Seasons of Change
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Seasons of Nature - III"A collection of 30 poems in thirty days
15 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Oh, your writing is very enticing! Free verse works beautifully here...and it does seem that we are all intent on looking to see what is just over the next hill, or beyond the next copse of trees! (Sometimes we're so intent on what is to come, we miss what is right before us!)
"Overhead the broken clouds slowly
loosen the blanket of yesterday's
heat..."
Wow. I could sit and ponder the beauty of that line for hours!
Karenina
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Oh, your writing is very enticing! Free verse works beautifully here...and it does seem that we are all intent on looking to see what is just over the next hill, or beyond the next copse of trees! (Sometimes we're so intent on what is to come, we miss what is right before us!)
"Overhead the broken clouds slowly
loosen the blanket of yesterday's
heat..."
Wow. I could sit and ponder the beauty of that line for hours!
Karenina
Comment Written 30-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2023
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Thank you!
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Smile...it's been a great afternoon!
Comment from shelley kaye
that would be a nice place to walk through on a cool spring day...
another great nature poem
very imagistic with smooth flow
may i suggest using a dark green background and a light blue font? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing
shelley ð?¦?
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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that would be a nice place to walk through on a cool spring day...
another great nature poem
very imagistic with smooth flow
may i suggest using a dark green background and a light blue font? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing
shelley ð?¦?
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Thank you Shelley I appreciate your input, I might revisit this.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
You have portrayed not just a beautiful landscape filled with pleasures for all our senses, but you welcome us to share in the stirrings of your soul. Wonderful verse.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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You have portrayed not just a beautiful landscape filled with pleasures for all our senses, but you welcome us to share in the stirrings of your soul. Wonderful verse.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Thank you Ginda Simpson!
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is a lovely poem, as you take your reader for a walk with you on a summer day. My favorite stanza is the second one. You really brought out all the tools of the poet for this one.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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This is a lovely poem, as you take your reader for a walk with you on a summer day. My favorite stanza is the second one. You really brought out all the tools of the poet for this one.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Thank you again.
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Seasons of Nature III, describes an almost hallowed place where the world, as it is known as a trial, falls away, and the miracle of the lake begins.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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This free verse, Seasons of Nature III, describes an almost hallowed place where the world, as it is known as a trial, falls away, and the miracle of the lake begins.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Spot on Bill, thank you for the wise comments. Jim
Comment from Wendy G
A lovely poem with very vivid and lyrical imagery, such that I could have been present in the scene. Beautifully written in free form, which suited your words.
Wendy
Typo" "beckoning me"
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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A lovely poem with very vivid and lyrical imagery, such that I could have been present in the scene. Beautifully written in free form, which suited your words.
Wendy
Typo" "beckoning me"
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Wendy thank you for your extra set of eyes. I did miss that. Jim
Comment from Gloria ....
Another fine entry into the NaPo contest here, J. You have written a sublime pastoral that engages a bouquet of senses.
Just one small typo here: My nostrils flair. (flare)
Wishing you all the best in the continuation of National Poetry Month.
Gloria
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Another fine entry into the NaPo contest here, J. You have written a sublime pastoral that engages a bouquet of senses.
Just one small typo here: My nostrils flair. (flare)
Wishing you all the best in the continuation of National Poetry Month.
Gloria
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Gloria, thank you I missed that one!
Comment from Chrissy710
Oh JLR This sound delightful and enticing, I bet you have had many swims in this lake. Summer is my favourite season, so i can sunbake and warm up my soul (and even swim in my small backyard pool.
Your free verse was tidy and flowed well, and made your lake sound lovely
Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Oh JLR This sound delightful and enticing, I bet you have had many swims in this lake. Summer is my favourite season, so i can sunbake and warm up my soul (and even swim in my small backyard pool.
Your free verse was tidy and flowed well, and made your lake sound lovely
Cheers Chris
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Chris, thank you for taking the time to read my poem!
Comment from lyenochka
Lovely poem rejoicing in the summer's weather and scents. I especially liked how you describe how the longer longer summer days "make time come to a complete stop."
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of the sirens beconing me, (beckoning)
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Lovely poem rejoicing in the summer's weather and scents. I especially liked how you describe how the longer longer summer days "make time come to a complete stop."
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of the sirens beconing me, (beckoning)
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Thank you, my friend! I appreciate your keen eyesight. Jim
Comment from Sally Law
Beautiful poem for your book, once again. I love the summer day you have depicted here. All I need is southern sweet tea or an ice cold glass of lemonade.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal :)) xo
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Beautiful poem for your book, once again. I love the summer day you have depicted here. All I need is southern sweet tea or an ice cold glass of lemonade.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal :)) xo
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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I am so grateful, Sally, for your continued good support.