Joe Jones Valentine Dilemma
what to get his new wife for Valentine's Day3 total reviews
Comment from jacquelyn popp
You did a great job with the 50 word prompt. I am looking forward to your next post that will be a longer story. Very well written. Your words had an even and smooth flow to them, and no grammar mistakes in your story. Nicely done and I enjoyed your short story. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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You did a great job with the 50 word prompt. I am looking forward to your next post that will be a longer story. Very well written. Your words had an even and smooth flow to them, and no grammar mistakes in your story. Nicely done and I enjoyed your short story. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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thanks as always
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Well you certainly understand the word dilemma it's a fact! Seems to be an issue with punctuation I think there's a couple too many commas in there perhaps a sentence structure issue. I would suggest pulling out the, before "and" Or remove the word altogether you may find a shifting of words and the removal of 1 or 2 creates magic. It Has very good subject matter...thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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Well you certainly understand the word dilemma it's a fact! Seems to be an issue with punctuation I think there's a couple too many commas in there perhaps a sentence structure issue. I would suggest pulling out the, before "and" Or remove the word altogether you may find a shifting of words and the removal of 1 or 2 creates magic. It Has very good subject matter...thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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thanks I will revise it accordingly
Comment from JT traveller
I believe Joe has already provided his wife with the greatest gift of all by taking her out of Afghanistan.
A great read which raises so many thoughts which to me, means a very clever and intriguing piece of writing.
I gave my husband a kiss and today we fly to Vietnam together.
Great level of description in a short story. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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I believe Joe has already provided his wife with the greatest gift of all by taking her out of Afghanistan.
A great read which raises so many thoughts which to me, means a very clever and intriguing piece of writing.
I gave my husband a kiss and today we fly to Vietnam together.
Great level of description in a short story. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Thanks for the review. Enjoy your trip to Vietnam. I have been there twice in 1985 and 2019 pre-covid. I was a bit too young to have served in Vietnam.
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Me too. I was born in 1975. Vietnam is a magical place. My husband and I have visited often. Have a great day. Jacqueline