Comment from PoemsOfDD

Excellent

I enjoyed this haiku - or maybe not - as it reminded me of the neighbours black cat that strolls our garden in the thick of night for our security cams to pick it up and alert. No guard dog. Luckily I am not picking up what it used to leave behind from its behind... Great picture and understood write.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2023

Thanks so much, DD :)
Yeah, this one swaggers around like he owns the place and uses the beds as his own personal toilet - drives me mad! Apart from that, he's ok LOL
Best wishes as always, Debra :)

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

I really like this, Debra. It's image filled and most amusing. The cat in the artwork looks very much like my cat. I wonder what he is doing over there? ;-)

Your satori line is very good with the guard dog seething. I'll bet!

Wishing you great luck with the Contest Committee.

Gloria

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

Hi Gloria,
Thank you for your feedback :)
He's a beautiful cat, but he thinks he owns the neighbourhood!
Best wishes as always, Debra x

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-That is quite a cat, Debra. He doesn't look like one to mess around!!
-A nice presentation and well written poem.
-You do a good job describing "ginger tom" and
how he struts through the neighborhood.
-A good satori line.
-Well done.
*A very small thing: usually the dash is at
the end of the second line.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

Hi Pam :)
Thank you for your great feedback - I altered the positioning of the dash :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x

reply by Pam (respa) on 15-Apr-2023

You are welcome, Debra.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Very nice Haiku. I wish you the very best in all of your writing. Have a blessed evening and a good tomorrow. God bless. Keep writing. ����..
Patricia.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Patricia :)
Best wishes as always, Debra

Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

I'm no dog, but I go mad when I see next door's black tom cat strut across my patio, so I can identify with your Molly's response. This was a delightful Haiku. I especially loved the words "struts his stuff" - great image. kay

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Kay, for your kind, understanding feedback.
Drives you mad, doesn't it - especially when you know they're using your beds as litter trays...
Best wishes as always, Debra :)

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I find it funny that you named your dog "Molly" which is a female cat (in British English!) and poor Molly is frustrated by that ballsy cat! Fun poem about animals.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

LOL! I didn't know that about the name Molly! She was already named when she came to us, although I do think it suits her!
Thanks for your feedback :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Cats are such self possessed and confident creatures, perfectly capable of walking and balancing on the flimsiest surfaces, and slinking soundlessly through undergrowth. Beautifully written my friend, well done Debra, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Roy :)
Best wishes as always, Debra

reply by royowen on 15-Apr-2023

A pleasure

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

I can imagine! This looks exactly like my terror, Catzilla. The cats has been trained secretly to torment dogs. A wonderful penned and illustrated haiku.

Totally believable to me. :))

Sending you my very best,
Sal XOs

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

Catzilla!! Brilliant name!
Thank you for your lovely feedback, Sal :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x

Comment from Terry Broxson

Excellent

I like your Cat Haiku! I, too, have had a big yellow cat like this one strut through my yard. If you approached him, he would roll over and let you pet him..more like he expected you to. I did not have a dog inside, but a couple of cats. They didn't like the visitor either. Good work. Terry.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

Hi Terry :) Thank you for your feedback :)
I love cats, but this one is a bit too big for his boots - acts like he owns the neighbourhood!
Best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Excellent haiku. I enjoyed the imagery of the cat.....
"swaggers through our back garden" totally a cat style.

I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.

Good syllables count and connection between lines.

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis

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 Comment Written 14-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2023

Thank you for your feedback, Gypsy. Much appreciated :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x