Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 48 "Symphony of raindrops"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from Boogienights
I love the rain and you have very effectively used your words to paint a lovely picture of it. I also love this form of poetry, its not easy to write. Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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I love the rain and you have very effectively used your words to paint a lovely picture of it. I also love this form of poetry, its not easy to write. Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Thank You!
Comment from DeboraDyess
What a beautiful nonet! I'm a musician so I particularly appreciate the terminology you've chosen and the idea of a raindrop symphony!
Blessings and thank you for sharing.
Deb
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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What a beautiful nonet! I'm a musician so I particularly appreciate the terminology you've chosen and the idea of a raindrop symphony!
Blessings and thank you for sharing.
Deb
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Deb, thank you, I am pleased it resonated with your musical talent.
Comment from Fleedleflump
Mmm, lovely paralleling (thought I'd made that word up!) of orchestral arrangements and nature's soundtrack. There's always that lovely, underlying symphonic susurrus, even on the quietest days, reminding us of the sheer depth of the world around us.
Beautiful writing :-)
Mike
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Mmm, lovely paralleling (thought I'd made that word up!) of orchestral arrangements and nature's soundtrack. There's always that lovely, underlying symphonic susurrus, even on the quietest days, reminding us of the sheer depth of the world around us.
Beautiful writing :-)
Mike
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Thanks Mike!
Comment from Anne Johnston
"Pitter-pattering rain creates rhythm," Your poem is very well written, extolling the beautiful music of nature. Well chosen words, and a lovely picture to illustrate.
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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"Pitter-pattering rain creates rhythm," Your poem is very well written, extolling the beautiful music of nature. Well chosen words, and a lovely picture to illustrate.
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Anne, thank you!
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You are welcome
Comment from JoannaN
This is such a nice tongue-twister, just try to read it aloud :) The sound of it actually resembles the sound of rain drumming on window glass. Nicely done :)
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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This is such a nice tongue-twister, just try to read it aloud :) The sound of it actually resembles the sound of rain drumming on window glass. Nicely done :)
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Joanna, thank you!
Comment from Bill Schott
This nonet, Symphony of Raindrops, follows the nine to one descending syllable lines and brings the readers an understanding of the natural music available on rainy days. Nice.
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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This nonet, Symphony of Raindrops, follows the nine to one descending syllable lines and brings the readers an understanding of the natural music available on rainy days. Nice.
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Bill, thank you.
Comment from elainec4
What an outstanding job on this nonet. You met the syllable count, while conveying a meaningful message. When I re-read, I discovered your musical word in each line. Wow! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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What an outstanding job on this nonet. You met the syllable count, while conveying a meaningful message. When I re-read, I discovered your musical word in each line. Wow! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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elainec4, Thank you for realizing the use of musical genre throughout! Your six stars are very appreciated.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Interesting nonet JLR. Love the sound of the cascading rain. Never gave it thought as a musical but as written it surely can be, with a twist of imagination. Might even become a top ten song but more than likely it would need to be Country and Western.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Interesting nonet JLR. Love the sound of the cascading rain. Never gave it thought as a musical but as written it surely can be, with a twist of imagination. Might even become a top ten song but more than likely it would need to be Country and Western.
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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I can go for country and western!
Comment from Sarah Tummey
Hi. This is really lovely. I like all the musical references. "Pitter-pattering rain creates rhythm" is 10 syllables; that's the only thing. You could do "makes rhythm" or "is rhythm".
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reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Hi. This is really lovely. I like all the musical references. "Pitter-pattering rain creates rhythm" is 10 syllables; that's the only thing. You could do "makes rhythm" or "is rhythm".
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Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Sarah sorry that you see this in error, I have used the correct syllabic count
As follows: pitter- 2 // pattering- 3 // rain - 1 // creates - 2 // rhythm - 1 // 9 total.
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I see. Fair enough if you're happy with it. Rhythm is 2 in my book, because that's how I say it.
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That?s okay I need to follow the dictionary all the time, English is my second language so I could be wrong that?s why I value your input
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Very impressed that you're writing poetry in your second language. I've never tried to write a poem in another language. I've been learning Welsh and have found it very difficult.
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Wow a tough language, congratulations.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello JLR a good day to you. As always I hope all is well with you. I enjoyed your No Rules poem entry, I like you describe the rain as making music. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Hello JLR a good day to you. As always I hope all is well with you. I enjoyed your No Rules poem entry, I like you describe the rain as making music. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you so much, I hope you are doing great!
