Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Mind, Body, Spirit"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from Eternal Muse
That was a powerful poem many of us can relate to.
Yes, as time goes by, there are more aches and pains, sleepless nights and periods of weakness.
We just have to wake every day saying to ourselves: "There is so much to be grateful for." God was indeed very generous, creating many miracles for us to behold.
God bless you. Hold on, it will get better.
Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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That was a powerful poem many of us can relate to.
Yes, as time goes by, there are more aches and pains, sleepless nights and periods of weakness.
We just have to wake every day saying to ourselves: "There is so much to be grateful for." God was indeed very generous, creating many miracles for us to behold.
God bless you. Hold on, it will get better.
Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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EM - thank you for the good wishes - and yes, I have a death grip on living long and well --- pun intended :)
Comment from Frank Malley
Mind, Body, Spirit" by JLR uses a friendly tone to describe in free verse some of the satisfactions a long life has given the narrator, whom we visit as he awaits sleep and "Crazy thoughts [are]....racing around the track of thoughts in my midnight reverie." This is a poem by an experienced individual who has used a long life to arrive at critical instructions to himself: "...to pause and breathe in the present moment"; "...to work at doing more good..." This part of human life, ending the day while anticipating sleep, can never be too much recognized and relished for its universal humanity.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Mind, Body, Spirit" by JLR uses a friendly tone to describe in free verse some of the satisfactions a long life has given the narrator, whom we visit as he awaits sleep and "Crazy thoughts [are]....racing around the track of thoughts in my midnight reverie." This is a poem by an experienced individual who has used a long life to arrive at critical instructions to himself: "...to pause and breathe in the present moment"; "...to work at doing more good..." This part of human life, ending the day while anticipating sleep, can never be too much recognized and relished for its universal humanity.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thanks Frank!
Comment from karenina
Remember, as a child, when you could fall into a deep slumber in no time at all and awaken with the sun? Ah, as the years accumulate it's not so easy as all that! I ping-pong between being mindful, mindless, and minding my own business... (Especially the latter!)
So many nights I want to find the "delete" button in my busy brain and (as you so expertly say): "release my mind and body to recharge,
preparing to fully embrace yet another day."
Terrific free verse!
Karenina
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Remember, as a child, when you could fall into a deep slumber in no time at all and awaken with the sun? Ah, as the years accumulate it's not so easy as all that! I ping-pong between being mindful, mindless, and minding my own business... (Especially the latter!)
So many nights I want to find the "delete" button in my busy brain and (as you so expertly say): "release my mind and body to recharge,
preparing to fully embrace yet another day."
Terrific free verse!
Karenina
Comment Written 15-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Smiling .. as I do remember and I so thank you for your kind words!
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I was captivated by the atmosphere of this poem and the profound combined with the ordinary passage of life. This represents beautifully what it's like to "pause and breathe in the present moment."
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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I was captivated by the atmosphere of this poem and the profound combined with the ordinary passage of life. This represents beautifully what it's like to "pause and breathe in the present moment."
Comment Written 15-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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Verna, thank you - Yes! To pause and breathe, savoring the moments. This is living.
Comment from Fleedleflump
I love that you start and end with sleep, making this thoughtful piece feel like the ponderances of someone either during a wakeful day or restless night. Great use of free verse to control pace in a way that doesn't interfere with flow.
Beautifully written.
Mike
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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I love that you start and end with sleep, making this thoughtful piece feel like the ponderances of someone either during a wakeful day or restless night. Great use of free verse to control pace in a way that doesn't interfere with flow.
Beautifully written.
Mike
Comment Written 15-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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Thanks for your positive comments, free verse is my favorite of poetic explorations.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I'm 61 but I do experience many of these things you mentioned here. I never used to have trouble to sleep but now I do occasionally, but I don't care. I can function just fine without a full night of sleep. I care less about what others think of me, too. I have finally accepted myself as who I'm.
Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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I'm 61 but I do experience many of these things you mentioned here. I never used to have trouble to sleep but now I do occasionally, but I don't care. I can function just fine without a full night of sleep. I care less about what others think of me, too. I have finally accepted myself as who I'm.
Well done.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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Jasmine Girl, thanks for the review. I trust you will discover life just gets better and better,although perhaps not physically easier.
Comment from sunnilicious
This is my first time hearing of a titmouse. It made my mind think elsewhere... a small insectivorous birds. And such a pretty bird. Small and cuter than the bluejays.
Focus and rest are necessary to accomplish in our everyday lives. Nice work. Good luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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This is my first time hearing of a titmouse. It made my mind think elsewhere... a small insectivorous birds. And such a pretty bird. Small and cuter than the bluejays.
Focus and rest are necessary to accomplish in our everyday lives. Nice work. Good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 14-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the review and I am pleased you had discovered a new avian creature.
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of your work reminisces recapitulations of the mind in an old man's presumed state of reverie.
The work highlights the old man's to and fro recapitulation through his eventful life and how he eventually brought it to an end in preparation for yet another day.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of similes and imagery.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces recapitulations of the mind in an old man's presumed state of reverie.
The work highlights the old man's to and fro recapitulation through his eventful life and how he eventually brought it to an end in preparation for yet another day.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of similes and imagery.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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Lloyd, thank you! Yes, you connected with this message.
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from LovnPeace
I love this and so relate at eighty-two. I have given into a kind of mental prayer of late when I awake. A Thank you, to God for another day. It comes automatically now with no thought. Well done. Blessing, xo. B
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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I love this and so relate at eighty-two. I have given into a kind of mental prayer of late when I awake. A Thank you, to God for another day. It comes automatically now with no thought. Well done. Blessing, xo. B
Comment Written 14-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2022
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LovenPeace, Wow! You have me bt a decade but we seem to share the same wisdom, thank you for your review.
Comment from Wendy G
An interesting and relevant free form for many or most of us. I like the way the word "mind" kept recurring in different contexts, often linked to your wishes and goals for your body. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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An interesting and relevant free form for many or most of us. I like the way the word "mind" kept recurring in different contexts, often linked to your wishes and goals for your body. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 22-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Hi Wendy, thank you for reading and commenting this poem
