Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Part 4 Chapter 5"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from NaughtieScribe
This chapter makes the reader really feel the family connections in an organic way. I felt like I too was visiting with Troy and his parents. The way you make the warmth jump out without it being cliched is impressive.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2012
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This chapter makes the reader really feel the family connections in an organic way. I felt like I too was visiting with Troy and his parents. The way you make the warmth jump out without it being cliched is impressive.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate you taking time to read.
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As I've said before, I bookmarked this story because it's good, and I am seriously enjoying the read. Thanks for sharing. Seriously, thanks.
Comment from rzubey
The family scenes are nice, but I'm still wondering what purpose they serve. Are they character development for Troy? Do they show that Troy has powerful people working for him. I"m sorry if I just sound harsh. We already know that Troy and his dad are on the trail of Anna. That's all.
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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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The family scenes are nice, but I'm still wondering what purpose they serve. Are they character development for Troy? Do they show that Troy has powerful people working for him. I"m sorry if I just sound harsh. We already know that Troy and his dad are on the trail of Anna. That's all.
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Comment Written 07-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
Finally we get a look at What Troy does for a living. I never guessed that heowned the bookstore. I thought there were building inspectors who inspected construction work as it progressed and had to give their okay on it.
No spags.
Roberta
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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Finally we get a look at What Troy does for a living. I never guessed that heowned the bookstore. I thought there were building inspectors who inspected construction work as it progressed and had to give their okay on it.
No spags.
Roberta
Comment Written 16-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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He is also a civil engineer.
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, this is a good chapter as always. Lucky that Troy and his parents seem to be in the know on who to call upon when needed. Keep writing for us.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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Barbara, this is a good chapter as always. Lucky that Troy and his parents seem to be in the know on who to call upon when needed. Keep writing for us.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kindness and support.
Comment from MS Writer
Great read. I'm enjoying the storyline and anxious to find out how Anna has fared and where she is. You are keeping us in suspense. Troy sounds like a fine man. I'm now heading for the next chapter.
Michele
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Great read. I'm enjoying the storyline and anxious to find out how Anna has fared and where she is. You are keeping us in suspense. Troy sounds like a fine man. I'm now heading for the next chapter.
Michele
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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I am so sorry you are reading these when there are no bonus points attached. Thank you.
Comment from nora arjuna
hi barb, thought i'd check on you during this brief stop-ver. this bridge chapter is nicely done. i'll check again later on. :)
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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hi barb, thought i'd check on you during this brief stop-ver. this bridge chapter is nicely done. i'll check again later on. :)
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and I appreciate you stoping by.
Comment from pickthorn
The search for Anna goes on. A new character appears in this chapter. Everett, the private investigator, is on the case and has taken the lead in the search for Anna. This story is well written and the interest is building. Great dialogue and story.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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The search for Anna goes on. A new character appears in this chapter. Everett, the private investigator, is on the case and has taken the lead in the search for Anna. This story is well written and the interest is building. Great dialogue and story.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from whispersofthesoul
hiya,
i havent read many chapters of 'lonely hearts meet' but once again have wrote an excellent chapter that is beautifully crafted, i love your dialogue it is very real. my only problem with all dialogues is that it can never represent real life-how we talk over each other interupt each other etc
any way great story
keep it up
kelly x
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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hiya,
i havent read many chapters of 'lonely hearts meet' but once again have wrote an excellent chapter that is beautifully crafted, i love your dialogue it is very real. my only problem with all dialogues is that it can never represent real life-how we talk over each other interupt each other etc
any way great story
keep it up
kelly x
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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True, I do my best to make dialogue natural, but you're right, it impossible. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
Dear Barbara, i 'm sorry to have missed many chapters of this intriguing story. I am a bit lost now but i found this chapter enjoyable. I hope to make time to read previous posts so as to catch up. kudos
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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Dear Barbara, i 'm sorry to have missed many chapters of this intriguing story. I am a bit lost now but i found this chapter enjoyable. I hope to make time to read previous posts so as to catch up. kudos
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. If you have any specific questions about the story, I will try to help.
Comment from tango494
Wow, is all I can say. I wish I could make my plot and dialogue flow as smoothly as you do. As I said before this is not my normal reading material but I can help but get caught up in your story. You are a gifted writer.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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Wow, is all I can say. I wish I could make my plot and dialogue flow as smoothly as you do. As I said before this is not my normal reading material but I can help but get caught up in your story. You are a gifted writer.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.