Wettest
A Love Story.27 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi D&V,
This poem flows smoothly and seems to be love a first sight. Even in the darkness of a storm the brightness of love an enter.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Enjoy the rest of your week.
Joan
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Hi D&V,
This poem flows smoothly and seems to be love a first sight. Even in the darkness of a storm the brightness of love an enter.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Enjoy the rest of your week.
Joan
Comment Written 12-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much for the generous review.
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You are most kindly welcome, D&V.
Joan
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL! Oh, what a wonderful warm (okay, I get the wet!) little story for the insanity of today... Yes! We regular folks out here really do look forward to regular encounters where silly things come to mean a lot!! ;) ;) Wonderful little 'story in a poem' that 'sings' us through a great first meeting in two young lives... well done! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! :) Yvette
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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LOL! Oh, what a wonderful warm (okay, I get the wet!) little story for the insanity of today... Yes! We regular folks out here really do look forward to regular encounters where silly things come to mean a lot!! ;) ;) Wonderful little 'story in a poem' that 'sings' us through a great first meeting in two young lives... well done! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! :) Yvette
Comment Written 12-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Thank you Yvette, you are the first one to get the "wet" clue.thank you so much.
Comment from Gunner Lil
The author used a great picture for this great poem showing what the poem is all about. It is an easy read and has a very good flow with an excellent pace.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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The author used a great picture for this great poem showing what the poem is all about. It is an easy read and has a very good flow with an excellent pace.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much for the generous review.
Comment from bob cullen
Don, what a good man you are, holding her close to keep her out of the rain. Chivalry and gallantry at its finest.
I actually enjoyed your poem; it flowed almost as well as the rain.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Don, what a good man you are, holding her close to keep her out of the rain. Chivalry and gallantry at its finest.
I actually enjoyed your poem; it flowed almost as well as the rain.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Thank you Bob, I do what I can.
Comment from CM Pickard
This is a great entry, it feels like I'm sitting in the kitchen with a friend retelling her guilty secrets and has a warmth to it that makes it endearing. Sure, it's a love story but it's not overly soppy (pardon the pun). Great work and good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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This is a great entry, it feels like I'm sitting in the kitchen with a friend retelling her guilty secrets and has a warmth to it that makes it endearing. Sure, it's a love story but it's not overly soppy (pardon the pun). Great work and good luck in the contest
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much for the generous review.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
A very nice love story. The rhymes are very good. The picture is a good choice for your poem. I enjoyed reading it. I particularly like : we then kissed urgently. Great job.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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A very nice love story. The rhymes are very good. The picture is a good choice for your poem. I enjoyed reading it. I particularly like : we then kissed urgently. Great job.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thank you Brenda for the kind review.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
You have time to fix it. The rhyming pattern is AABB. First and second lines rhyme, third and fourth rhyme, etc.
You must follow contest rules. Have a good week. Karen
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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You have time to fix it. The rhyming pattern is AABB. First and second lines rhyme, third and fourth rhyme, etc.
You must follow contest rules. Have a good week. Karen
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the generous review, If you read down far enough in the "Rules" you will see that it is not necessery to follow that rhyming pattern.
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The rhyme pattern is not necessary, acording to the rules. If you read far enough, it is just a suggestion.
Comment from estory
Your piece illustrates the power of love to transcend our physical presence in this world. We ignore rain, thunder, wind and cold when we are in the depths of that kiss or that embrace. I liked the down to Earth, conversational tone of the language. estory
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Your piece illustrates the power of love to transcend our physical presence in this world. We ignore rain, thunder, wind and cold when we are in the depths of that kiss or that embrace. I liked the down to Earth, conversational tone of the language. estory
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thank you so very much for the excellent review.
Comment from EeanBlack
It was a little hard for me to follow. That would not be your fault, I rarely get poetry. It's well-written, and I love the image of lovers in the rain. You covered a few bases I have been trying to run here, but can't translate well. Reading the good writers, I hope will help me get where I want to go. Thanks.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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It was a little hard for me to follow. That would not be your fault, I rarely get poetry. It's well-written, and I love the image of lovers in the rain. You covered a few bases I have been trying to run here, but can't translate well. Reading the good writers, I hope will help me get where I want to go. Thanks.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thank you so very much for the oh so generous review.
Comment from Gayla putnam
I liked the picture and the poem. I'm not a poet, but as I read and reread, there was only one point where the flow faltered for me. It's the line, "I dare say. Mmmmmmm!"!!!! Said he. Every time I read it, that line interrupted the tempo and took me out of the story. It is my only suggestion. gayla
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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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I liked the picture and the poem. I'm not a poet, but as I read and reread, there was only one point where the flow faltered for me. It's the line, "I dare say. Mmmmmmm!"!!!! Said he. Every time I read it, that line interrupted the tempo and took me out of the story. It is my only suggestion. gayla
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Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thank you.