relentless feather reeds
flourish in wet marsh mire
where a breeding crane
moans a lonesome yearning song —
I wait for love with the bird
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Author Notes
In the last line, "I" means a woman (an observer). She waits for love (mate) with the crane.
Cranes are solitary birds during the breeding season but during the non-breeding season, most species are gregarious, forming large flocks. Cranes give loud, rattling bugle calls. They also give moans, hisses, gooselike honks, and snoring sounds.
MODERN TANKA is a Japanese poetic form written in 31 syllables or less. The Japanese form is 5/7/5/7/7 but in English it�??�?�¢??s usually shorter than that due to the difference in Japanese and English syllables. The form was created 1,300 years ago in the Imperial Court where lovers would exchange tanka after a night together. With modern tanka you can write about any subject you chose. You may use poetic devices: personification, metaphor, alliteration, and simile are permitted in Tanka. Keep capitalization and punctuation to a minimum. No end rhymes. === click here if you want to read modern tanka examples === click here to read Tanka Society of America === click here if you want to read modern tanka rules
Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." --Atticus
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