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Guided by Faith

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Can faith guide our path?

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Comment from Pam (respa)
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Good image for the chapter. You did a good job with the emotions Emma and Seth were feeling. It hasn't been easy with the problems Peggy is causing and the incident with Marc. Emma seemed to enjoy the ride on the motorcycle, and maybe it helped putting her more in touch with her feelings and emotions.

A good scene in the burger place with a number of different things happening to get Emma upset. I was surprised by the information about her early life. No wonder she is so guarded. Seth is perceptive and knows she is upset about something, and and Peggy Barton's behavior doesn't help.

Seth had a good idea to go to the park, and they managed to discuss a few different issues and the impact they were having. I am glad Emma was able to enjoy the ride back home.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 20-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the kind review. Emma will struggle in the morning again.
reply by Pam (respa) on 20-Jul-2023
    You are welcome. Thanks for sharing.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
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Hi Barbara,

I'm so glad to see Emma and Seth beginning to make amends for Seth's sticky situation he got himself into. I'm glad she didn't quickly forgive him. Earning back trust should be done in stages to be done right.

Peggy is really being a jerk, and is a believable character to oppose Emma.

A really interesting and thought provoking chapter that helped build our understanding of the characters of Seth and Emma.

Very enjoyable, my friend,
Rhonda


 Comment Written 18-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
    Emma isn't totally finished forgiving Seth. She got to thinking about it during the night. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
reply by davisr (Rhonda) on 19-Jul-2023
    Good for her. Don't let him off the hook easily!!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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"Burgers Bob's isn't far" should be Burger Bob's isn't far.

"table set down" should be table, set down.

The "I had a bad day" sentence needs to be looked at again. Seems something is missing out of it?

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the catches. I corrected those areas and worked on that sentence. Not sure I got it right, yet, but will still think about it. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Anne Johnston
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This is another well-written chapter. I am glad that Seth is being so patient with Emma, encouraging her, yet not pushing her for a relationship. they are becoming better friends, which is a great basis for something deeper.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from JT traveller
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Beautiful writing..I am not sure what "catsup" is. Maybe an American thing?

I'm happy Emma got to ride pillion.

In my work in the neonatal ICU, I saw lots of neonates in opioid withdrawal. So sad.

Great work. Jacqueline

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
    It is an American thing, it's made from tomatoes. It's a condiment. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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The rating slipped! I gave you a six, then it jumped to 4! I only noticed it when I clicked on 'Save' now I can only give you a 5. This is happening a lot to me. I think my laptop needs a good service. :((

I think Peggy is going to be a right pain in the neck and I don't think Emma is up to fighting back. Her childhood and upbringing explains a lot about how she behaves, but she really does need to toughen up. And then there is the car/van, that keeps spying on her. Is that anything to do with Peggy as well? Another great chapter, Barbara. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
    Emma will toughen up. Thank you for the kind review. I understand about be stars it happens to me often.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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So many things in this chapter were convincingly written (how to ride a motorbike) and added a lot to revealing the characters (how truly horrible Peggy Barton is, and how innocent Emma is), I think it will be a pivotal chapter for things yet to come. kay

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sanku
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It is a beautiful chapter .I enjoyed the gradual progress of this relationship with occasional hiccups.The dialogues flow naturally and are well crafted...I think at this stage you can give us a hint aabout the strange car...

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the encouragement. It will happen soon.
Comment from Sankey
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This was really involving. I am a bit later than usual and you already have ALL TIME BEST! up!! SO glad to have all my favourite writers on deck again. I need to get back on deck, myself.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
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Barbara,
Your story flows nicely.
I have to admit I have some characteristics of Emma, and it's a little painful for me to realize this. In the past, I have let others push me around.
Note: though there is no adverb beginning the following sentence, There might be a comma to avoid confusion: 'a few minutes later after they sat (,). Without the comma, the sentence can be read a few ways.
Your great story is interesting and psychologically intense.
Good luck, Barbara.
Blessings,
Cindy


 Comment Written 17-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the encouragement. I will check that area out.