Set me Free
Freedom from struggles, racism and cruelty of this world.19 total reviews
Comment from Marienkiefer
Hello Charity. This poem inspires a lot of thought about what freedom is.
Standout in your writing:
-It feels like Freedom in this poem seems to be the albatross around the neck.
-Some tough questions are raised here and discussions that appear to relate to aspirations and choice.
-Freedom seems separate from choice within the lines of this poem,
Is it freedom that is the burden in this poem?
Once again a very stirring write that leaves readers contemplating.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
Hello Charity. This poem inspires a lot of thought about what freedom is.
Standout in your writing:
-It feels like Freedom in this poem seems to be the albatross around the neck.
-Some tough questions are raised here and discussions that appear to relate to aspirations and choice.
-Freedom seems separate from choice within the lines of this poem,
Is it freedom that is the burden in this poem?
Once again a very stirring write that leaves readers contemplating.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2022
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Lack of freedom is. You can be enslave to struggles, life's circumstances, racism, addiction, toxic relationships and discrimation.
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My pleasure, Charity. You are doing some very provocative and unique work. Keep writing. All the best.
Marienkiefer 🌸
Comment from Paul McFarland
Again, another good slam poem. Have you ever sat down and smiled at some memory that has popped into your head? I hope so. Write me about that smile.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
Again, another good slam poem. Have you ever sat down and smiled at some memory that has popped into your head? I hope so. Write me about that smile.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Yes I have sat down and reminisce about my poetry lines and story. Always good to hear from you.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
... and the beat goes on and will with or without you. I wish you would pause to celebrate the blessings surrounding you. Share what God has gifted all of us. Sight and sound and all the senses, beauty's endless panoramic views. A brain that assimilates words as easily as opening an unlocked door. So, few think without effort how sentences are formed. May your holidays be brighter than those past. You are gifted!
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
... and the beat goes on and will with or without you. I wish you would pause to celebrate the blessings surrounding you. Share what God has gifted all of us. Sight and sound and all the senses, beauty's endless panoramic views. A brain that assimilates words as easily as opening an unlocked door. So, few think without effort how sentences are formed. May your holidays be brighter than those past. You are gifted!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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May you have a great holiday as well. I always appreciate your review.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the picture. Good choice!
I totally agree with the following sentence.
"Life without liberty is like a body without spirit."
During childhood, we need a ride. This felt like no freedom.
At work, we have working hours and surprised overtime.
There are many cases whereby we feel we are boxed or even at times felt like in prison.
Thanks for sharing the wonderful piece...
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
I like the picture. Good choice!
I totally agree with the following sentence.
"Life without liberty is like a body without spirit."
During childhood, we need a ride. This felt like no freedom.
At work, we have working hours and surprised overtime.
There are many cases whereby we feel we are boxed or even at times felt like in prison.
Thanks for sharing the wonderful piece...
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thanks for your feedback
Comment from Aussie
Charity, we come to earth to learn lessons. No burden too great unless we chase it. Physically, I am useless. I lost my leg in a car accident. Without faith it is impossible to please god. We are not here to please ourselves. I understand your depression = anxiety. Trying to turn away from your past is so hard for you. Sometimes it does help to just listen instead of eating yourself inside out. You are here for a reason, rise above the wounds of yesterday and start anew. K xx
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
Charity, we come to earth to learn lessons. No burden too great unless we chase it. Physically, I am useless. I lost my leg in a car accident. Without faith it is impossible to please god. We are not here to please ourselves. I understand your depression = anxiety. Trying to turn away from your past is so hard for you. Sometimes it does help to just listen instead of eating yourself inside out. You are here for a reason, rise above the wounds of yesterday and start anew. K xx
Comment Written 08-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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OMG. Thank you for sharing your story. You are a very strong individual. You are a example to us all. How did the car accident happen. If you don't mind me asking?
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Riding my motorcycle home from work, I was hit by a car that came from a stop sign on my left. Three months in hospital, 13 operations, nine transfusions. They were trying to save the leg - it would have been a two-year rebuilding and many operations. I asked my surgeon and he said I had to make the decision, there was no choice. OK that was in 1982. When I got out of hospital and got my payout, which took three years to come through the High Court. I started touring Europe on crutches - had a whale of a time. Wouldn't have missed for anything. Now I am 77 still walk a tiny bit. How's that girl? You can do it my friend. Kay xx
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Happy Christmas Charity. Why not shift focus and write about people that have made an impression on your life - good or bad. If you stop writing about your pain, you will be free. Love from Australia K xx
Comment from jake cosmos aller
Great poem about life and the journey we all take to find peace and freedom
God almighty set me free!!
If freedom never comes, heaven is where I rather be.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
Great poem about life and the journey we all take to find peace and freedom
God almighty set me free!!
If freedom never comes, heaven is where I rather be.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Charity,
This poem tells of a rough time you are having with getting out from under your past and/or present troubles. It shows how trapped/imprisoned you feel. And that you are seeking God's help
to get you free. Hopefully this will have soon and you won't wish for death any more.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Happy Holidays.
Joan
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
Hi Charity,
This poem tells of a rough time you are having with getting out from under your past and/or present troubles. It shows how trapped/imprisoned you feel. And that you are seeking God's help
to get you free. Hopefully this will have soon and you won't wish for death any more.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Happy Holidays.
Joan
Comment Written 07-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Always writing and Happy Holidays to you and your family.
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Hi Charity.
Good to hear and thanks.
Joan
Comment from Pearl Edwards
To me this is a passionate plea in a poem seeking a way to set yourself free
from this generational curse
I hope through your writing, if this is your life, that sharing, penning, helps. Meanwhile stay as well as you can, cheers.
Valda
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
To me this is a passionate plea in a poem seeking a way to set yourself free
from this generational curse
I hope through your writing, if this is your life, that sharing, penning, helps. Meanwhile stay as well as you can, cheers.
Valda
Comment Written 07-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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I appreciate your advice and feedback.
Comment from mermaids
You have many excellent lines here that impact the reader. "Many days I feel like a dog on a leash" brings forth feelings of oppression and lack of freedom. "Hoping all of my internal damage will start to peel" gives hope to feeling better and moving forward. Your strong steady beat and use of words tell a story that is real.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
You have many excellent lines here that impact the reader. "Many days I feel like a dog on a leash" brings forth feelings of oppression and lack of freedom. "Hoping all of my internal damage will start to peel" gives hope to feeling better and moving forward. Your strong steady beat and use of words tell a story that is real.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Heather Knight
This is hauntingly beautiful. I wish I had six stars left.
We live in a crazy world. We could be happy if we respected each other and realized we are all the same.
Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
This is hauntingly beautiful. I wish I had six stars left.
We live in a crazy world. We could be happy if we respected each other and realized we are all the same.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2022
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Thank you for the outstanding review