Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Mr. D. Part 2"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
13 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Very exciting chapter again. Yikes. He is even scarier than your mother's husband...mostly, I think, because everything he says has to be translated by his wife. So you have a delay in your response time, which, in this case, proved deadly.
Very well done, Lea. xoxo
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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Very exciting chapter again. Yikes. He is even scarier than your mother's husband...mostly, I think, because everything he says has to be translated by his wife. So you have a delay in your response time, which, in this case, proved deadly.
Very well done, Lea. xoxo
Comment Written 12-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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Thank you my darling friend I appreciate it! I'm really happy that you like the work too!! Thank you for your review. And you're kind of reading. They are gold as important as the comments and suggestions for correction leisure. Very important, thanks again!
Comment from thoughtgame2
Always a five star read...even with a misspell here or there. You know I no a little about that,don't you [smile]. I find it very inviting and with an ability to draw me into the plot! Really very well thought out. Than for sharing. I think ill dig a little bit in your portfolio and see what else I can enjoy. Talk to you later.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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Always a five star read...even with a misspell here or there. You know I no a little about that,don't you [smile]. I find it very inviting and with an ability to draw me into the plot! Really very well thought out. Than for sharing. I think ill dig a little bit in your portfolio and see what else I can enjoy. Talk to you later.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you like this one I appreciate it. Thank you for your wonderful review and kind rating. I hope you have the best day ever. Have a look around whenever you wish. Thank you again my friend!
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very welcome
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. I don't usually, or almost never offer suggestions, knowing full well that the writers will edit and polish themselves later. However, today, I'm just pointing out a couple easy ones.
He grabbed me by the color (collar) of my nightshirt, . . .
I struggled, pulled and tried to pris (pry) his fingers from my arm.
"This only ends badly you kniw (know) this!"
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. I don't usually, or almost never offer suggestions, knowing full well that the writers will edit and polish themselves later. However, today, I'm just pointing out a couple easy ones.
He grabbed me by the color (collar) of my nightshirt, . . .
I struggled, pulled and tried to pris (pry) his fingers from my arm.
"This only ends badly you kniw (know) this!"
Comment Written 11-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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Hi Ric! Thank you yes I went ahead and made those corrections. Thank you so much for that these are like gold to me! I appreciate your kind review. Then you're fine remarks and you're great rating thanks so much having awesome day!
Comment from EILEEN LAW
to pris his fingers from my arm. tried to pry his fingers from my arm.
"This only ends badly you kniw this!
"This only ends badly, you know this!"
reminds me of the basement 'family room' on 124
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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to pris his fingers from my arm. tried to pry his fingers from my arm.
"This only ends badly you kniw this!
"This only ends badly, you know this!"
reminds me of the basement 'family room' on 124
Comment Written 11-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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Further to my email thank you again!
Comment from JSD
I saw another great film you'd enjoy. It's called 'A Vigilante' with Olivia Wilde, who hires herself out to abused women to rid them of their husbands. It's on Amazon Prime if you have that. x
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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I saw another great film you'd enjoy. It's called 'A Vigilante' with Olivia Wilde, who hires herself out to abused women to rid them of their husbands. It's on Amazon Prime if you have that. x
Comment Written 11-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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I do have Amazon Prime. I'm gonna have to watch it for sure thank you for that tip! Thank you for reviewing thank you for reading! May the force be with you!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I think this must be the kind of stress that definitely leads to a life-changing decision here. I see other reviewers have suggested some edits.
He grabbed me by the color of my nightshirt,
change color to collar
Then I thought, "uh oh," as I watched his brown face turn black."
I would capitalize Uh oh.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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I think this must be the kind of stress that definitely leads to a life-changing decision here. I see other reviewers have suggested some edits.
He grabbed me by the color of my nightshirt,
change color to collar
Then I thought, "uh oh," as I watched his brown face turn black."
I would capitalize Uh oh.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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Good morning, thank you so much. I appreciate these edit suggestions. They're very helpful. Think they're gold myself and I also think you're comments and your suggestions are great as well. Thank you for this fine review!
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
this guy stepped over the line when he put his hands on you. It's time to go to the cops. I can appreciate that Mrs. D is in a desperate situation, but her culture seems to be binding her from moving, at least for now. One thing is certain, you need to pack up and go while you can still draw a breath. Well done gal.
On a different note, you obviously live in a more southern end of BC. In Southeast Alaska, though it was the Tongass National Forest, a rain forest, we had lots of snow. One year we got 23 feet. I thought it would never quit.
Blessings,
Tom
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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Hello Lea,
this guy stepped over the line when he put his hands on you. It's time to go to the cops. I can appreciate that Mrs. D is in a desperate situation, but her culture seems to be binding her from moving, at least for now. One thing is certain, you need to pack up and go while you can still draw a breath. Well done gal.
On a different note, you obviously live in a more southern end of BC. In Southeast Alaska, though it was the Tongass National Forest, a rain forest, we had lots of snow. One year we got 23 feet. I thought it would never quit.
Blessings,
Tom
Comment Written 11-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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Holy smokes that's a lot of snow! We don't get much snow here in southern BC anymore. We might see a little skiff here and there. But mostly we are snow free abd just get rain.
Not when we were children though. I am just above Washington State.
Quite close to the Peace Arch border. Most Southern part of BC. I'm right near the ocean. Thank you again for your review. Wow, it looks like you got quite the winter winter lineup there. Still holy smoke. So I hope you have a great big fuzzy dog to keep you warm! Have a good night thanks again!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The problem with you both leaving together would mean that this man would never leave the two of you alone and it is best for you to go on your own, this man is not your problem. I am glad that you fought your corner Lea, I hope you soon pack your bags and get out of there! What an awful situation to find yourself in, from the frying pan to the fire, as they say.
Typo here:
This only ends badly you (know) this!"
Another fine chapter.
Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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The problem with you both leaving together would mean that this man would never leave the two of you alone and it is best for you to go on your own, this man is not your problem. I am glad that you fought your corner Lea, I hope you soon pack your bags and get out of there! What an awful situation to find yourself in, from the frying pan to the fire, as they say.
Typo here:
This only ends badly you (know) this!"
Another fine chapter.
Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 10-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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Thank you again Dolly! I'm thankful to have your reviews. I value the things you say and your suggestions for edit too. I hope that you're doing well and the holidays are fast approaching. I hope they are good to you too
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have a feeling her culture there was nothing avaible for her. Thank you for sharing this story. It needs to be told.
brown face turn black."I might've made this worse." (space needed after 'black.')
He grabbed me by the color of my nightshirt, (collar?)
tried to pris his fingers from my arm. (to pry??)
"This only ends badly you kniw this!" (know)
. "Shshsh". She said. (Shshsh," she)
"Joo have to wait longer if you keep make noise." She snapped. (noise," she)
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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I have a feeling her culture there was nothing avaible for her. Thank you for sharing this story. It needs to be told.
brown face turn black."I might've made this worse." (space needed after 'black.')
He grabbed me by the color of my nightshirt, (collar?)
tried to pris his fingers from my arm. (to pry??)
"This only ends badly you kniw this!" (know)
. "Shshsh". She said. (Shshsh," she)
"Joo have to wait longer if you keep make noise." She snapped. (noise," she)
Comment Written 10-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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Hi Barbara, thank you again. I've taken all these edits and made the corrections. You must know how very helpful it is to me that you have done that. I take everybody's suggestion for edit it take seriously thank you again for that! Thank you too for your review your time and your special rating. I wish you a happy holiday and a great evening!
Comment from Jim Wile
What's it going to take for this woman to realize she would be better off without this maniac? This is so sad, not only for her, but her children too. I hope you can get through to her because she is dooming herself and kids to a life of torment, if not death, at his hand.
You are very brave, Lea, to want to help her and to stand up to him and not just bolt at the first opportunity. - Jim
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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What's it going to take for this woman to realize she would be better off without this maniac? This is so sad, not only for her, but her children too. I hope you can get through to her because she is dooming herself and kids to a life of torment, if not death, at his hand.
You are very brave, Lea, to want to help her and to stand up to him and not just bolt at the first opportunity. - Jim
Comment Written 10-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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Thank you Jim we're kind of in it together and I at that time. I did my Best Buy her hopefully. What I did helped but I shall never know. I appreciate your reviews really. I do as always. I appreciate your friendship too. And the music you've sent me from Paul as lovely as well. For which I thank you for that too. And for being my friend and reading long that's the best gift ever thank you!
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You've become a dear friend to me too, Lea.