comment from Kingsland
When two become one, they will need some bigger clothes. Also more food at the table for that big individual, and some oversize furniture, just kidding. This was a well written poetic voice that I enjoyed reading and writing this review for... John
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
When two become one, they will need some bigger clothes. Also more food at the table for that big individual, and some oversize furniture, just kidding. This was a well written poetic voice that I enjoyed reading and writing this review for... John
Comment Written 10-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the review!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, Allison, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the love that is surrounded by nature. I enjoyed reading this one.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
this is an excellent write, Allison, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the love that is surrounded by nature. I enjoyed reading this one.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Thank you!!
Comment from dragonpoet
The short lines give you time to feel the emotion of the people as they are attracted to each other. It gives the feeling a strong pull and need to be together.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
The short lines give you time to feel the emotion of the people as they are attracted to each other. It gives the feeling a strong pull and need to be together.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much for the review!
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You are so very welcome
dragonpoet
Comment from adewpearl
I like your closing rhyme
excellent use of enjambment to make your poem flow
lovely detail of setting that contributes to the upbeat, romantic mood :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
I like your closing rhyme
excellent use of enjambment to make your poem flow
lovely detail of setting that contributes to the upbeat, romantic mood :-) Brooke
Comment Written 27-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Thank you Brook!!
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. When in the arms of one we love, we can feel like we are floating among the stars. The moon will lend it's light to our love. There is just two in the land of love. Great work.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
I love the picture. I love the poem. When in the arms of one we love, we can feel like we are floating among the stars. The moon will lend it's light to our love. There is just two in the land of love. Great work.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2013
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Thank you!!