Lore of the West
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "No Faster Gun"A collection of western stories and poems.
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Comment from l.d.lauritzen
like westerns and western poetry.
Think a few words could have been cut to sharpen your prose.
The last stanza:
The loser's chest flowed blood the color of wine,
Shortly they'd measure him for a box of pine.
Liked ending at the beginning.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
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like westerns and western poetry.
Think a few words could have been cut to sharpen your prose.
The last stanza:
The loser's chest flowed blood the color of wine,
Shortly they'd measure him for a box of pine.
Liked ending at the beginning.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
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I tried cutting it but it wouldn't even out with the other stanzas. Thank you though for the excellent rating.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
There was a young cowboy-a gunslinger by fame...
This is a great line. I almost said ending line but as the ellipsis indicate there is no end to your story. There will always be someone out to prove he's faster, bigger, or stronger.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
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There was a young cowboy-a gunslinger by fame...
This is a great line. I almost said ending line but as the ellipsis indicate there is no end to your story. There will always be someone out to prove he's faster, bigger, or stronger.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
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Yes, that was the point I was trying to make. Thank you for getting it and thank you for the excellent rating.