A Not So Smooth Rendezvous
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Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nicely done. But toying with people's imaginations ought to be illegal! (smiley face here)
Desereted - deserted?
Unshroud yourself. - I like it!
I feel like this piece wanted badly to be a poem.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2023
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Nicely done. But toying with people's imaginations ought to be illegal! (smiley face here)
Desereted - deserted?
Unshroud yourself. - I like it!
I feel like this piece wanted badly to be a poem.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2023
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Yes, it likely was, but despite Jimminy saying dreams come true, it went rogue and became a story, with a dash and sprinkling of rhyming. Thanks Wayne. Nice to hear from you once more.
Comment from jim vecchio
I enjoyed this very much. One typo to correct (a small one!)-In Paragraph 2, "Being The Sleuth" does not need a comma after it.
As for the final line, I believe it is: "So we drift on, boats against the current, borne back ceaselessly to the past."
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2023
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I enjoyed this very much. One typo to correct (a small one!)-In Paragraph 2, "Being The Sleuth" does not need a comma after it.
As for the final line, I believe it is: "So we drift on, boats against the current, borne back ceaselessly to the past."
Comment Written 02-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2023
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Grammarly accepted it either way.
Thanks for the comment and the added last line.
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Of course, the last line was from "The Great McGonickle" or something like that, from an unknown writer named F. Scott Puett.
Comment from strandregs
Very nice beach bum reverie.
A little smoother and you'd be climbing up that tree.
Heartthrobbing bare butts
Everymans fantasy ,
Exploding nuts.
Good fun and nice writing , dream on...
:-))X.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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Very nice beach bum reverie.
A little smoother and you'd be climbing up that tree.
Heartthrobbing bare butts
Everymans fantasy ,
Exploding nuts.
Good fun and nice writing , dream on...
:-))X.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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Thanks for realizing it was a reverie. Many have reviewed as if it was a real event. Me? I'm not telling.
Comment from Terry Broxson
Tom, I think you have a well-written story. Just enough humor for it to hum along. A little romance never hurt a thing, great pictures, and, of course, no doubt an out-and-out lie that this never happened. I think you got a vote-getter here. Terry.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Tom, I think you have a well-written story. Just enough humor for it to hum along. A little romance never hurt a thing, great pictures, and, of course, no doubt an out-and-out lie that this never happened. I think you got a vote-getter here. Terry.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Hoping you are right for it be nice for a blind squirrel to now and then find a nut. Thank you.
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Hoping you are right for it be nice for a blind squirrel to now and then find a nut. Thank you.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
She said sweetie pie, are you reliving how we met again? These days every pair of panties I put on becomes an instant thong. And, I spend my days digging the fabric out of my more than ample behind, when years past I wore that stuff on purpose. Wanna go take a little nap (winking flirtatiously). "Honey",I said,"have you got something in your eye?" "Just you", she said. How is that? Karen
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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She said sweetie pie, are you reliving how we met again? These days every pair of panties I put on becomes an instant thong. And, I spend my days digging the fabric out of my more than ample behind, when years past I wore that stuff on purpose. Wanna go take a little nap (winking flirtatiously). "Honey",I said,"have you got something in your eye?" "Just you", she said. How is that? Karen
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Aah. I know
Not what to say but I appreciate you
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Aah. I know
Not what to say but I appreciate you
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It is nice to be valued :-)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this Rendezvous writing prompt entry with us. I honestly had a lot of fun reading. You did a great job writing and I could see if unveil as I read. Great job of writing.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you for sharing this Rendezvous writing prompt entry with us. I honestly had a lot of fun reading. You did a great job writing and I could see if unveil as I read. Great job of writing.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Every now and then a squirrel finds a nut.
Thanks
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Every now and then a squirrel finds a nut.
Thanks
Comment from Mary Vigasin
This is Tom at his best with a story told with humor, fantasy, and a great story with some very real human characteristics - less smoothness and more clumsiness.
I love this line:
"Could she be satisfied with smooth, I thought, for how sophisticated can one be with a tongue hanging out?'
Mary
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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This is Tom at his best with a story told with humor, fantasy, and a great story with some very real human characteristics - less smoothness and more clumsiness.
I love this line:
"Could she be satisfied with smooth, I thought, for how sophisticated can one be with a tongue hanging out?'
Mary
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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And yet I think people wonder when meeting me in person, what a curmudgeon he must be. Why? I think I have a Mona Lisa smile and when added to my stoicism I fall short of being warm.
Thanks for your support. You are aces in my book. Tom
Comment from Wendyanne
Lol what a tall tale you tell. You have described the scene very well and with humour. I guess we all have our own never-was-never-will-be reveries as I know I do. An enjoyable read. Good luck.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Lol what a tall tale you tell. You have described the scene very well and with humour. I guess we all have our own never-was-never-will-be reveries as I know I do. An enjoyable read. Good luck.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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If our paths have crossed in the past it has been infrequently. I thank you for stopping in and partaking of my ... individuality. If you stay with me you'll see, for even I never know where the road will take me. Thanks foor stopping by. Tom
Thank you.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I'd say from what I've seen so far that, no taut and tender bum is ever safe from your wandering lenses. And lucky for us, your regular readers, we get to wish we where but a frisky sand flea. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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I'd say from what I've seen so far that, no taut and tender bum is ever safe from your wandering lenses. And lucky for us, your regular readers, we get to wish we where but a frisky sand flea. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Tee-hee
In this case the life of one frisky sand flea eliminates my desire of the life of a pirate IF the bite of my affection is either of the classy lassie captured through my lens. 🤓
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Tee-hee
In this case the life of one frisky sand flea eliminates my desire of the life of a pirate IF the bite of my affection is either of the classy lassie captured through my lens. 🤓
Comment from BethShelby
Yes, I'm sure it never happened that way but you have an appreciation for bikini clad beauties as your photography shows and you aren't above indulging in a little fantasy, if only on paper. LOL
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Yes, I'm sure it never happened that way but you have an appreciation for bikini clad beauties as your photography shows and you aren't above indulging in a little fantasy, if only on paper. LOL
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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hmm. u might be right, but if it was a dream, would I live it for someone else to finsih the thought????
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hmm. u might be right, but if it was a dream, would I live it for someone else to finsih the thought????