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Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "5-7-5(moonlit lullaby)"5/7/5 poems
23 total reviews
Comment from mystery poet
Oh, how I would like to be the flower
who gets to hear nights secrets in a
lullaby. This is a fascinating 5/7/5.
It inspires the imagination of the
reader...Best wishes to you!
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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Oh, how I would like to be the flower
who gets to hear nights secrets in a
lullaby. This is a fascinating 5/7/5.
It inspires the imagination of the
reader...Best wishes to you!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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thank you so much:)
Comment from ericawrites
An excellent 5-7-5 poem, tells a story in so few words with wonderful imagery. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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An excellent 5-7-5 poem, tells a story in so few words with wonderful imagery. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Wow!! I wasn't expecting this.I am glad you liked it so much. I appreciate your comments. Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)
Comment from Jean Lutz
To me this could be summed up in just one breath -- "Sigh". But the FanStorian editor doesn't understand Sigh and would tell me I must expand. Therefore I will add by saying nature can provide more than pharmaceuticals can ever accomplish. Best to you with the entry.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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To me this could be summed up in just one breath -- "Sigh". But the FanStorian editor doesn't understand Sigh and would tell me I must expand. Therefore I will add by saying nature can provide more than pharmaceuticals can ever accomplish. Best to you with the entry.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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What a wonderful review! I am glad you liked it so much. I appreciate your comments. Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)
Comment from Sylvia Page
The poem conforms to the 5-7-5 syllable count requirement and is well written in the Haiku form Very well done.
Best wishes in the contest.
Cheers
Sylvia
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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The poem conforms to the 5-7-5 syllable count requirement and is well written in the Haiku form Very well done.
Best wishes in the contest.
Cheers
Sylvia
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)
Comment from Dean Kuch
A-h-h-h-h-h-h..., this is a perfect 5-7-5, mystery poet, for you convey quite well the vision you're trying to create simply by utilizing your talented quill...
Such sweet serenity...subtly sublime!
Best of luck to you in the contest...
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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A-h-h-h-h-h-h..., this is a perfect 5-7-5, mystery poet, for you convey quite well the vision you're trying to create simply by utilizing your talented quill...
Such sweet serenity...subtly sublime!
Best of luck to you in the contest...
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Hi,
What a lovely review!
I am glad you liked it so much. I appreciate your comments. Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)
Comment from simplyteresa
This is a wonderfully written 5/7/5 that after this weekends full moon is such a perfect seasonal poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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This is a wonderfully written 5/7/5 that after this weekends full moon is such a perfect seasonal poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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I am glad you liked it so much. I appreciate your comments. Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)
Comment from tfawcus
How lovely those night breezes are, the ones that coyly whisper in the moonlight, especially on a tropical island in the arms of one you love - or am I romanticising too much here?
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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How lovely those night breezes are, the ones that coyly whisper in the moonlight, especially on a tropical island in the arms of one you love - or am I romanticising too much here?
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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I am glad you liked it so much. I appreciate your comments. Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)
Comment from FrannyG
This is one of the best hauku I've read for a while. Lovely images, great alliteration, and it rings with intimacy. Not a wasted syllable. Tight and teasing. Excellent.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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This is one of the best hauku I've read for a while. Lovely images, great alliteration, and it rings with intimacy. Not a wasted syllable. Tight and teasing. Excellent.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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I am glad you liked it so much. I appreciate your comments. Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)
Comment from allborn66
This is a wonderful piece. I love the double messages. It inspires great mental images. The word choice is strong. Barbara
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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This is a wonderful piece. I love the double messages. It inspires great mental images. The word choice is strong. Barbara
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a beautiful piece of romantic poetry .
I like the image of wind fondling flora. It's a nice personification. Very picturesque piece of writing. kudos
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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This is a beautiful piece of romantic poetry .
I like the image of wind fondling flora. It's a nice personification. Very picturesque piece of writing. kudos
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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I am glad you liked it so much. I appreciate your comments. Thanks a lot for the lovely review:)