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Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a very beautifully written poem. Amazing overall presentation background Color's and font. Very lovely photos to compliment your words as well. Love it!
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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This is a very beautifully written poem. Amazing overall presentation background Color's and font. Very lovely photos to compliment your words as well. Love it!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words.
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Your welcome
Comment from GoWiSt
Nice pictures in the artwork.
Good imagery that put me in the scene.
I can feel the subtle passion of the speaker, as he/she watched.
But, isn't Venus, the planet, seen best in the morning?
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Nice pictures in the artwork.
Good imagery that put me in the scene.
I can feel the subtle passion of the speaker, as he/she watched.
But, isn't Venus, the planet, seen best in the morning?
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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The planet Venus is at its peak of visibility in the evening sky this week. Officially, Venus became an "evening star" but it doesn't happen all the time. I didn't know it was a day star. for my poem is an evening star.
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem
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Comment from Jumbo J
Okay... I read this and read this. I've looked into my stored memories and gazed upon Venus and yes, thought about you.
I have also come to the conclusion of weaved verse's woven... and the zig-zagging pattern of the lightning and thunder has weaved out on top and is perfectly used in more ways than just the obvious.
The way in which your second tanka poem ties so beautifully to your first and allows that contrast of calmness after the storm has settled is not only uplifting, it sits with me perfectly.
A stunning presentation... and again, paired and conveyed so perfectly with both of the images... yes, I really lived within this one MariVal!
With our thoughts we create...
perfect vision within our minds eye.
Warmest regards,
James.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Okay... I read this and read this. I've looked into my stored memories and gazed upon Venus and yes, thought about you.
I have also come to the conclusion of weaved verse's woven... and the zig-zagging pattern of the lightning and thunder has weaved out on top and is perfectly used in more ways than just the obvious.
The way in which your second tanka poem ties so beautifully to your first and allows that contrast of calmness after the storm has settled is not only uplifting, it sits with me perfectly.
A stunning presentation... and again, paired and conveyed so perfectly with both of the images... yes, I really lived within this one MariVal!
With our thoughts we create...
perfect vision within our minds eye.
Warmest regards,
James.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Thank you, James, for another insightful feedback and very kind words. I always rejoice with your outstanding reviews.
I conjure passionate poems from a mix of reality and fantasy. I think it's common among poets. Japanese is the perfect conduit for visualizing thoughts. You know I am a very visual person.
Thank you, James. I always look forward to your reviews.
besitos y abrazos
marival
Comment from shelley kaye
i love watching surfing...
great tanka with great imagery!
good form
i like the contrast between the two
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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i love watching surfing...
great tanka with great imagery!
good form
i like the contrast between the two
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Shelley
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I loved the way you used night and day in this poem. The passion is very well described, and the reader can feel it. Once again, your presentation is well above the others. Thank you.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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I loved the way you used night and day in this poem. The passion is very well described, and the reader can feel it. Once again, your presentation is well above the others. Thank you.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Barbara
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Comment from RJ Heritage
This is a nicely written Tanka poem. The words speak of passionate love, that exudes from being in love, perhaps the first time. I like the colors and always enjoy the double feature.
RJ
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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This is a nicely written Tanka poem. The words speak of passionate love, that exudes from being in love, perhaps the first time. I like the colors and always enjoy the double feature.
RJ
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, RJ
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Comment from Mark Jackson
I really like this the whole thing is beautiful. I am unsure what you mean by a suite. I am guessing that the poems have to pertain to the same subject. I do like the Tanka form but I am no expert at writing them. I think I have been using them in reverse of the tradition as I come up with a Haiku and then over spill my ideas into the Tanka. 5 stars thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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I really like this the whole thing is beautiful. I am unsure what you mean by a suite. I am guessing that the poems have to pertain to the same subject. I do like the Tanka form but I am no expert at writing them. I think I have been using them in reverse of the tradition as I come up with a Haiku and then over spill my ideas into the Tanka. 5 stars thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Mark. A suite is two or more poems of the same kind, like two Tanka poems.
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Comment from Colorado Owl
Your poem has such beautiful imagery! My favorite phrase was "my raging passion was weaved with the storm's lightning and thunder." The pictures you chose work perfectly with your message. Thank you!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Your poem has such beautiful imagery! My favorite phrase was "my raging passion was weaved with the storm's lightning and thunder." The pictures you chose work perfectly with your message. Thank you!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Colorado
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Comment from royowen
What a great poem Gypsy. The language is as good as it could be, your poetic framework, you are particularly good with your layout and artwork, well done, good job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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What a great poem Gypsy. The language is as good as it could be, your poetic framework, you are particularly good with your layout and artwork, well done, good job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Roy
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Most welcome
Comment from kahpot
Beautiful, sometimes when nature provides such wonderful scenery we do think of love and those very wild and passionate times we shared, very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Beautiful, sometimes when nature provides such wonderful scenery we do think of love and those very wild and passionate times we shared, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, Kym
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