Guided by Faith
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Faith Chapter 8 A"Can faith guide our path?
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Comment from JT traveller
Great dialogue. Really good character descriptions. Thank you for sharing your writing with us. It really is inspirational for an aspiring author such as myself. Have a great day. Jacqueline
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Great dialogue. Really good character descriptions. Thank you for sharing your writing with us. It really is inspirational for an aspiring author such as myself. Have a great day. Jacqueline
Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 08-May-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"It's in the back yard" should be it's in the backyard.
"handed her them" would read better as handed them to her.
"eighteen feet" should be eighteen foot.
Dialogue fits the action, even if Seth did get a little embarrassed by Emma being wet.
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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"It's in the back yard" should be it's in the backyard.
"handed her them" would read better as handed them to her.
"eighteen feet" should be eighteen foot.
Dialogue fits the action, even if Seth did get a little embarrassed by Emma being wet.
Comment Written 05-May-2023
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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Thank you for the review. Question, I know in speech we say eighteen foot, but because 18 is more than one, do we write 'foot'? This confused me and caused me to pause when I was writing. I researched and am still confused.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Is what a fine writer you are! Excellent imagery rich characters dialogue on par! I like Molly the Pomeranian mainly because I have to Pomeranian. Myself a boy and a girl and she's just pregnant too. So we're having fuzzy ewoks buzzing around! You're a Palm shows no grim miracle issues that I can see. It's also an excellent read extremely well written by a professional intelligent hand it is plain to see go on reading and I should like to read more. Your characters are just as vibrant as your storyline so I'm hoping that I catch all of them. I hope you have a very nice evening and thank you so much for your Submission
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Is what a fine writer you are! Excellent imagery rich characters dialogue on par! I like Molly the Pomeranian mainly because I have to Pomeranian. Myself a boy and a girl and she's just pregnant too. So we're having fuzzy ewoks buzzing around! You're a Palm shows no grim miracle issues that I can see. It's also an excellent read extremely well written by a professional intelligent hand it is plain to see go on reading and I should like to read more. Your characters are just as vibrant as your storyline so I'm hoping that I catch all of them. I hope you have a very nice evening and thank you so much for your Submission
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement. I had a pom, Muffin, too many years ago.
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Good part of a chapter again. The dialogue feels real and I am getting acquainted with the characters now. I know it's not your final edited chapter but maybe you could revisit a few phrases. I mean, there is always a " more interesting way" to turn a phrase around, like: Would you mix the cement?" When she acknowledged she would, he added, "
This may be simplified by:Emma nodded. Seth added, " the directions....""
Just a small suggestion..
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Good part of a chapter again. The dialogue feels real and I am getting acquainted with the characters now. I know it's not your final edited chapter but maybe you could revisit a few phrases. I mean, there is always a " more interesting way" to turn a phrase around, like: Would you mix the cement?" When she acknowledged she would, he added, "
This may be simplified by:Emma nodded. Seth added, " the directions....""
Just a small suggestion..
Comment Written 03-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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I will check that area out. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's almost like you take your readers by the hand and lead them wherever your story might be going. Protective, keeping us from stumbling on a crack or gravel along the way. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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It's almost like you take your readers by the hand and lead them wherever your story might be going. Protective, keeping us from stumbling on a crack or gravel along the way. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-May-2023
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. You've been in my prayers.
Comment from Teri7
Barbara, I will keep you and your husband in my prayers for a good recovery for your husband and strength for you my friend. This is another great chapter. I loved the playfulness of Seth and Emma. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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Barbara, I will keep you and your husband in my prayers for a good recovery for your husband and strength for you my friend. This is another great chapter. I loved the playfulness of Seth and Emma. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 03-May-2023
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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Thank you for the prayers and the kind review.
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you are so welcome my friend!!!
Comment from Sanku
This dog-enclosure -building was a pleasure to read .very good interaction among the characters .The wetting incident seems to have caused some strain in Seth...I am enjoying this very much
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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This dog-enclosure -building was a pleasure to read .very good interaction among the characters .The wetting incident seems to have caused some strain in Seth...I am enjoying this very much
Comment Written 03-May-2023
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Seth is starting to realize that Emma isn't a child, but a woman, he want's to ignore it.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Good character development. You really nailed the rough and tumble ackwardness of a newl and blew up Ming relationship.
I am enjoying the flow of the story. Sorry I have fallen behind. The writing muse has been forcing my hand to pen non stop. It's pouring from me like word vomit.
(Ooh)
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reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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Good character development. You really nailed the rough and tumble ackwardness of a newl and blew up Ming relationship.
I am enjoying the flow of the story. Sorry I have fallen behind. The writing muse has been forcing my hand to pen non stop. It's pouring from me like word vomit.
(Ooh)
D
Comment Written 02-May-2023
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
I'm sorry to hear about your husband and hope he is okay soon. You did a good job with the chapter. It had more interaction with characters and added interest to the story. Adding the dog porch became quite a project as word spread. Then Keith brought lunch and it sounded like quite a spread.
The hose incident seemed to have created interest, and it was interesting that all the characters were men except Emma. I'm sure she was very embarrassed. Also interesting is that Jake referred to her as a child, but also mentioned the age difference. I hadn't thought about it before, but I wonder if he had been in a relationship that went bad and is avoiding getting involved again.
One thing seemed out of sync to me. After this section about breakfast, ""Good idea." He took a bite of a breakfast taco.... Emma had also opened the refrigerator for tea. After that "Emma held up her garden spade." It makes it sound like she had the spade right in the kitchen.
Otherwise, very well done.
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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I'm sorry to hear about your husband and hope he is okay soon. You did a good job with the chapter. It had more interaction with characters and added interest to the story. Adding the dog porch became quite a project as word spread. Then Keith brought lunch and it sounded like quite a spread.
The hose incident seemed to have created interest, and it was interesting that all the characters were men except Emma. I'm sure she was very embarrassed. Also interesting is that Jake referred to her as a child, but also mentioned the age difference. I hadn't thought about it before, but I wonder if he had been in a relationship that went bad and is avoiding getting involved again.
One thing seemed out of sync to me. After this section about breakfast, ""Good idea." He took a bite of a breakfast taco.... Emma had also opened the refrigerator for tea. After that "Emma held up her garden spade." It makes it sound like she had the spade right in the kitchen.
Otherwise, very well done.
Comment Written 02-May-2023
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Yes, Seth was burned once. It will come out when he trusts Emma enough to share. I will check that area out. Thank you for sharing.
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You are welcome, and I figured he must have been in a bad relationship.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Well done. This is a fine chapter despite what must have been a difficult week for you. Especially I hope your husband is doing well, I remember from my Father's time it's rather a tedious recovery with a certain time on crutches... good luck to you both. kay
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Well done. This is a fine chapter despite what must have been a difficult week for you. Especially I hope your husband is doing well, I remember from my Father's time it's rather a tedious recovery with a certain time on crutches... good luck to you both. kay
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.