Each one teach one
My philosophy54 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Jesse,
Congratulations on your beautiful poem's rating.
Your work reminds me that I have to take more charge of my life.
I love the photo too!
Blessings,
Good luck,
Cindy
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Jesse,
Congratulations on your beautiful poem's rating.
Your work reminds me that I have to take more charge of my life.
I love the photo too!
Blessings,
Good luck,
Cindy
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Cindy, for your supportive review. Paying it forward is another way of looking at this concept. Each way has benefits of their own.
Thanks for the blessings.
Jesse
Comment from Boogienights
That's a great way of looking at life. You are correct, if we can learn from each other, with it will come understanding. Very well written a d formstted.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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That's a great way of looking at life. You are correct, if we can learn from each other, with it will come understanding. Very well written a d formstted.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thanks for the six stars and awesome review. Understanding and encouragement are two important ideas whose time has come.
I am glad this resonated with you. Thanks for the kind words.
Enjoy the day!
Jesse
Comment from docsoc
The opening line with just one words bring us straight into the message of collaboration. You develop this clearly in the following lines about the importance of developing leadership. I particularly like 'By working together/we can reach past the sun' followed by the motto in the last line. If it was my poem I would look at the second verse again. I would look at the word 'sorrow' and ask Could i use another word here. Lastly, is your rhyming scheme following a particular pattern?
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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The opening line with just one words bring us straight into the message of collaboration. You develop this clearly in the following lines about the importance of developing leadership. I particularly like 'By working together/we can reach past the sun' followed by the motto in the last line. If it was my poem I would look at the second verse again. I would look at the word 'sorrow' and ask Could i use another word here. Lastly, is your rhyming scheme following a particular pattern?
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thankfully it is not your poem so your suggestions will have to wait for another day another post. I appreciate your attempts to help make this a better poem.
Enjoy the weekend.
Jesse
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are meaningful, have a message and are creative.
I found this poem though provoking and pondered on the theme and
words of this poem. The first word of this poem says it all! The
artwork is awesome! Great Poem! Have a great day, Jesse!
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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The author's words are meaningful, have a message and are creative.
I found this poem though provoking and pondered on the theme and
words of this poem. The first word of this poem says it all! The
artwork is awesome! Great Poem! Have a great day, Jesse!
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thanks for the empowering review. I am glad this poem resonated with you. I appreciate your kind words of encouragement. I am happy you liked the artwork.
Enjoy the weekend!
Jesse
Comment from SimianSavant
Dolphins are dangerous! If they continue to self educate, they could take us over. Imagine a dolphin deity versus a nuclear submarine. Which one would win?
I would perhaps consider a little less space between your lines. Sometimes double spacing happens when working in the advanced editor, which is why I never use it.
Finally, I think the ending is a bit sloppy. Can you at least put it in quotes?
Begin with the expression:
"Each one teach one".
Clean this up and message me back, and I will bump it up a star.
Thanks for the read,
🦍
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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Dolphins are dangerous! If they continue to self educate, they could take us over. Imagine a dolphin deity versus a nuclear submarine. Which one would win?
I would perhaps consider a little less space between your lines. Sometimes double spacing happens when working in the advanced editor, which is why I never use it.
Finally, I think the ending is a bit sloppy. Can you at least put it in quotes?
Begin with the expression:
"Each one teach one".
Clean this up and message me back, and I will bump it up a star.
Thanks for the read,
🦍
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from BehindTheEyesofImani
This is a beautiful poem, Mr. Doty! It's simple and straightforward but still touching and inspiring. I often say we are better together as a community than on our own.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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This is a beautiful poem, Mr. Doty! It's simple and straightforward but still touching and inspiring. I often say we are better together as a community than on our own.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thanks for the six stars and awesome review. You sound familiar, yet I don't recognize your pen name. Are you someone I know from another world? The phrase "community" can refer to several idioms.
Thanks for being inspired by my simple poem.
If you are new to Fanstory, welcome to our writing site!
Enjoy the weekend.
Jesse
Comment from bob cullen
The Dear Old Marist Brothers, I blame them for most of my failings. Truth is, they were men dedicated to teaching often lazy teenagers going through that life stage called puberty. Most of them did a good job, some were tough and a few near impossible. But their task was much tougher than ours. As students, our interest in studying generally varied between 0 and 15% and our attitudes were well short of that mark.
I'm sure they practised this philosophy, but they utilised a cane as their enforcer. That worked. Somehow, we finally survived and graduated. A great write.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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The Dear Old Marist Brothers, I blame them for most of my failings. Truth is, they were men dedicated to teaching often lazy teenagers going through that life stage called puberty. Most of them did a good job, some were tough and a few near impossible. But their task was much tougher than ours. As students, our interest in studying generally varied between 0 and 15% and our attitudes were well short of that mark.
I'm sure they practised this philosophy, but they utilised a cane as their enforcer. That worked. Somehow, we finally survived and graduated. A great write.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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Thanks for the six stars and interesting review. Using the cane as an enforcer isn't necessary when the teacher does what he/she should.
I feel for you and your fellow students who weren't interested in learning for the sake of learning.
Thanks for sharing. Your kind and thoughtful review is appreciated.
Jesse
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jesse,
This poem has no specific rhyme scheme but flows well. I agree that if people work together more can get done for the better. Procrastination is never good.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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Hi Jesse,
This poem has no specific rhyme scheme but flows well. I agree that if people work together more can get done for the better. Procrastination is never good.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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Hi Joan. Thanks for offering positive reinforcement. I am glad you agree with the concept of each one, teach one.
Enjoy the upcoming weekend.
Jesse
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Don't mention it, Jesse.
Joan
Comment from godlucifer
leading not following is a philosophy gain of experience. teaching,learning,and sharing is a concept we know gain from experience. your poem was a talent write. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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leading not following is a philosophy gain of experience. teaching,learning,and sharing is a concept we know gain from experience. your poem was a talent write. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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Thanks for the positive feedback.
Enjoy the upcoming weekend.
Jesse
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
"It takes a village to raise a child.", "Coming together is a beginning, keeping together is progress, working together is success" - Henry Ford's
You have a positive outlook on the power of getting together to do good things. A wise state of mind.
Well done, Jesse
Gypsy hugs
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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"It takes a village to raise a child.", "Coming together is a beginning, keeping together is progress, working together is success" - Henry Ford's
You have a positive outlook on the power of getting together to do good things. A wise state of mind.
Well done, Jesse
Gypsy hugs
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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Thanks, my friend, for stopping by and offering famous quotes to live by. I'm aware of these and love the thought-provoking ideas they generate. Thanks for your kind words.
And thanks for the Gypsy hugs!
Jesse