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On Christmas Eve

Reacting Mary and Joseph' in search of shelter

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Comment from SimianSavant
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This is a cool reenactment -- thanks for sharing it! Is this done in Italy?

A couple notes on presentation:

-crop bottom black border on image

Subtitle: Reacting => Reenacting,
Mary and Joseph' in search of shelter => Mary's and Joseph's search for shelter

Main body:

as holy couple pass by => as holy couple passes (couple is singular, acted on by the verb PASS. If it was multiple couples, it would be "pass")

Thanks for the read!

🦍

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2024

Comment from Peter Jarvis
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The haiku "Reacting Mary and Joseph in Search of Shelter on Christmas Eve" beautifully encapsulates the profound poignancy of the Nativity story. In just three lines, it evokes a timeless image of Mary and Joseph's journey, their quiet desperation conveyed through the "sound of hooves" and the solemnity of their quest for refuge. The poem's simplicity mirrors the humility of the holy couple, and its brevity invites readers to reflect on themes of compassion, humanity, and faith.

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2024

Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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After reading your short poem a couple of times, I felt that the last line should read:

(in search (of) shelter)

but this is your choice of course.

I enjoyed the warm sentiment of the Nativity here, Merry Christmas to you, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2024


reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
    I actually had "of" then just before posting I put "for".

    Thanks I will edit.
reply by Dolly'sPoems on 22-Dec-2024
    It is up to you as both words work, love Dolly x