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In the dark of night.36 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
creep factor! well, you got it. I was Looking for Louise 2. You are certainly one prolific writer. You must write all the time.
This is a sad, creepy story - his parents coming back as dead - although the devil did say they would look just as they had when he last saw them. I should have picked up on that. Powerful ending. ugh! Never deal with the Devil.
A good one.
Katharine
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2023
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creep factor! well, you got it. I was Looking for Louise 2. You are certainly one prolific writer. You must write all the time.
This is a sad, creepy story - his parents coming back as dead - although the devil did say they would look just as they had when he last saw them. I should have picked up on that. Powerful ending. ugh! Never deal with the Devil.
A good one.
Katharine
Comment Written 20-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2023
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Nope. Never deal with the devil. Nothing good can come of it. Gretchen
Comment from w.j.debi
There is always some wicked twist when dealing with the devil. The poor boy was too naive to know what he was getting into and now he has sold his soul for something he dreads. Well done with this spooky tale.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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There is always some wicked twist when dealing with the devil. The poor boy was too naive to know what he was getting into and now he has sold his soul for something he dreads. Well done with this spooky tale.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Devil is usually one step ahead. Lol. The saying, " if it sounds too good to true, it probably isn't true. " . Thank you. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, you very well might have me hesitant to look out the window anytime soon. You do the creepy stuff so well, and you don't have to get gory to do it. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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Well, you very well might have me hesitant to look out the window anytime soon. You do the creepy stuff so well, and you don't have to get gory to do it. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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I hate gore. Unnecessary. A seed of suspence and a good jump scare is all I need to like a spooky story. Thanks so much. Gretchen
Comment from BethShelby
How eerie. You are very good with the creep factor. I suppose those who come back only pretend to be his mother and dad and are really demons masquerading as those he loved. It doesn't pay to bargain with the devil.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
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How eerie. You are very good with the creep factor. I suppose those who come back only pretend to be his mother and dad and are really demons masquerading as those he loved. It doesn't pay to bargain with the devil.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
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You are probably correct. Thank you for reading and reviewing my story. Much appreciated. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
The devil is a liar and a theif, he was always that from the very beginning, this is a great story Gretchen, but I knew this would happen, it's funny, the devil has no power to take our souls, only God has the power, but it's a great story, Gretchen, well done, blessings Roy, You're really cooking this year.
Typo : The devil wasn't (bringinh) them back to life. Bringing?
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
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The devil is a liar and a theif, he was always that from the very beginning, this is a great story Gretchen, but I knew this would happen, it's funny, the devil has no power to take our souls, only God has the power, but it's a great story, Gretchen, well done, blessings Roy, You're really cooking this year.
Typo : The devil wasn't (bringinh) them back to life. Bringing?
Comment Written 08-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
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I never thought about the devil not being able to take our souls. That's a happy note to hear. Thank you for that and this review. Gretchen
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The devil?s is always tricky, demon possession needs permission, but he?s tricky, like in Eden. But judgement is God?s.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness Gretchen, fooled by the devil himself and now his soul belongs to him. This is a chilling and terrifying tale and reminds me of the opera: Faust.
Just one typo here:
The devil wasn't (bringing) them
A fine story, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
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Oh my goodness Gretchen, fooled by the devil himself and now his soul belongs to him. This is a chilling and terrifying tale and reminds me of the opera: Faust.
Just one typo here:
The devil wasn't (bringing) them
A fine story, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 08-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much, Dolly. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Absolutely the best thing ever!!!**********
Even though I knew what was bound to happen, I read and was still seriously creeped out, Scratching at the window, I frigging saw them I swear. Hideously on view for him to see. Thank you so much for the thrill.
Karen
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
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Absolutely the best thing ever!!!**********
Even though I knew what was bound to happen, I read and was still seriously creeped out, Scratching at the window, I frigging saw them I swear. Hideously on view for him to see. Thank you so much for the thrill.
Karen
Comment Written 08-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
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Thanks, Karen. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen
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seriously good gwen really
Karen I wish today had been sunday!!
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i did i did i did idid
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Creep factor ... check
Dark mood ... check
Horror ... check
I love it. He shouldn't have wished to see them as last because that was when they were dead!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
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Creep factor ... check
Dark mood ... check
Horror ... check
I love it. He shouldn't have wished to see them as last because that was when they were dead!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
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He clearly didn't think it through. Lol. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a really creepy story. It is a rather common theme about making a deal with the devil and getting the loved ones back in no shape to love. But you have dressed it up it a different way than I've ever seen. One sentence needs work: The devil wasn't bring them back . . .
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
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This is a really creepy story. It is a rather common theme about making a deal with the devil and getting the loved ones back in no shape to love. But you have dressed it up it a different way than I've ever seen. One sentence needs work: The devil wasn't bring them back . . .
Comment Written 08-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
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Thanks, Carol. Thank you for reviewing and for catching that spag. I really appreciate it. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for reposting this for us. You managed the creep factor. LOL I enjoyed reading.
Liked a thousand ragged fingernails, it moved around the house. (Like???)
The devil wasn't bring them back to life, he was just bringing them back. (wasn't bringing them)
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
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Thank you for reposting this for us. You managed the creep factor. LOL I enjoyed reading.
Liked a thousand ragged fingernails, it moved around the house. (Like???)
The devil wasn't bring them back to life, he was just bringing them back. (wasn't bringing them)
Comment Written 08-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much for reading and catching those spags. I appreciate the help. Gretchen