What is True Christmas Spirit?
Reach deep inside and find it.23 total reviews
Comment from Jordan Rose
Nice job. I thought your message was delivered well. It's a wonderful time of year and it would be fantastic if we could keep that feeling in our hearts all year round. Good luck with the contest. Jordan
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Nice job. I thought your message was delivered well. It's a wonderful time of year and it would be fantastic if we could keep that feeling in our hearts all year round. Good luck with the contest. Jordan
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written short essay on the Spirit of Christmas. Your point is very well taking. Chistmas should be a time of giving. Good luck in your contest.
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This is a very well written short essay on the Spirit of Christmas. Your point is very well taking. Chistmas should be a time of giving. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
Comment from LauraKatherine
Good essay, Knowledge. You've really showed what the Christmas spirit means to you: self-sacrifice and giving joy to all we meet. And I agree with you: the spirit of Christmas is in giving joy to others, passing on that spirit of our joyful, selfless God to those we meet.
I've got some specific suggestions to strengthen the essay:
As the Christmas season comes upon Christians something happens within us. (This read a little awkwardly to me. Maybe reword:
As the Christmas season arrives, something happens within Christians. Or you could put a comma after "christians".)
Be they our family, friends, and even total strangers. (fragment. Join it with the previous sentence. For example, "We begin looking for ways of bringing joy and happiness to others, be they our family, friends, and even total strangers." Or, to heighten the dramatic impact of this part, try, "We begin looking for ways of bringing joy and happiness to others. Family. Friends. Even total strangers.")
hand; even going (comma, not semicolon)
Really liked these parts:
happiness given to us through joy shared in shining eyes and thankful smiles sent our way.
(good details)
At that time of year we sacrifice self and become selfless. (nice word choices here: sacrifice self/selfless)
Overall, good essay. I'm giving four stars because I think there are a few awkward parts, but still, an enjoyable read. Thank you for sponsoring this contest...and good luck! LK
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Good essay, Knowledge. You've really showed what the Christmas spirit means to you: self-sacrifice and giving joy to all we meet. And I agree with you: the spirit of Christmas is in giving joy to others, passing on that spirit of our joyful, selfless God to those we meet.
I've got some specific suggestions to strengthen the essay:
As the Christmas season comes upon Christians something happens within us. (This read a little awkwardly to me. Maybe reword:
As the Christmas season arrives, something happens within Christians. Or you could put a comma after "christians".)
Be they our family, friends, and even total strangers. (fragment. Join it with the previous sentence. For example, "We begin looking for ways of bringing joy and happiness to others, be they our family, friends, and even total strangers." Or, to heighten the dramatic impact of this part, try, "We begin looking for ways of bringing joy and happiness to others. Family. Friends. Even total strangers.")
hand; even going (comma, not semicolon)
Really liked these parts:
happiness given to us through joy shared in shining eyes and thankful smiles sent our way.
(good details)
At that time of year we sacrifice self and become selfless. (nice word choices here: sacrifice self/selfless)
Overall, good essay. I'm giving four stars because I think there are a few awkward parts, but still, an enjoyable read. Thank you for sponsoring this contest...and good luck! LK
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
Comment from Slush Pile
Your description of the spirit of Christmas is very accurate. As a Christian, I find the spirit of the Lord swells within me bringing with it an inner JOY that defies words of description. Christmas is a time of giving and sharing for everyone, but the Christian is overwhelmingly aware of God's blessings at this time of year! Blessings to you and yours, Slush Pile
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Your description of the spirit of Christmas is very accurate. As a Christian, I find the spirit of the Lord swells within me bringing with it an inner JOY that defies words of description. Christmas is a time of giving and sharing for everyone, but the Christian is overwhelmingly aware of God's blessings at this time of year! Blessings to you and yours, Slush Pile
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
Comment from tati
At that time of year we sacrifice self and become selfless. When this happens we have a bit of heaven in our life. It gives us a chance to experience everlasting joy.
Hi, there,
Thank you for sharing your beautifully written "Spirit of Christmas". The above lines touched deeply my heart. How wonderful if we can reach out to others every day, not only during Christmas and Easter.
Good luck in the contest. (tati, Dec. 10, 2009)
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At that time of year we sacrifice self and become selfless. When this happens we have a bit of heaven in our life. It gives us a chance to experience everlasting joy.
Hi, there,
Thank you for sharing your beautifully written "Spirit of Christmas". The above lines touched deeply my heart. How wonderful if we can reach out to others every day, not only during Christmas and Easter.
Good luck in the contest. (tati, Dec. 10, 2009)
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello knowledge
Wonderful way to express how us Christians feel about Christmas--
Most of our good feelings come not from what we receive, but from the happiness given to us through joy shared.
Gert
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Hello knowledge
Wonderful way to express how us Christians feel about Christmas--
Most of our good feelings come not from what we receive, but from the happiness given to us through joy shared.
Gert
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
Comment from bnd-writenow
What a wonderful, simple reminder of the meaning of Christmas. You fulfill the contest requirements in this very joyful piece.
Here:
happiness given to us through joy shared in shinning eyes and thankful smiles sent our way
I suspect you meant "shining" eyes. LOL - I can't tell you how many people make that mistake on this site!!!
Thank you for this cheery, uplifting piece!
Good luck in the contest!
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What a wonderful, simple reminder of the meaning of Christmas. You fulfill the contest requirements in this very joyful piece.
Here:
happiness given to us through joy shared in shinning eyes and thankful smiles sent our way
I suspect you meant "shining" eyes. LOL - I can't tell you how many people make that mistake on this site!!!
Thank you for this cheery, uplifting piece!
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
Comment from AlvinTEthington
A good didactic essay about what it means to be Christian. I think you mean shining instead of shinning, but that is a minor concern. I think some examples would have made the essay less abstract and put a concrete face on helping others, but you were limited in your word count and you conveyed your message well.
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A good didactic essay about what it means to be Christian. I think you mean shining instead of shinning, but that is a minor concern. I think some examples would have made the essay less abstract and put a concrete face on helping others, but you were limited in your word count and you conveyed your message well.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2009
Comment from redrider6612
Amen, sister, so well said. I find myself smiling so much more at this time of year.
a couple suggestions:
We begin looking for ways of bringing joy and happiness to others.--passive; try: We look for ways to bring joy and happiness to others.
shinning eyes--"shining"
Wonderful job! Best wishes in the contest.
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Amen, sister, so well said. I find myself smiling so much more at this time of year.
a couple suggestions:
We begin looking for ways of bringing joy and happiness to others.--passive; try: We look for ways to bring joy and happiness to others.
shinning eyes--"shining"
Wonderful job! Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2009
Comment from eliz100
You are so right and I never thought of it like that. Getting presents is okay but giving them is wonderful. Your piece is well-written without errors that I can see.
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You are so right and I never thought of it like that. Getting presents is okay but giving them is wonderful. Your piece is well-written without errors that I can see.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2009