The Nocturnal Reader
A Newbie Flash Fiction contest entry in exactly 100 words21 total reviews
Comment from nomi338
I love funny stories that have surprising endings. Enough with mundane stories that do not entertain, only bore me. Your talent is evident in the way that you tell your story in such a way that the reader has no clue to where you are taking him until he gets there and is both surprised and pleased to be there. Congratulation on your recognition.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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I love funny stories that have surprising endings. Enough with mundane stories that do not entertain, only bore me. Your talent is evident in the way that you tell your story in such a way that the reader has no clue to where you are taking him until he gets there and is both surprised and pleased to be there. Congratulation on your recognition.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much - I really appreciate this feedback! :)
Comment from BermyBye50
Navada,
Welcome to Fanstory and congrats on winning the Newbie Flash Fiction contest. Looking forward to reading and reviewing more of your writes in the future.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Navada,
Welcome to Fanstory and congrats on winning the Newbie Flash Fiction contest. Looking forward to reading and reviewing more of your writes in the future.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 09-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from RJ Fuller
This is fun! I enjoyed the idea of not knowing who you're talking with online... and that maybe that person isn't always what they seem. The line "It turns out that some of you live not far from me" is both creepy and kind of fun. Is this person a bad guy? Are they reformed and trying to make friends... honestly, it can be read either way and that's what makes this so cool.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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This is fun! I enjoyed the idea of not knowing who you're talking with online... and that maybe that person isn't always what they seem. The line "It turns out that some of you live not far from me" is both creepy and kind of fun. Is this person a bad guy? Are they reformed and trying to make friends... honestly, it can be read either way and that's what makes this so cool.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much! I like that you've picked up on that ambiguity - it was quite deliberate. I suspect he has unfortunate intentions. Luckily, he is not real. :)
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Navada,
I agree that this is a great site for help in your writing and meeting people.
I once thought that maybe people on this site could do a nerdy thing and have a convention where we all meet at some central place. That way we could really meet and put faces to names.
I like the bit of humor at the end;
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great rest of the day.
Joan
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Hi Navada,
I agree that this is a great site for help in your writing and meeting people.
I once thought that maybe people on this site could do a nerdy thing and have a convention where we all meet at some central place. That way we could really meet and put faces to names.
I like the bit of humor at the end;
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great rest of the day.
Joan
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Joan! :)
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You are very welcome, Navada.
Joan
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
LOL I enjoyed reading this and never expected the twist at the end. Very clever and creative. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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LOL I enjoyed reading this and never expected the twist at the end. Very clever and creative. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Thanks so much, Barbara! :)
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a good short introduction to yourself, but I won't get to meet you as I live half a world away in the middle of the USA. I'm so happy you have joined us, and I get to read your writing.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2024
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This is a good short introduction to yourself, but I won't get to meet you as I live half a world away in the middle of the USA. I'm so happy you have joined us, and I get to read your writing.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2024
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Thank you. Just to be clear - I'm not a prisoner! This piece is fictional! :) The twist at the end is supposed to give us pause and realise that anybody can pretend to be anyone online - and sometimes that can be scary.
Comment from jenintorre
This is a great flash fiction. I really enjoyed reading it. I love your humor. The last line is perfect. I think this should do really well in the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen. X
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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This is a great flash fiction. I really enjoyed reading it. I love your humor. The last line is perfect. I think this should do really well in the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen. X
Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from BethShelby
Funny. A number of friend thought they had found a new on line pal that might actually turn out to be the person they been hoping for in there life/ There picture was handsome and they seemed smart and had impressive jobs but they fhey learned the email was from a prison cell.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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Funny. A number of friend thought they had found a new on line pal that might actually turn out to be the person they been hoping for in there life/ There picture was handsome and they seemed smart and had impressive jobs but they fhey learned the email was from a prison cell.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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Whoops! You have to be careful, for sure. :)
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Navada,
I'm curious about what hard physical labor you do during the day. I used to work hard physically, and there are limited times when I still do, but the old bod doesn't want to co-operate anymore, so what used to be fairly easy tasks for me have become more difficult. I stay up late reading as well, but it's mainly books. I have several by my nightstand and almost without fail I have to read before I go to sleep. I catch Fan Story whenever I can, but sometimes it goes a few days without catching up, then it's hard to review all the great posts.
Have a blessed evening,
Tom
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Hello Navada,
I'm curious about what hard physical labor you do during the day. I used to work hard physically, and there are limited times when I still do, but the old bod doesn't want to co-operate anymore, so what used to be fairly easy tasks for me have become more difficult. I stay up late reading as well, but it's mainly books. I have several by my nightstand and almost without fail I have to read before I go to sleep. I catch Fan Story whenever I can, but sometimes it goes a few days without catching up, then it's hard to review all the great posts.
Have a blessed evening,
Tom
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Hi, Tom. Physical labour? Very little, I'm afraid. :) It's not just laziness - I have a few health issues.