Guided by Faith
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Comment from Douglas Goff
It was a little long (I should know as I think I receive a length complaint daily). The site dollar hustles cause that. I don't think it's long at all for real world books.
Being a former lawman (and current), Carter has plenty of probable cause to have the car pulled the car over or to approach it himself and identify the occupants. Just my two cents.
I enjoyed this chapter with the 'cat fight' brewing! D
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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It was a little long (I should know as I think I receive a length complaint daily). The site dollar hustles cause that. I don't think it's long at all for real world books.
Being a former lawman (and current), Carter has plenty of probable cause to have the car pulled the car over or to approach it himself and identify the occupants. Just my two cents.
I enjoyed this chapter with the 'cat fight' brewing! D
Comment Written 28-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Can he pull somebody over or approach them for sitting there parking? I wasn't sure. There's no probable cause.
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In the end of chapter 2 Carl ran the license plate. In chapter three Seth learned that it was registered to a dead man who passed three years ago. That is a minor legal infraction but more than enough PC and I have stopped vehicles under the same circumstances.
Throw in the late night parking and drivebys in a neighborhood the owner doesn?t reside in and he has more than enough articulable facts for a traffic stop for identification purposes.
But I am reading this with a 26 year law enforcement mind that spent years as a prosecuting agent, so the only people who would wonder why they haven?t stopped it yet is cops. Everyone else probably wouldn?t. So, it?s minor.
Regardless, the book is great, just like its author.
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In the end of chapter 2 Carl ran the license plate. In chapter three Seth learned that it was registered to a dead man who passed three years ago. That is a minor legal infraction but more than enough PC and I have stopped vehicles under the same circumstances.
Throw in the late night parking and drivebys in a neighborhood the owner doesn?t reside in and he has more than enough articulable facts for a traffic stop for identification purposes.
But I am reading this with a 26 year law enforcement mind that spent years as a prosecuting agent, so the only people who would wonder why they haven?t stopped it yet is cops. Everyone else probably wouldn?t. So, it?s minor.
Regardless, the book is great, just like its author.
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I see what you're saying, before long it won't be an issue. This does attack Emma and shots Seth. Don't tell anybody.
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Ooh, won?t! Sounds very exciting!
Comment from Pam (respa)
Great artwork. Thanks for sharing it and the notes. A good chapter the begins well with the morning ritual at the bakery, except this time Ace had a special bonus waiting for him. There is a light mood as they participate in Emma's line dance. The comment about the fruit for Emma was interesting, especially being followed with Seth's thought about it.
It seems Emma runs into roadblocks whenever she wants to try something different. Kudos to her for wanting the children to have summer reading, but she probably should have said something to Seth for some pointers about setting it up, etc. But she is young and cares about the children first. The attitude of Peggy doesn't help, either, and will do her best to make Emma's life miserable. And then there's the Crown Victoria! Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Great artwork. Thanks for sharing it and the notes. A good chapter the begins well with the morning ritual at the bakery, except this time Ace had a special bonus waiting for him. There is a light mood as they participate in Emma's line dance. The comment about the fruit for Emma was interesting, especially being followed with Seth's thought about it.
It seems Emma runs into roadblocks whenever she wants to try something different. Kudos to her for wanting the children to have summer reading, but she probably should have said something to Seth for some pointers about setting it up, etc. But she is young and cares about the children first. The attitude of Peggy doesn't help, either, and will do her best to make Emma's life miserable. And then there's the Crown Victoria! Well done.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
This was a very good chapter. Very strong feelings between the characters as well as believable interactions. I love the idea of a bookstore/bakery. I know that some bookstores have Starbucks or other coffee shops in them, but it's just not the same.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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This was a very good chapter. Very strong feelings between the characters as well as believable interactions. I love the idea of a bookstore/bakery. I know that some bookstores have Starbucks or other coffee shops in them, but it's just not the same.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jmdg1954
That Crown Vic keeps showing its grill. I thought by now Seth would've chased it down or found more aggressive to find out more about it. You're keeping us in suspense, nicely!
Hopefully the mayor sides with the children and asks that safety be further mandated since the library has dropped the ball on a reading program.
Blasted Peggy... a real "B", which rhymes with witch!
Cheers,
John
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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That Crown Vic keeps showing its grill. I thought by now Seth would've chased it down or found more aggressive to find out more about it. You're keeping us in suspense, nicely!
Hopefully the mayor sides with the children and asks that safety be further mandated since the library has dropped the ball on a reading program.
Blasted Peggy... a real "B", which rhymes with witch!
Cheers,
John
Comment Written 21-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
We have to watch the Peggy types of the world, and there sure are plenty of them. I've never heard of the Cupid Shuffle; of course, I know nothing about line dancing. But it's a cute name for a dance. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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We have to watch the Peggy types of the world, and there sure are plenty of them. I've never heard of the Cupid Shuffle; of course, I know nothing about line dancing. But it's a cute name for a dance. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate the comment on Peggy. I was told by a reviewer that there's no real Peggy's out there. I have known a few so thought maybe it was just me.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Early days for this relationship but I can see it all going in the right direction Barbara, this is an entertaining and interesting post and I adored that video too! Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Early days for this relationship but I can see it all going in the right direction Barbara, this is an entertaining and interesting post and I adored that video too! Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
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You are most welcome Barbara x x x
Comment from DeboraDyess
Hi Barbara ~
So glad to be caught up with this (finally!) and reading the current chapter. It's great.
Thoughts:
~ Since 'bright eyes' is being used as a nickname, should it be capped? I'm not sure on that one. *Sigh* I think I've forgotten about as much about grammar as I used to know. lol
~ mma and the children discussed even though they all look differently they're all special, just like Elmer. >> mma and the children discussed (how,)even though they all look differently they're all special, just like Elmer >> Just a suggestion. :)
~ to ensure no child darted into the street >> You used 'street' earlier in this paragraph. You might consider changing this to 'traffic' or 'danger' or something similar to avoid repetition. Not that important - I may just be being a pain in the neck but it's not intentional. :)
~ WHAT!? The librarian is upset about a reading program? Shame on her! lol Don't we get possessive of our roles, even when we're messing up...
~ He nodded, before she continued, "It's not my fault t >> I'd suggest reformating this slightly. >> He nodded before she continued. "It's not my fault >> It definitely feels like a new sentence beginning.
~ In her head Emma's a threat." >> In her head, Emma's a threat."
~ I'm loving the story. I want you to know that when I make a suggested correcditon or change, it's not because I don't. I have worked as an editor and can get a bit ... crazy, I guess. lol
~ Emma plopped on the couch. >> There's nothing wrong with this sentence, per see. But you begin many sentences with a character's name. By rephrasing slightly, you eliminate this. Every once in a while, say something like 'Plopping on the couch, Emma...' or "Grabbing a few tissues and handing them to Emma, Seth...' It can easily be overdone, of course. I tend to do it too often. lol. OH! And in the VERY NEXT paragraph, you did it. lol. Maybe I just hadn't noticed it before. Sorry! lol
I'm truly enjoying this, Barbara.
And the video! I shared with my grandchildren and they were as tickled as I. My uncle's brother was an NYPD narcotics officer. It's good to see that the public image of the PD has changed over the years. :)
Blessings and keep up the great writing!
Deb
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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Hi Barbara ~
So glad to be caught up with this (finally!) and reading the current chapter. It's great.
Thoughts:
~ Since 'bright eyes' is being used as a nickname, should it be capped? I'm not sure on that one. *Sigh* I think I've forgotten about as much about grammar as I used to know. lol
~ mma and the children discussed even though they all look differently they're all special, just like Elmer. >> mma and the children discussed (how,)even though they all look differently they're all special, just like Elmer >> Just a suggestion. :)
~ to ensure no child darted into the street >> You used 'street' earlier in this paragraph. You might consider changing this to 'traffic' or 'danger' or something similar to avoid repetition. Not that important - I may just be being a pain in the neck but it's not intentional. :)
~ WHAT!? The librarian is upset about a reading program? Shame on her! lol Don't we get possessive of our roles, even when we're messing up...
~ He nodded, before she continued, "It's not my fault t >> I'd suggest reformating this slightly. >> He nodded before she continued. "It's not my fault >> It definitely feels like a new sentence beginning.
~ In her head Emma's a threat." >> In her head, Emma's a threat."
~ I'm loving the story. I want you to know that when I make a suggested correcditon or change, it's not because I don't. I have worked as an editor and can get a bit ... crazy, I guess. lol
~ Emma plopped on the couch. >> There's nothing wrong with this sentence, per see. But you begin many sentences with a character's name. By rephrasing slightly, you eliminate this. Every once in a while, say something like 'Plopping on the couch, Emma...' or "Grabbing a few tissues and handing them to Emma, Seth...' It can easily be overdone, of course. I tend to do it too often. lol. OH! And in the VERY NEXT paragraph, you did it. lol. Maybe I just hadn't noticed it before. Sorry! lol
I'm truly enjoying this, Barbara.
And the video! I shared with my grandchildren and they were as tickled as I. My uncle's brother was an NYPD narcotics officer. It's good to see that the public image of the PD has changed over the years. :)
Blessings and keep up the great writing!
Deb
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Comment Written 19-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the kind and detailed review. I appreciate it.
Comment from BethShelby
That Peggy is going to be a pain for Seth and Emma to deal with. She isn't doing her job getting a summer reading program going. Most libraries would be grateful and offer her a space inside if it's a safety issue. Eight years age difference seems to bother Selh. It didn't bother my husband. He was nine years older and we hae 61 years together.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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That Peggy is going to be a pain for Seth and Emma to deal with. She isn't doing her job getting a summer reading program going. Most libraries would be grateful and offer her a space inside if it's a safety issue. Eight years age difference seems to bother Selh. It didn't bother my husband. He was nine years older and we hae 61 years together.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Seth is overreacting the the age thing. I think trying to find reasons not to care for her. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from w.j.debi
This relationship is going well. It's early so both Seth and Emma are still getting to know each other. Peggy is pushing too hard so her chances with Seth are going nowhere fast. I look forward to the town meeting. It should be interesting.
Now, who is in that car?
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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This relationship is going well. It's early so both Seth and Emma are still getting to know each other. Peggy is pushing too hard so her chances with Seth are going nowhere fast. I look forward to the town meeting. It should be interesting.
Now, who is in that car?
Comment Written 19-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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The car is still a secret. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from estory
You're juggling a few things in this chapter; the continued romance of Seth and Emma, the altercation with the lady from the Library, and this discovery of Emma's birth mom, who Seth doesn't want her to meet. Lively dialogue as always, but this chapter seems to be going in several directions at once. There is a fair amount of suspense building and there lots of possibilities ahead. estory
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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You're juggling a few things in this chapter; the continued romance of Seth and Emma, the altercation with the lady from the Library, and this discovery of Emma's birth mom, who Seth doesn't want her to meet. Lively dialogue as always, but this chapter seems to be going in several directions at once. There is a fair amount of suspense building and there lots of possibilities ahead. estory
Comment Written 19-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.