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Comment from BethShelby
I really enjoying this and I'm sure I would be if I was riding with Jane. I'm anxious to hear what Rachalle has to say when she has finally had enough of Jane. Those Yankies really do like the southern accent although I feel like they are making fun of me.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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I really enjoying this and I'm sure I would be if I was riding with Jane. I'm anxious to hear what Rachalle has to say when she has finally had enough of Jane. Those Yankies really do like the southern accent although I feel like they are making fun of me.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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My kids make fun of my accent but that's okay. I like my accent. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from AliMom
It's a cute and amusing story with some relatable clips like wanting to put her annoying passenger through the windshield and attracting boys with her southern accent. There is very little tension here. I would like to know the thoughts of some of the characters. Not enough happens externally, except for the blaring of the rock song and loud clapping so...? Maybe one of the characters could offer a memory? I don't know. I really like your beginning (also very relatable) Though I disagree with the New York vibe. Most New Yorkers are kind and helpful and quite well-mannered.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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It's a cute and amusing story with some relatable clips like wanting to put her annoying passenger through the windshield and attracting boys with her southern accent. There is very little tension here. I would like to know the thoughts of some of the characters. Not enough happens externally, except for the blaring of the rock song and loud clapping so...? Maybe one of the characters could offer a memory? I don't know. I really like your beginning (also very relatable) Though I disagree with the New York vibe. Most New Yorkers are kind and helpful and quite well-mannered.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from Neonewman
I loved that you took the exit on two wheels, causing that annoying Jane to reach for the Oh Shit handle. My favorite was Rachelle calling shotgun. Jane had never seen it coming. I will be impatiently waiting for the come to Jesus talk.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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I loved that you took the exit on two wheels, causing that annoying Jane to reach for the Oh Shit handle. My favorite was Rachelle calling shotgun. Jane had never seen it coming. I will be impatiently waiting for the come to Jesus talk.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 09-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Steve. So glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen
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I love them all.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
OMG Jaaaaaaannnneeeeeeeeee is a paaaiiiinnnnnnnnnn LOL Can we drop her off at the next rest area once we get back on the road? Great chapter, Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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OMG Jaaaaaaannnneeeeeeeeee is a paaaiiiinnnnnnnnnn LOL Can we drop her off at the next rest area once we get back on the road? Great chapter, Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2024
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I might suggest we send her off on a scavenger hunt and leave her. Gretchen
Comment from Teri7
This is a very cute and well written chapter my friend. There is something about a lady say ya'll. I know because I have lived in Tennessee most all of my life. Great job. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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This is a very cute and well written chapter my friend. There is something about a lady say ya'll. I know because I have lived in Tennessee most all of my life. Great job. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 08-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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I'll bet you have a wonderful accent! Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from Jim Wile
I love that side of you, Gretchen, that wants to throw Jane through the windshield! The Jane character has made this story so amusing--the ultimate self-absorbed, clueless, obnoxious person who you just love to hate.
I loved your description of visiting NYC. I'm originally from Long Island (or Luong Guyland as it is typically pronounced), and what you observed was very accurate. I prefer NC personally, as there are too many Jane types in NY for my liking.
Great description of Jane's being an attention whore who you were even "waiting for her to start juggling or spinning plates for attention."
A very fun chapter.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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I love that side of you, Gretchen, that wants to throw Jane through the windshield! The Jane character has made this story so amusing--the ultimate self-absorbed, clueless, obnoxious person who you just love to hate.
I loved your description of visiting NYC. I'm originally from Long Island (or Luong Guyland as it is typically pronounced), and what you observed was very accurate. I prefer NC personally, as there are too many Jane types in NY for my liking.
Great description of Jane's being an attention whore who you were even "waiting for her to start juggling or spinning plates for attention."
A very fun chapter.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much. I know a few Jane's and they want attention no matter how they get it. It gets old. I'm from Richmond, VA and I like the pace of eastern N.C. better. Just feels like home. Gretchen
Comment from lyenochka
I see now what happened before that Rachelle was so quick to call "shotgun" to bring more peace in the car for the rest of the journey. I like how both your versions dovetail each other's with the same time period covered from a different viewpoint.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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I see now what happened before that Rachelle was so quick to call "shotgun" to bring more peace in the car for the rest of the journey. I like how both your versions dovetail each other's with the same time period covered from a different viewpoint.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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We each focus on what grabs our attention. This has been so much fun to write. Rachelle is a great co conspiracy. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
I understand your feelings perfectly well concerning the old wind bag. I don't think I could handle having her in my car for one more minute. Actually, after dinner, I think I'd sneak out with Rachelle and leave her behind. She's so incredibly obnoxious that she makes fingernails on the chalkboard sound good. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
I understand your feelings perfectly well concerning the old wind bag. I don't think I could handle having her in my car for one more minute. Actually, after dinner, I think I'd sneak out with Rachelle and leave her behind. She's so incredibly obnoxious that she makes fingernails on the chalkboard sound good. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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She is terrible, isn't she? I'm all for your idea, but Rachelle is too nice. We all know the road to hell is paved with good intentions. She'll learn the hard way. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from judiverse
I know what fantasies we can have about what we'd do to someone we don't like. Poor Jane seems to specialize in annoying others, and she doesn't even realize how disturbing she is to others. She must have quite a house, if hers looks better than Maria's. I'm glad Maria told her off when she tried to interject herself. If course, Maria's first concern was getting to know Rebekeh and getting her to feel welcome. I'm enjoying the humor in this. judi
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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I know what fantasies we can have about what we'd do to someone we don't like. Poor Jane seems to specialize in annoying others, and she doesn't even realize how disturbing she is to others. She must have quite a house, if hers looks better than Maria's. I'm glad Maria told her off when she tried to interject herself. If course, Maria's first concern was getting to know Rebekeh and getting her to feel welcome. I'm enjoying the humor in this. judi
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Judi. Jane is such a goddess in her own eyes she has no idea she isn't in anyone else's. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Jane is so obnoxious.... i can'tstand her. I hope she is not a real person.
I used to let people walk all over me ... i was a people pleaser too, when I was young, not anymore.
"She's an attention whore" hahaha
Well done!
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Jane is so obnoxious.... i can'tstand her. I hope she is not a real person.
I used to let people walk all over me ... i was a people pleaser too, when I was young, not anymore.
"She's an attention whore" hahaha
Well done!
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2024
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Jane is based on about four different people. I took the worst of each of them and Rachelle added a few details and voila! Jane Babies was created. I do know one thing. She only has to open her mouth to be hated. Pretty powerful villain. Gretchen