The Note
Dribble Flash Fiction - 52 words (3rd place)31 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Rather than repeat myself, I find writing short poems, as your last three, difficult for me to pen. I suspect I am more loquacious, therefore I tend to ramble on. I like all three and will copy this remark to the other two so you get credit for more reviews. Tom H
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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Rather than repeat myself, I find writing short poems, as your last three, difficult for me to pen. I suspect I am more loquacious, therefore I tend to ramble on. I like all three and will copy this remark to the other two so you get credit for more reviews. Tom H
Comment Written 23-May-2023
reply by the author on 24-May-2023
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Tom, thank you. You are very kind. ~DD :-)
Comment from sunnilicious
Oh my goodness, that is some story. You grabbed me emotionally. I feel like crying. We can't tell anyone what right and wrong is... However, this daughter was definitely in need of direction. Very sad.
Congratulations on 3rd place :)
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Oh my goodness, that is some story. You grabbed me emotionally. I feel like crying. We can't tell anyone what right and wrong is... However, this daughter was definitely in need of direction. Very sad.
Congratulations on 3rd place :)
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Thank you for reading my short The Note story. Thank goodness it was all fiction. I would hate for something like that to truly happen. I appreciate your review and kind contest wishes. ~DDx
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi DD,
This is such a sad story. If she had only read the letter sooner maybe she would have been able to reunite with her mother and say goodbye at her funeral. But we could hope that the doctors were wrong and her mother is still alive and this can still happen. I would think that someone would have told her that her mother had died.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Hi DD,
This is such a sad story. If she had only read the letter sooner maybe she would have been able to reunite with her mother and say goodbye at her funeral. But we could hope that the doctors were wrong and her mother is still alive and this can still happen. I would think that someone would have told her that her mother had died.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Joan, for your supportive comments on my short dribble story. I would hate for such a thing to happened to any one. Thank goodness for fiction. Happy Easter to you ~DDxo
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You're most kindly welcome, DD.
Happy Easter to you, too.
Joan
Comment from Nicki Nance
Such a big story in a few words. An excellent dribble with depth, and the intrigue of what went before and what came after. Brilliantly structured. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Such a big story in a few words. An excellent dribble with depth, and the intrigue of what went before and what came after. Brilliantly structured. Nicely done.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Nicki, for popping in to review my short dribble story. I feel honoured by your comments :-) ~DDxo
Comment from Sanku
Oh that is very sad .I hope it is not too late for the daughter to make up.
Sometimes we do not see what is behind other peoples faces .all the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Oh that is very sad .I hope it is not too late for the daughter to make up.
Sometimes we do not see what is behind other peoples faces .all the best for the contest.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Sanku. I appreciate your review. Thankfully, this is a fictional flash dribble story otherwise I would be too upset if it was fact. ~DD
Comment from Ulla
Well, it seems she waited too long to open the note from her mother, which contains some very bad news. It's anybody's guess how she reacted to that. All the best of luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Well, it seems she waited too long to open the note from her mother, which contains some very bad news. It's anybody's guess how she reacted to that. All the best of luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Ulla. Your comments on my dribble flash fiction is much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Mary Vigasin
After reading this short story with its heart-wrenching ending, a reader misses a breath or two as the contents of the note are read. Even though it is fiction, it grabs at the emotions of regret and guilt even if felt by a fictional character.
Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Mary
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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After reading this short story with its heart-wrenching ending, a reader misses a breath or two as the contents of the note are read. Even though it is fiction, it grabs at the emotions of regret and guilt even if felt by a fictional character.
Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Mary
Comment Written 31-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Mary, for taking the time to review my short flash dribble. Your comments are very thoughtful as are your contest wishes. ~DDx
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Oh Wow? Personally, I find this sad and I'm hurting for the daughter-in-law how much pain she must feel. On the other hand, maybe it would depend on who the daughter is. I''eve seen it all. Your writing is competitive and thought-provoking, for sure!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Oh Wow? Personally, I find this sad and I'm hurting for the daughter-in-law how much pain she must feel. On the other hand, maybe it would depend on who the daughter is. I''eve seen it all. Your writing is competitive and thought-provoking, for sure!
Comment Written 31-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Alexandra, for taking the time to review my flash dribble. Yes, some daughters can be a hand full, but so can some mothers and so can the environment we all have to live in. Have a great weekend. ~DD
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I imagine something similar to this has happened many times, which is sad. You've captured a very real moment in your 52 words. Good luck with this tough contest!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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I imagine something similar to this has happened many times, which is sad. You've captured a very real moment in your 52 words. Good luck with this tough contest!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Pam, for your comments on my dribble flash fiction. Your reviews are always much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from lyenochka
Well done with your dribble fiction story! You subtly added the eighteen months and twelve months to show us that a rash action done in anger could result in a lifetime of regret. I think this is a winner!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Well done with your dribble fiction story! You subtly added the eighteen months and twelve months to show us that a rash action done in anger could result in a lifetime of regret. I think this is a winner!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thank you, Helen. Your thorough understanding of my fictitious dribble is much appreciated. ~DDxo