Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "The Cost of Battle"Musings of an old man - 2022
29 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a lovely tribute poem JLR, to all who have and are still serving. I love your closing couplet
remorse forgot
the brave are not
so true and should always be so.
Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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This is a lovely tribute poem JLR, to all who have and are still serving. I love your closing couplet
remorse forgot
the brave are not
so true and should always be so.
Well done.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Pearl, thank you so much!
Comment from nomi338
Combat was much more personal then. The danger more imminent, but somehow less threatening. As opposed to being bombarded by attack from both land and air Simultaneously. Therefore the opportunity for brave act being widely noted was greater.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Combat was much more personal then. The danger more imminent, but somehow less threatening. As opposed to being bombarded by attack from both land and air Simultaneously. Therefore the opportunity for brave act being widely noted was greater.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Nomi, yes I was in reflection of WW1, as I wrote this poem. The last time that horses were on the field of battle and combat was literally hand-to-hand in many instances.
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Technology has made killing more devastating, widespread, and impersonal. Today many never even see their victims, so mass killing never touches them the way having to look into the eyes of the man you just killed does not bother you as much.
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Your last line sums it up nicely. "the brave are not." Would that we all remember the brave who have stood in our stead and defended against whatever enemy is there. The words in your poem sometimes summon dire scenes and horrific events, but that is conflict, and the brave certainly deserve not to be forgotten.
Good job, thanks
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Your last line sums it up nicely. "the brave are not." Would that we all remember the brave who have stood in our stead and defended against whatever enemy is there. The words in your poem sometimes summon dire scenes and horrific events, but that is conflict, and the brave certainly deserve not to be forgotten.
Good job, thanks
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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Gary, your words ring so true! Thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from John Ciarmello
A beautiful tribute to our men and women that are serving and have served, so we remain free. What a sacrifice for them as well as their families. I've read many tributes, but yours hit the mark entirely.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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A beautiful tribute to our men and women that are serving and have served, so we remain free. What a sacrifice for them as well as their families. I've read many tributes, but yours hit the mark entirely.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
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John, I am grateful for your validation. Thank you!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This poem is excellent in every respect--skillfully written, moving, patriotic, and vividly descriptive of the workings of war, the bloodshed, and the heroism.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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This poem is excellent in every respect--skillfully written, moving, patriotic, and vividly descriptive of the workings of war, the bloodshed, and the heroism.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Janice, thank you for your validating review.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Young and old, short and tall, they are carrying out orders to shoot whatever moves. To stand bold. Once the war is over, they return home as a hero. However, the hero behind closed doors reveals the truth. Thank you.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Young and old, short and tall, they are carrying out orders to shoot whatever moves. To stand bold. Once the war is over, they return home as a hero. However, the hero behind closed doors reveals the truth. Thank you.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Carolyn, said quite truthfully! Thank you.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Lilly Flowers
I think the rhythm and fast pace of this poem reflects the fast pace of people in battle. It is very well written.
Our soldiers are brave but I can't say the same about the politicians who send them into battle. Regards, Lilly
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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I think the rhythm and fast pace of this poem reflects the fast pace of people in battle. It is very well written.
Our soldiers are brave but I can't say the same about the politicians who send them into battle. Regards, Lilly
Comment Written 13-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Amen, Lilly! Well stated and quite honest.
Comment from Fleedleflump
You've generated a great rhythm with this piece, pulsing forth and back, not until the tides of battle. I like the contradt of pride against the horrors of reality, but the end result of admiration being the same.
Beautifully done.
Mike
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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You've generated a great rhythm with this piece, pulsing forth and back, not until the tides of battle. I like the contradt of pride against the horrors of reality, but the end result of admiration being the same.
Beautifully done.
Mike
Comment Written 13-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Mike!
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is well written and emotional. I can feel your passion come pouring through your words.
The image you chose is moody and sets the tone immediately.
The rhymes flow naturally without force and led me down the page.
This is an important piece that I hope will members will read.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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This is well written and emotional. I can feel your passion come pouring through your words.
The image you chose is moody and sets the tone immediately.
The rhymes flow naturally without force and led me down the page.
This is an important piece that I hope will members will read.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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K.L. Thank you very much for your validating comments.
Comment from karenina
The remembrance of the valor and the sacrifice of war carries through in this moving poem. When tackling a subject such as this it is often restricting to have to worry about meter and rhyme. That is, for some poets. (Me! For me!)
You've done this masterfully. From the first line to the closing couplet each time I read this through my focus was on your meaning ~ only after did I go back and follow your meter and rhyme!
Karenina
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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The remembrance of the valor and the sacrifice of war carries through in this moving poem. When tackling a subject such as this it is often restricting to have to worry about meter and rhyme. That is, for some poets. (Me! For me!)
You've done this masterfully. From the first line to the closing couplet each time I read this through my focus was on your meaning ~ only after did I go back and follow your meter and rhyme!
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Karenina, thank you! I am so honored by your comments.
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Great poem!
