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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Wow! Thank you!!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, Rachelle!
Yes, I am a bit tardy, but I delighted in every morsel of this exceptionally well-crafted chapter.
The dialogue alone is enough to make it most entertaining.
And then when you threw in the comment for Jane Babies to meet up with Lance at the convention, well, I laughed aloud.
Jane has some pretty interesting poetic titles in her quiver, yes? Oy!
Seamless presentation, and entertaining to boot!
Muc enjoyed!
fondly,
diane
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Hello, Rachelle!
Yes, I am a bit tardy, but I delighted in every morsel of this exceptionally well-crafted chapter.
The dialogue alone is enough to make it most entertaining.
And then when you threw in the comment for Jane Babies to meet up with Lance at the convention, well, I laughed aloud.
Jane has some pretty interesting poetic titles in her quiver, yes? Oy!
Seamless presentation, and entertaining to boot!
Muc enjoyed!
fondly,
diane
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Wait until you read what she's reciting while in the food court in today's new chapter!!
Thank you for this lovely and enthusiastic review. I appreciate your warmth and graciousness - and generosity! - very much, indeed. xoxoxo
Comment from Neonewman
OMG! How the hell does anyone deal with someone like that. Taking one for the team is one thing, but this crazy is CRAZY! Brilliantly crafted chapter addition. Can't wait to see how ya'll ditch BABY JANE! LOL!
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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OMG! How the hell does anyone deal with someone like that. Taking one for the team is one thing, but this crazy is CRAZY! Brilliantly crafted chapter addition. Can't wait to see how ya'll ditch BABY JANE! LOL!
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Then be sure to stay tuned!!! lol
Thank you for this nice review. xoxo
Comment from Bill Schott
This is so hilarious as Jane keeps trying to become something she thinks is important to be, as Rebeccah seems to be accepting clothing advice trustfully. Rachelle and Gretchen are positively charming and funny.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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This is so hilarious as Jane keeps trying to become something she thinks is important to be, as Rebeccah seems to be accepting clothing advice trustfully. Rachelle and Gretchen are positively charming and funny.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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Thank you for this warm and gracious review. We are having the BEST time writing this book, I have to say! xoxo
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Rachelle,
This is another great chapter in your continuing saga! I laughed out loud at your humorous
remarks.
(I saw ...Baby Jane too. Very disturbing.)
Your chapter left me hungering for more (mid)adventures of young Rebekah. I can't imagine what she's thinking right now!
Excellent Chapter, Rachelle!
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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Rachelle,
This is another great chapter in your continuing saga! I laughed out loud at your humorous
remarks.
(I saw ...Baby Jane too. Very disturbing.)
Your chapter left me hungering for more (mid)adventures of young Rebekah. I can't imagine what she's thinking right now!
Excellent Chapter, Rachelle!
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much, Cindy. We are having the best time together writing this!
Comment from Esther Brown
Too funny. Rachelle, I suspect you of poking humor at yourself and Gretchen. And maybe fanstory too (undercover of course). Maybe Lancellot? I so want to go on a road trip with you! I promise I won't read anything out loud that I have written. You are fun to read. Esther
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Too funny. Rachelle, I suspect you of poking humor at yourself and Gretchen. And maybe fanstory too (undercover of course). Maybe Lancellot? I so want to go on a road trip with you! I promise I won't read anything out loud that I have written. You are fun to read. Esther
Comment Written 24-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2024
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Hahaha. Thanks, Esther, for catching every last tidbit!! Xoxo
Comment from lancellot
A very well-crafted chapter. Yes, most adult FanStorians are quite shy when it comes to adult themes. I bet the Amish teens know more than they let on.
notes:
I hand Gretchen my VISA
-Do people still do that? Won't they think she stole the card?
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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A very well-crafted chapter. Yes, most adult FanStorians are quite shy when it comes to adult themes. I bet the Amish teens know more than they let on.
notes:
I hand Gretchen my VISA
-Do people still do that? Won't they think she stole the card?
Comment Written 23-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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She's there with an Amish girl; I think she'll pass for Rachelle Allen, since they never ask for picture ID to go with it.
Comment from lyenochka
Great job with the dialogue! Even though I'm not sure what Jaaaaane looks like, I can hear her voice. And it's amusing that you suggest she meet up with Lance who does sometimes write erotica but sometimes he writes some good social commentary.
You may have already changed the following:
"No!" says Rebecca at once. (name spelling changed from Rebekah)
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Great job with the dialogue! Even though I'm not sure what Jaaaaane looks like, I can hear her voice. And it's amusing that you suggest she meet up with Lance who does sometimes write erotica but sometimes he writes some good social commentary.
You may have already changed the following:
"No!" says Rebecca at once. (name spelling changed from Rebekah)
Comment Written 23-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Ohhh! GREAT CATCH!! No one's mentioned that - and despite all the dozens of times I've read this myself, I never caught it, either!! Thank you, Helen!! xoxox
Comment from Sanku
This jane is a real character! with a name like jane! She writes soft porn poems ,speaks in a weird accent and wants to copy your dress and shoe too. I hope very soon you will get a reprieve from her.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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This jane is a real character! with a name like jane! She writes soft porn poems ,speaks in a weird accent and wants to copy your dress and shoe too. I hope very soon you will get a reprieve from her.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Tova shouldn't be the only one, after all, right?! Thank you Sanku. It's so funny, but Jane is getting under EVERYONE's skin!! I appreciate the nice review. xoxox
Comment from judiverse
I am loving your novel. I am wondering if you know someone similar to Jane. Her attempts at poetry were funny. I suppose she qualifies as a FS member because she has written poems. Yes, Lancellot would be the one for her to meet. She also wants to copy Rachelle's style in clothes. Gretchen gets out of it by taking Rebekah shopping. Love your description of Rebekah looking like a typical but stylish teenager. She will love her New York experience. What an amusing, delightful trip to the convention. judi
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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I am loving your novel. I am wondering if you know someone similar to Jane. Her attempts at poetry were funny. I suppose she qualifies as a FS member because she has written poems. Yes, Lancellot would be the one for her to meet. She also wants to copy Rachelle's style in clothes. Gretchen gets out of it by taking Rebekah shopping. Love your description of Rebekah looking like a typical but stylish teenager. She will love her New York experience. What an amusing, delightful trip to the convention. judi
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
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I had the BEST time writing this chapter!! Gretchen supplied all the ideas - Jane, Jane's inappropriate poems, Rebekah rocking and reciting the Lord's Prayer, Jane wanting to copy my clothes - all I did was flesh them out. Such a fun endeavor this all is!! Thank you for this really nice review. I always love and appreciate your feedback. xoxox
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You're welcome. I'm laughing again, recalling all the fun elements in the crowded car ride to New York. judi