Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "storm warning"A book of Poetry & Writing
178 total reviews
Comment from Laidy
Lovely. Sad, but lovely. Interesting. The sea claims yet another but only in body for the souls rise and fly with warm eyes and open arms. Lovely write.
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Lovely. Sad, but lovely. Interesting. The sea claims yet another but only in body for the souls rise and fly with warm eyes and open arms. Lovely write.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This has the authentic sound one would expect to be written by one like yourself who is acquainted with real seamen - and may be one. You present the storm at sea with frightening reality. My best to you, Jeanie Mercer
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This has the authentic sound one would expect to be written by one like yourself who is acquainted with real seamen - and may be one. You present the storm at sea with frightening reality. My best to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from Carole Rosa
DeepWater, This is an amazing poem. It has seaman glamor and adventurous suspense. Very nicely written and I truly enjoyed your poetic talent. Carole
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DeepWater, This is an amazing poem. It has seaman glamor and adventurous suspense. Very nicely written and I truly enjoyed your poetic talent. Carole
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from Jewell McChesney
but someone has caught me, carries me high, warm smiling faces with glows in their eyes
I have come home now, at rest in this place; the Sea, and its Sailors, we sail in God's grace.
I could feel the peace and then the panic. I love water and its messages to me when near. God speaks in rhythmic waves and is always there even in the storm.
I am thankful to find your write today. Thank you for sharing.
Jewell
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but someone has caught me, carries me high, warm smiling faces with glows in their eyes
I have come home now, at rest in this place; the Sea, and its Sailors, we sail in God's grace.
I could feel the peace and then the panic. I love water and its messages to me when near. God speaks in rhythmic waves and is always there even in the storm.
I am thankful to find your write today. Thank you for sharing.
Jewell
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from Domino 2
With respect, I think this poem would benefit from shorter lines and being split into stanzas rather than the current somewhat formidable block format.
Good expression of your dire situation and last loving flashing memories before death and being taken to Heaven by the angels.
I sure hope that's what happens to us all in the 'end'.
Cheers, Ray
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With respect, I think this poem would benefit from shorter lines and being split into stanzas rather than the current somewhat formidable block format.
Good expression of your dire situation and last loving flashing memories before death and being taken to Heaven by the angels.
I sure hope that's what happens to us all in the 'end'.
Cheers, Ray
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from Fleedleflump
A very gentle interpretation of a doomed voyage and the range of emotions experienced as the end comes and goes. Your light touch wiht language works well in this piece, drawing us along on the sad but ultimately triumphant tale.
Mike
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A very gentle interpretation of a doomed voyage and the range of emotions experienced as the end comes and goes. Your light touch wiht language works well in this piece, drawing us along on the sad but ultimately triumphant tale.
Mike
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from Quire's Gal
this poem has a lot of very good and strong imagery. You made me feel as if I were inside the poem experiencing what the person is going through.
Excellent rhymes throuout and the poems flows smoothly.
Safe to say I won't be going out on a boat for a while.
Cheers and be well, Drusilla1
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this poem has a lot of very good and strong imagery. You made me feel as if I were inside the poem experiencing what the person is going through.
Excellent rhymes throuout and the poems flows smoothly.
Safe to say I won't be going out on a boat for a while.
Cheers and be well, Drusilla1
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from James Dooney
This is actually pretty cool ! I can see the association between the words and the pics here quite easily ! Well done ! I like this !
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This is actually pretty cool ! I can see the association between the words and the pics here quite easily ! Well done ! I like this !
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Deepwater,
Nice piece of poetry seems to be coming out of the depth of your heart and beautifully depicting the sea and its hazards!
Wording is simple, impressive and perfectly matching the theme.
Smooth and captivating flow throughout the poem.
Lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
"I have come home now, at rest in this place; the Sea, and its Sailors, we sail in God's grace."
Excellent!
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Hello Deepwater,
Nice piece of poetry seems to be coming out of the depth of your heart and beautifully depicting the sea and its hazards!
Wording is simple, impressive and perfectly matching the theme.
Smooth and captivating flow throughout the poem.
Lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
"I have come home now, at rest in this place; the Sea, and its Sailors, we sail in God's grace."
Excellent!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from fairy77
Yes, indeed nature can wreck havoc. I enjoyed this one and felt it was very well done. You look like a nature lover and I enjoyed the piece. Nice!beth fairy77.
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Yes, indeed nature can wreck havoc. I enjoyed this one and felt it was very well done. You look like a nature lover and I enjoyed the piece. Nice!beth fairy77.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014