The Perfect Hiding Place
a short, short12 total reviews
Comment from cupa tea
I heard about that law too. Makes good since to me. Things that can not be opened from the inside should not be discarded with doors still on. Good story...Good luck
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
I heard about that law too. Makes good since to me. Things that can not be opened from the inside should not be discarded with doors still on. Good story...Good luck
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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thank you so much
Comment from karenina
This is terror. This is anxiety producing...
I am short of breath, lost in Tommy's joy turned in on itself. A million racing thoughts... His parents! Who found him?
His boyish eyes wide in disbelief! Grief has swallowed me whole...
Karenina
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
This is terror. This is anxiety producing...
I am short of breath, lost in Tommy's joy turned in on itself. A million racing thoughts... His parents! Who found him?
His boyish eyes wide in disbelief! Grief has swallowed me whole...
Karenina
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Years ago I remember hearing of such an incident, and have never forgotten it. It was a terrible thing.
I'm sorry it produced such a reaction, but it shows that the story caught your imagination.
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Do not be sorry! You got my vote! Incredible writing. That's what we're here for!
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thank you very much!
Katharine
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I you were addressing me as Katharine....my name is Karenina.
If you were signing your make-up lease delete it as this is a blind contest and identity of writer is meant to be anonymous. -- great story!
Comment from Chris Davies
Such a dangerous thing to do - hiding in a refrigerator. I remember horror stories from when I was a kid. You've captured the fear well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
Such a dangerous thing to do - hiding in a refrigerator. I remember horror stories from when I was a kid. You've captured the fear well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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thank you very much!
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
Impressive story! You did a great job with the prompt. Your writing is descriptive and I felt as though I was there playing with them. I felt hot and stuffy reading it. Well done!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
Impressive story! You did a great job with the prompt. Your writing is descriptive and I felt as though I was there playing with them. I felt hot and stuffy reading it. Well done!
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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thank you so much. I appreciate your neat comments.
Comment from Wendy G
This is horrific but it could happen so easily. It must have been terrifying for the boy, and a horrible shock for the other children. Best wishes for yor entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
This is horrific but it could happen so easily. It must have been terrifying for the boy, and a horrible shock for the other children. Best wishes for yor entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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this did happen years ago. I remember hearing about it. Supposedly a law was passed that old refrigerators, left outside - anywhere - had to have the doors off. Pictures on Google proved otherwise.
Thank you for your good wishes.
Comment from jessizero
This was scary and frightfully upsetting. You did a good job with the prompt, though, and this was a good piece of fiction. Good luck with the competition.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
This was scary and frightfully upsetting. You did a good job with the prompt, though, and this was a good piece of fiction. Good luck with the competition.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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thank you. I remember how upset I was, years ago, when I heard of such an incident.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Goodness, I have heard of these things happening in real life. It is not a good thing whatsoever. There is no air so you cannot live too long before the oxygen is used up inside.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
Goodness, I have heard of these things happening in real life. It is not a good thing whatsoever. There is no air so you cannot live too long before the oxygen is used up inside.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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you're right. awful!
Comment from Anne Johnston
Your story is very well written but such a sad one. You picked a good example of complete darkness for the contest. I, too, can remember hearing stories of things like this happening.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
Your story is very well written but such a sad one. You picked a good example of complete darkness for the contest. I, too, can remember hearing stories of things like this happening.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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thanks, Anne.
That awful memory popped into my head when I read "Dark".
There was a book, a few years ago about a little girl, during the Second World War, I think, who locked her little brother in the closet to keep him safely hidden from the Germans while she left to run an errand, and for some reason, she never could get back.
Both, awful!
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You are welcome. Just thinking about it makes me shudder.
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me, too.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
This happens more than expected and why many areas require the door be removed, or the handle shucked................................................................................
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
This happens more than expected and why many areas require the door be removed, or the handle shucked................................................................................
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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yes. I remember one instance when it did. I've never forgotten it.
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Glad you are safe.
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oh. thank you. I heard about it years ago happening to a child.
really terrible.
Comment from Bridge
A very well written piece. I could visualise the whole thing. Your descriptions are really powerful. I have a son and the last paragraph gave me goosebumps.
With regards and best wishes
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
A very well written piece. I could visualise the whole thing. Your descriptions are really powerful. I have a son and the last paragraph gave me goosebumps.
With regards and best wishes
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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I remember years ago, hearing about this happening and have never been able to forget it.