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Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "On Your Mark, Get Set..."Two very real women in not so real situation.
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Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
once again, you've penned a delightful addition to this ongoing saga. It's hilarious. I love the way you think. Why stop at punching her in the nose? Take her out and bury her up to her neck in a sand dune and read lousy poetry to her. I don't know how you two are going to get rid of the obnoxious bag, but for the sake of everyone's sanity, I hope it's soon. Well done gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
once again, you've penned a delightful addition to this ongoing saga. It's hilarious. I love the way you think. Why stop at punching her in the nose? Take her out and bury her up to her neck in a sand dune and read lousy poetry to her. I don't know how you two are going to get rid of the obnoxious bag, but for the sake of everyone's sanity, I hope it's soon. Well done gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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thank you so much Tom. Sorry its a late response. Busy week. I really appreciate this nice review and the extra star. Gretchen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I tried giving my Son gifts I thought he would like but I was wrong, I ended up giving up and letting him choose his on
I haven't heard nincompoop in a long time, it's a funny word..
I love this "hitting Jane right in the nose." LoL I get it, Jane is such an obnoxious person! I wish they could leave her behind but she did bring the car.
I love the part about buying things for Rebekah.
Great job! I loved it and Rachelle's too.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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I tried giving my Son gifts I thought he would like but I was wrong, I ended up giving up and letting him choose his on
I haven't heard nincompoop in a long time, it's a funny word..
I love this "hitting Jane right in the nose." LoL I get it, Jane is such an obnoxious person! I wish they could leave her behind but she did bring the car.
I love the part about buying things for Rebekah.
Great job! I loved it and Rachelle's too.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review and the stellar rating. Gretchen
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. I'll have to agree with your notes that "karma" had nothing to do with it. And yes, sometimes, we do attract some needy soul who latches on and well, maybe it's God teaching us how to develop some spiritual gift like patience, kindness, gentleness, and self-control. Sounds like you aced the self-control part!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Lol. I'll have to agree with your notes that "karma" had nothing to do with it. And yes, sometimes, we do attract some needy soul who latches on and well, maybe it's God teaching us how to develop some spiritual gift like patience, kindness, gentleness, and self-control. Sounds like you aced the self-control part!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Fictional Gretchen may have aced the patience thing but I still need work. Lol. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I agree, kill Jane. She's everything I hate. But that isn't civilized. Since we must be ladies, try to ignore her, but I think Rachelle will not be able to do that. There are a few things you'll want to change: . . . towards me(, and) I watch . . . . . . and pray about (it), I can . . .
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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I agree, kill Jane. She's everything I hate. But that isn't civilized. Since we must be ladies, try to ignore her, but I think Rachelle will not be able to do that. There are a few things you'll want to change: . . . towards me(, and) I watch . . . . . . and pray about (it), I can . . .
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Thank you do much, Carole. I hate being around chatterbox, but especially if they talk only about themselves. Thank you for catching those edits. Gretchen
Comment from Jim Wile
This was so clever and funny, Gretchen. Your exchanges with Jane were terrific, especially the one that ended with:
"You're uncomfortable with sexuality, aren't you?"
"If I am, does that mean you won't read your poetry anymore?" Great line!
And I loved this one too: She is in a world of her own, and I bet none of the inhabitants there like her either.
It is rather uncanny how little self-awareness some people have, and it never occurs to them how inappropriate they can be. I think she probably wasn't playing with a full deck, as you said.
It was also fun to see your attempt to get your husband to bail you out, but he thinks you should go to the reunion instead and refuses.
This was a fun chapter, as well as sweet, as we see Rebekah starting to blossom.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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This was so clever and funny, Gretchen. Your exchanges with Jane were terrific, especially the one that ended with:
"You're uncomfortable with sexuality, aren't you?"
"If I am, does that mean you won't read your poetry anymore?" Great line!
And I loved this one too: She is in a world of her own, and I bet none of the inhabitants there like her either.
It is rather uncanny how little self-awareness some people have, and it never occurs to them how inappropriate they can be. I think she probably wasn't playing with a full deck, as you said.
It was also fun to see your attempt to get your husband to bail you out, but he thinks you should go to the reunion instead and refuses.
This was a fun chapter, as well as sweet, as we see Rebekah starting to blossom.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Jim. I'm so glad you enjoyed this. Some chapters my true personality comes out. This was one of them. Lol. Thanks so much for the detailed review. Gretchen
Comment from judiverse
Great chapter. Jane is so funny, although she probably doesn't know it. Your husband's response about Jane and her dirty poetry is funny. He wants to hear some of it. Rachelle will be SSSSO pleased that Jane has taken such a liking to her. Now she'll never be rid of her. Great details about the shopping. This has been an exciting and fun-filled trip, at least for the readers. Very delightful. judi
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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Great chapter. Jane is so funny, although she probably doesn't know it. Your husband's response about Jane and her dirty poetry is funny. He wants to hear some of it. Rachelle will be SSSSO pleased that Jane has taken such a liking to her. Now she'll never be rid of her. Great details about the shopping. This has been an exciting and fun-filled trip, at least for the readers. Very delightful. judi
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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thank you so much. I appreciate the wonderful review and the extra star. It's been fun to write. Gretchen
Comment from pome lover
well, my first thought is good for you for coming back at ignatz! You and Rachelle truly created a top notch villain that the reader would love to throw machetes at. I just heard about this practice the other day, and was truly appalled, but yes, it is a thing, I gather, here in Texas. and I can't believe I ended a sentence with "at." My all time dislike.
Anyway, a good chapter. I hope Tova is most appreciative of you two!
I also look forward to yall's meeting FS friends from afar, up close and personal, unless just arriving at your destination in one piece is the ending.
Katharine
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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well, my first thought is good for you for coming back at ignatz! You and Rachelle truly created a top notch villain that the reader would love to throw machetes at. I just heard about this practice the other day, and was truly appalled, but yes, it is a thing, I gather, here in Texas. and I can't believe I ended a sentence with "at." My all time dislike.
Anyway, a good chapter. I hope Tova is most appreciative of you two!
I also look forward to yall's meeting FS friends from afar, up close and personal, unless just arriving at your destination in one piece is the ending.
Katharine
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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I'm honestly not sure how we are going to end it. Thank you so much for the fun review. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Jane needed to get lost in the mall. DARN!!! I guess that didn't happen, but it makes for an interesting story. I can't wait to see what happens next. I am enjoying reading.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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Jane needed to get lost in the mall. DARN!!! I guess that didn't happen, but it makes for an interesting story. I can't wait to see what happens next. I am enjoying reading.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Barbara. We just couldn't lose her. But have no doubt, it did cross our minds. Gretchen
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Go get the colonoscopy. My sister has severe diverticulitis. This could catch it early. Meanwhile, eat lots of fiber. Avoid High Frutose corn syrup. When you can afford it get organic. Off soap box. Good writing:-)
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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Go get the colonoscopy. My sister has severe diverticulitis. This could catch it early. Meanwhile, eat lots of fiber. Avoid High Frutose corn syrup. When you can afford it get organic. Off soap box. Good writing:-)
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much. I appreciate this fun review. Gretchen
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Please get the test, the verticulitus gave her vertigo, and she fell, That is how we found out she had it. Also, please write something for Pat's book, or I will have to write some more for her. She needs a thick book. Karen
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good morning, Gretchen!
How I savored this chapter and your expressed attitude toward Jane!
GAWD! I had to bite my lip a few times as I, too, have experienced my share of "Janes" in my lifetime:
Below, two of my favorite passages = priceless:
What's the point? There is a disconnect somewhere behind those eyes. I'm almost afraid I might get sucked into a vortex of crazy.
"No. Rachelle's cousin brought a woman with her when she brought Rachelle's car. This woman is certifiable. She writes dirty poetry. It isn't even good dirty poetry."
One tiny nit:
Rachelle and Rebekah come towards me an (and) I watch as Jane heads to the register empty handed. She hands the sales girl her credit card and after a few minutes she comes sauntering up. "Boy, oh boy, do I have a fun surprise for you," she squeezes Rachelle in an embrace.
Thank you for sharing!
Oh... and I loved your Author's notes re: karma... :) :) :)
fondly,
diane
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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Good morning, Gretchen!
How I savored this chapter and your expressed attitude toward Jane!
GAWD! I had to bite my lip a few times as I, too, have experienced my share of "Janes" in my lifetime:
Below, two of my favorite passages = priceless:
What's the point? There is a disconnect somewhere behind those eyes. I'm almost afraid I might get sucked into a vortex of crazy.
"No. Rachelle's cousin brought a woman with her when she brought Rachelle's car. This woman is certifiable. She writes dirty poetry. It isn't even good dirty poetry."
One tiny nit:
Rachelle and Rebekah come towards me an (and) I watch as Jane heads to the register empty handed. She hands the sales girl her credit card and after a few minutes she comes sauntering up. "Boy, oh boy, do I have a fun surprise for you," she squeezes Rachelle in an embrace.
Thank you for sharing!
Oh... and I loved your Author's notes re: karma... :) :) :)
fondly,
diane
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much Diane for this awesome and detailed review and the extra star. This means the world to me. Gretchen