Ode to Child's Pose
Discovering Yoga95 total reviews
Comment from Deejharrington
The best of luck in the contest. I loved how you put the feeling of the pose into words. It's exactly how it comes to you as you go into the pose. No nits or spags, I wouldn't change a word.
dj
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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The best of luck in the contest. I loved how you put the feeling of the pose into words. It's exactly how it comes to you as you go into the pose. No nits or spags, I wouldn't change a word.
dj
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you dj for the awesome review. Much appreciated.
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you're welcome
deb
Comment from closetpoetjester
What a uniquely lovely piece of writing. All Hail to Yoga! This was eloquently written and I honestly felt quite relaxed as I read. Your fluid descriptions of various positions had me wanting to get down on the floor and do some yoga. A serene and pleasant read. Glad you shared this and thank you.
Cheers closetpoetjester
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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What a uniquely lovely piece of writing. All Hail to Yoga! This was eloquently written and I honestly felt quite relaxed as I read. Your fluid descriptions of various positions had me wanting to get down on the floor and do some yoga. A serene and pleasant read. Glad you shared this and thank you.
Cheers closetpoetjester
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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I truly thank you for letting the flow go and feel relaxed at the tone of this work. Thank you!
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Amanda, in this poem I could even feel the motions of bending and breathing and feel the stress released. I liked the flow of the poem and I think you did very well with using almost all the words.
Well done and presented. Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Hi Amanda, in this poem I could even feel the motions of bending and breathing and feel the stress released. I liked the flow of the poem and I think you did very well with using almost all the words.
Well done and presented. Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Lots of luv to you, dear and faithful friend.
Comment from sgalletti
LOVELY poem! Your meter matches your words and story about the power and benefits of yoga beautifully. The reader never realizes you were constrained to use certain words. I wish you had entered this piece in the contest I recently sponsored-I don't sponsor many! (The Meter Matches the Story) as this is a perfect example of what I am looking for....Great piece of writing. Sue
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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LOVELY poem! Your meter matches your words and story about the power and benefits of yoga beautifully. The reader never realizes you were constrained to use certain words. I wish you had entered this piece in the contest I recently sponsored-I don't sponsor many! (The Meter Matches the Story) as this is a perfect example of what I am looking for....Great piece of writing. Sue
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Oh, I'm so sorry! I looked into this contest but I didn't understand the rules! PM me the next time you sponsor one! Thank you for following my moves so well!
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for your notes about the required words, since they disappeared into your poem, and for the fascinating details about yoga. I especially enjoyed your phrases "pray with my body," "earth arises" and "internal race." I also liked your "flower" simile and "vessel" and "vase" metaphors. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your notes about the required words, since they disappeared into your poem, and for the fascinating details about yoga. I especially enjoyed your phrases "pray with my body," "earth arises" and "internal race." I also liked your "flower" simile and "vessel" and "vase" metaphors. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you for the love in your review. I think you would enjoy this practice! My besto you.
Comment from JW
Great job - especially considering the words you had to use. Your use of description was also fantastic. I could easily see the scene before me.
Thanks for sharing this.
Jonathon
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Great job - especially considering the words you had to use. Your use of description was also fantastic. I could easily see the scene before me.
Thanks for sharing this.
Jonathon
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you Jonathan. Your comments are very welcomed because I was indecise on being able to project these movements and feeling into a cold computer.
Comment from jasmh
I enjoyed your poem. Both its flow and its message. Well done. I can make no suggestion for improvement
Congratulations on meeting the contest requirements with such nice work. Good luck
Also, I agree. Childspose is a wonderful place to be. Especially after 5 minutes of downward dog!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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I enjoyed your poem. Both its flow and its message. Well done. I can make no suggestion for improvement
Congratulations on meeting the contest requirements with such nice work. Good luck
Also, I agree. Childspose is a wonderful place to be. Especially after 5 minutes of downward dog!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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I enjoy that downward dog! So glad I found a fellow yoggi, is that the right word?
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Its what my teacher calls us. Yeah, downward dog is better then pidgeon!
Comment from Deanita
This is a delightful piece my friend.
I love these lines...
Serene escape
to connect
with the rise and fall
of my breath.
It was a pleasure to read your poem.
Good luck in the contest.
Hugs
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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This is a delightful piece my friend.
I love these lines...
Serene escape
to connect
with the rise and fall
of my breath.
It was a pleasure to read your poem.
Good luck in the contest.
Hugs
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you Deanita for being so early up in the morning!
Comment from words
What a delightful use of those words.
An ode to one of my favorite yoga positions.
There is noting like coming back to a child's pose after a series of sun salutes.
Well done!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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What a delightful use of those words.
An ode to one of my favorite yoga positions.
There is noting like coming back to a child's pose after a series of sun salutes.
Well done!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you words. About writing about those sun salutes!
Comment from lpstribling
Amanda -
I like that you wrote a poem about Child's Pose. I think this is my favorite Yoga pose.
It is serene and I can get a full image of they way your body is moving in the pose with this poem.
When you talk of breathing out your internal race, are you talking about the inner dialogue or inner stress that you're feeling?
I thank you for the chance to review your poem.
The last verse had me thinking for a bit, but now I think I get it. Everything (all parts of you) come together in a new and fresh body.
Solid poem, thank you.
LP
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Amanda -
I like that you wrote a poem about Child's Pose. I think this is my favorite Yoga pose.
It is serene and I can get a full image of they way your body is moving in the pose with this poem.
When you talk of breathing out your internal race, are you talking about the inner dialogue or inner stress that you're feeling?
I thank you for the chance to review your poem.
The last verse had me thinking for a bit, but now I think I get it. Everything (all parts of you) come together in a new and fresh body.
Solid poem, thank you.
LP
Comment Written 09-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2010
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Thank you LP for such a thoughtful review. About your question, on breathing out my internal race, this is a feeling of letting go of my tensions, stressors, etc. Quite a releasing feeling.
It was a pleasure to get to know you. I'm from Bremerton, near Spokane in Washington State.
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Amada -
Sweet! My wife is currently the only Washingtonian of us right now as I'm in Japan with my job. But, the next time we're in your area we should definitely get together! Please take care.
LP